Multiverse: War Thunder System

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Kaiimei

Okay, I'm gonna just be upfront about this: You need to get ahold of a beta, someone who will read through the chapter and make it flow better. There's way too many parts that either are just outright mistakes, or do things that you really needed to stop and think "Does this make sense in-universe?" The first major thing was Hanns shooting first at the Atlesians. He had absolutely no way to know what they were there for, aside from that it was likely for him. Whether they were there to investigate, to capture him, to kill him or simply to confirm that he did in fact exist, he couldn't possibly know, and yet he held no hesitation in shooting at them and killing a large amount of people without remorse or even a moment of real thought. The characters do that a lot, they very quickly reach the correct answer and nothing even remotely dissuades them from that answer. You need to put yourself in their position and give some serious thought as to whether that conclusion is the conclusion that they should have reached at that moment. As for the story itself, it's an oddball but I like that, the idea of a living tank with a game system, that's a fun story idea that I haven't read in a story before. A bit silly sometimes and picturing exactly what Hanns is doing can be hard since you seem to prefer more vague terms and broad strokes for the combat, but that's fine.

LV 14

Spriz731

Jsut for the fact that its a war thunder system/fic i will give you a complete 5 star rating becouse i love/hate the game as well so keep up the good work and May we see more

LV 14

ViolettAbyss

5 stars didn't even start to read yet but the name Hans and the idea alone deserve a 5 star. Don't drop and do what you want with the book author it definitely is something many will read

LV 13

XenonNoble

Very interesting idea. Can’t wait to see how the story develops. Quick info: MC gets transported to RWBY (1st world), as a tank and has to upgrade himself through points earned after combat (literally like War Thunder).

LV 2

Translator_sama

bro you had me at warthunder and fanfiction. never knew som1 had ballz to make!

LV 14

Harem_police

an excellent experience when reading, the characters sometimes meta and reach an answer you wouldn't normally reach, but that's okay, include vague and broad combat description and its pretty good, p.s. he's a tank. its awsome.

LV 14

GreyKnights

if your looking for a good tank fan fic you have come to the right place, too bad its just war thunder system if it was just a tank system think of a baneblade from warhammer 40k lol that be epic

LV 4

Darth_Avarice

I remember searching for some sort of War Thunder fanfiction years ago. I'm glad that the first one I actually got to read was well written.

LV 15

FoolishPanda_25

really unique and entertaining to read I want to see how far you go and the different experiences that you can go through with different characters.

LV 13

Alloy101

This is a great story which I am sad to see laid to rest.

LV 4

LesendeTaube

It was great while it lasted, I loved the idea and I hope sometime I will be able to see you try it again, even though I know you probably won‘t.

LV 4

Joe_momma

There is only one problem. The tank has yet to actually go into the multiverse.

LV 2

Raka_Wiratama

yo dude this thing pretty good aint gonna lie

LV 4

LilKitty

5 stars, no changing that. I like unique stories that are super rare or are done for the first time. This here has a very gigantic potential to be really popular.

LV 2

Hans237

Comrade, I have been looking for novel like this for a long time, you know. You’re just like a savior for my boredom mind right now, mate, thank you so much!

LV 3

antonio_montenegro

I really liked the story, but I'll have to abandon it, I don't speak and understand English. But if you upload this to another platform I will read it, if I can translate it obviously

LV 15

holosagewolf32

this is glorious, one of the most odd ball things ive ever had the pleasure of reading and one of the most entertaining! please post more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

LV 2

BorosVSGoku

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