Blessings ...... of my life..

LV 10

texascann

I've read 5 chapters so far. In Chapter 1, characters are described well. They are further formed in the next two chapters. I loved the Cafe name- Frosty! Kk In Chapter 4, A great description of the birthday party. Liked Mr. Gibson's light, happy character, and playfulness. Also, the fight between Ariena and Charlotte was so well described. I liked how when Ariena started playing Charlotte and her cronies "put down" game, Charlotte became physical and pushed Ariena. Good plot. I did notice some grammatical errors and misspelled words but they in no way obstructed the plot in the book. Great job!

LV 6

Webern

So far this is too good. Its a light story. Both of the main lead have made a circle around them not letting the other one to enter it. FL is guarding her heart all the time and is working hard to complete her dreams. The story worth reading... Try it

LV 2

neaht3

The author has invested a lot of time in this work, and it is visible. I like how the characters are contrasting with each other. Some are kind, others drip poison from every word they say, third can be rather neutral or biased! It's so colorful. The author takes time to develop the characters personality-wise but also attempts to psychologically assess them or the least to reason their choices. Why something was done, why another thing was not done - the rationality is kept even within irrational choices the main characters did. I like that. I would say that grammar-wise it still has some way to go but, to be honest, many novels I have read do have some work to do on the grammar. Therefore, paid authors do hire editors and proofreaders! So, I would not criticize the grammar. English is understandable and delivers the emotional parts very well. My only advice is to work a bit on the world-building. The author does mention now and then what world Ariena lives in, how she grew up, and how she sees the world - however, this is more of a psychological assessment of the character. If you invest in world-building, you can also reap some fruits of a dynamic plot. World-building can open opportunities for some really unknown or mysterious situations where you can 'test' your developed characters. However, I am not a person who is into romance genre that much. So, it might be just my obsession with world-building '_' So, do not take me to heart. Probably a person who is obsessed with romance would tell me to shut the heck up hahaha. Conclusion. The author is strong when it comes to the character's design and psychological explanation for situations, choices, feelings, etc. The story pace is good though... in the beginning, I felt it was a bit dragged but it had its reason as some predisposition had to be laid for later chapters. Therefore, this is not a critique. However, the world background is a bit weak in my opinion. I would definitely try to bring some meat to the boney settings as the way it is, the chapter might lose its shine after another 40 chapters. However, one cannot judge as it is not clear how long the author plans it to be. In my opinion, I would try to bring in a bit of the world development, what the environment they live in can bring? How can you manipulate it? Would it change your character or would your character change the environment? Hm. Given the fact you are into psychological things, I am very sure that world background would only benefit you.

LV 10

Readoholic

I am loving it.. a lot. Please keep posting new chapters. I think this story is wonderful and the character description is wonderful. Story pace is also perfect and very well written. I am sucker for contemporary romance genre so yo got me hooked up to this novel already. :)

LV 4

Daisy_T

From the chapters I've read, I was able to see what a brilliant job the author did in the story. The story is well explained and not confusing. Looking forward to the face slaps and Ariene's clapback ALSO the love development between Ariene and Andrew #AriAnd ship must sail...I'll think of a better ship name later😂.. Anyway as an author you've really inspired me..Thank you for that💜💜... Keeping it safe in my library😊

LV 4

NotUse

So far, so good. I love the introduction, everything was clearly explained. It is not a cliche type of novel and the plot is really interesting and captivating. The pace of the story development is excellent, not too fast and not too slow. I did not notice any error or typos while reading this novel nor did it lack any description at all since I was able to portray the looks and emotions of the characters in a few sentences and paragraphs. The same goes with the scenarios and events. I had seven chapters so far. Good luck to the author!

LV 3

minho_Shiny

That's an interesting story and the author did a very good job by giving an intro and explaining clearly....I liked how the story went in a flow. The author described everything well. However, I would like to tell that there are few misspellings, which can be corrected by proofreading. Except that, I liked the overall story and author did a very good job. Keep up the good work dear author.. I will definitely give 5/5 for your hardword and to encourage you.

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