Dc: The Brother of Superman

LV 10

Gunts92

it's really not good, there's a lot of stuff wrong, it already seems written by an AI (lack of dialogue) then the characters are not consistent with themselves which is a big problem for a author. then a dungeon, seriously, you really need that in dc, there are so many ways to nerf a character. I would say that the beginning is good, after all is good to throw away

LV 2

Nicolas_Bahamondes

Well, the interactions of the protagonist with his family and the rest are very poorly managed and the system is redundant. You should have chosen a fantasy world from some game or novel, the DC world doesn't suit your perspective.

LV 1

IINeeRoII

-Demasiados errores ortográficos -En algunos capítulos hablas de la importancia de los secretos, pero cuentas todo lo relacionado a tus poderes a tus padres... para mi eso es un gran No. Con la cantidad de seres que pueden leer la mente en ese mundo, da la impresión que simplemente no le importa su familia al contarles todo. - Usas mucho las estadisticas en cada capitulo. Mucho de lo escrito es Número y niveles del sistema. - Usas IA? - Creo firmemente que falta desarrollo de sus habilidades , el hecho de que empieze 15 años despues y solo pueda usar magia de viento... Es una falta de desarrollo en el esquema de magia que deseas usar. - Las relaciones se sienten monótonas, creo que es la falta de diálogo. - Veo que actualizas con frecuencia eso se aprecia. - Falta detallar la construcción del mundo y del entorno. Sería apropiado poner fechas y descripciones de donde se encuentra o localizaciones que faciliten al lector la inmersión a la lectura.

LV 2

Mastarius

bs systm with stats point, not gonna bother tell all the other problems this is a no go for a superman fanfic

LV 14

king_Gurra10

I love the story I can't wait for more chapters and there are no major issue on the story its very interesting and I enjoy the story

LV 3

Bill_Smith_2424

Who tf put dungeon stystem in marvel or dc

LV 15

craze_8093

while there are many typos I like the story so far and can't wait for more. keep up the good work.recommend a intro so that you can capture more people's attention past the title

LV 13

war_craft

The story is good for now hope you don't drop

LV 5

Everworld12

Really love that the mc is mature and fits well with the hero concept without becoming manipulate.. I really don't get why people want the mc to be evil and manipulate those around them 😒 😑..mc is good plus his brother is boy scout and parents are good, why would the mc be evil...!?! Super man would spot any lies a mile away...it's better to be truth full... the only thing that bothers me is he is dense not believing the heroins like because he believes fate would pair them with others and not him..

LV 4

Elon_Husk

i just finished reading the lates chapter and it was great. it was a little rocky at the start, i had some complaints. but as i got further into the story it got better

LV 1

Oleg_Nikitin

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LV 4

gabale100

A very interesting and pleasant story, it's a shame that the chapters take so long to be published, but I still really like the concept of this FF

LV 15

cooper_lehnert

couldn't stop reading it great book keep it up 👍🏼

LV 1

Daniel_Alejandro_W

La mejor historia de DC que haya visto, me encanta. El sistema es un poco confuso pero el aprendizaje de magia arregló todo, esperando el o los emparejamientos.