摘要
A full dive VR game has been released, A New World. While it is not the only VR game in the world, this one has one advantage over others:
Being able to play it even while sleeping.
Like one would think, many people jumped to try and claim the first headsets. Mostly gamers, but some other types of people too. Our MC, Eldrian, is naturally a gamer who could not wait but to try it.
Quickly he and everyone else who bought the headsets found themselves in a world, not just a game. While realism is nice and all, the amount they were given was just too much...
Players started taking emotional tolls from playing the game, and when the company made a shocking announcement. This was amplified.
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Chapter Length: 1500-2000 words (Chapters 1-390ish)
Chapter Length: 1200-1400 words (Chapters 390-?)
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寫檢討In short, this novel follows a in the beginning mostly average person in his adventure into the VR-game A New World (ANW). The story includes several deep topics, from AI over what is life to psychological topics. It also has a slow progress in the overarching story progression. Many different things happen and there is a good mix of action, adventure and training both in-game and out-of-game with an in-depth magic system. The MC does really not get any rest. ––– detailed with mild spoilers ––– Writing Quality: Some minor errors which do not hamper comprehension. Action scenes are exciting and even the complex topics are understandable (if you do not rush read through the chapters). Story Development: The MC and the whole story makes slow but constant progress, which I find a much more realistic flow for a VR Novel. There was only one big timeskip in about 500 chapters, but I did not miss any. Where would they come from? Games are designed to be exciting and the MC does more than what the average player would. This novel also developes the real life story, which is rare. Real life does not stop just because there is an in-game event and it is the same the other way arround. The different encounters and events/quest are always exciting and the whole feel of the VR-Game which is too real for what a game is supposed to be is integrated well. New storylines are always introduced in a sensible way and up till now none of them were abandoned. Character Design: All characters have depth to them but backgrounds are not just dumped on the reader and thus only told, when a character asks or feels the need to give info. This means, that the reader has to think about how characters act and interact to get a comprehensive picture of the characters. Update Stability: Very good. One to two chapters a day with even length. Small pauses only when significant problems occur. Direct reader interaction from small backlog. World Background: The most realistic VR novel I have seen. Both real life and the game world are resonable and thought out. Cool and interesting magic system which does require thinking by the reader and rereading of past chapters after long pauses in reading. Compared to go "Mages are too op": Magic system keeps this detailed description which was only present in the early chapters of MATO. 500 chapters in this novel might be about at 100 chapters of MATO by developement of MC.
Hello everyone: I thought it might be around time for me to do a new review of my story as it has developed far more and become so much more than I ever originally thought/imagined. (Especially being constantly in the top 100-150 was not something I ever imagined) Let's start with a, not sure what to call it. You will realize that my first few chapters have quite a few cliches or tropes. I will admit I relied on them to get started, slowly I moved away and now I harshly look at cliches and will really debate if I wish to add any or not. If I do decide to do so, I will always attempt to do it in a way that will fit naturally in the world and story. On that topic, this story is not a quick one diving into a plot and having the main character have a strong goal right from the start. Eldrian is just a person who was interested in this new type of game, and naturally he is our MC because he has some natural unknown talents. (You wouldn't want to follow an average joe, or would you?) He is not OP, he is not weak. Rather, he is. He grows with time and he learns with time. He forgets often and he does stupid and brilliant things almost at the same time. He is human, and I do my best to reflect that he is. I do my best to reflect this with all my characters, even the non-humans. Next, the story idea. It started as a more realistic game world, and become an 'alternate' world instead. It is most certainly still a game story and the world is indeed virtual and a game, but I do not focus on game elements. They are there, there are stats, there are weapons, spells, and item descriptions. In the heat of combat, they are not brought onto the page. However, I do not neglect them. I always run my spreadsheets and do calculations to determine what effects what spell/attack will have. The stats are important, but I feel pushing them into a fight is distracting. So I almost never do, barring a few unique enemies who do not possess normal vitals. This brings me to my magic system, I get that many feel it is similar to Mages are too OP. However, I started my story before reading that one, and I was at around chapter 30 when MTOP(?) reached chapter 100; when I started reading it. I won't mention it more than this, but I want to make it clear that while it might feel(read) the same, mine is nowhere close. You should realize this after (not sure) chapter 50 maybe, chapter 100 for sure. Magic is hard, and it stays that way constantly. It is a constant pursuit of new and difficult knowledge and skills. Nothing comes easy, everything takes time and effort. On that note, much of my writing dives into these topics in detail. I do not glance at details, but I also do my best to never repeat details. One spell might take one, two, maybe even three or more chapters to learn, but the next spell won't take more than a paragraph unless it is very different. With this said, I also want to mention that the IRL world is constantly intertwined with the story. It is not forgotten, and it is part of the lore and background. After all, ANW was created with a very specific aim, and that aim is one a company in the real world has. Next, a few things I see are often asked/questioned. Romance: Some, but not really. I have introduced a romance early on, but I never really developed it as I am a stranger to the topic of romance. (NTR, Harem): No on both Rewriting earlier chapters: I simply do not have the time nor will that really work, I have however gone through and fixed the obvious spelling and grammar mistakes. Pacing: It is slow, I won't lie. As I said earlier, I go into details and things are constantly happening. There is almost no time skips. By chapter 500 only 6 months have passed, Eldrian is around level 30 (won't give precise level) and Tier 4. However, levels do work differently in this game compared to normal worlds. The death penalty you will also find is really harsh, and my story is not one where the MC somehow never dies. (never made much sense to me, especially since dying in a game is normal for everyone) ------- Side note: I dive deeply into topics such as the emotional impact of events, philosophy, and realism. My aim with my magic system is and has always been to bridge reality and fantasy in a 'fantastical' way. You will come to find with time the approach I took for this, I hope you come to love it as I do. If not, I understand. ------- I think this is a long enough overview (almost a chapter's length), hopefully, it can help people decide if they want to give it a try or not.
As of chapter 47 Writing Quality: 4/5 Some spelling and grammer mistakes throughout the story. However this does not spoil the story and can be easily understood despite the minor mistakes. Story Development: 5/5 Despite only being 47 chapters so far, the story development is interesting. The fact that the author plays the role of VR extremely prominently is nice, but it would be more interesting if the MC backstory was shown as well. The battle scenes are done really well in this novel. The fact that the intro of the game (trailer) gave the storyline a strong foothold is interesting as other authors tend to not use such things. This is very unique to this story so i give the author props for implementing this unique dynamic. Character Design: 4/5 This takes into account that the novel is only 47 chapters long so far. There is little background information on the MC. How well to do his family is, etc. (there is some information but not alot). The side characters are not really evident at this point besides the female lead (potential love interest). Only some names are being thrown around here and there without any interesting or distinct facts about them. Updating Stability: 5/5 I do not know the stability of the update as I read all 47 chapters in a day. I just place 5/5 as I consider it stable until further notice. World Background: 5/5 The trialer of the game provided a good base for the VR world background. This is done better than most other novels. However, since this is a relatively new novel, there is a lot of room for world background expansion. I hooe the author can continue on this path as the expanaion of the world's background is exoanding at a nice pace. Overall: 4.6/5 The story is really interesting and one that I will continue to follow. This is one of the better newer novels on this site. I think people should pick this up to read at least until this point. The MC can be considered overpowered in some manner (compared to other players), but the content is still really interesting. Hope the author continues to work hard on this novel 👍
I very much enjoy the world and the mystery of magic and the MC trying to figure out how it works, but I find myself frequently frustrated by the stupidity of the MC. Also his simping and beta willingness to always take a back seat is not my cup of tea. He falls in love with an NPC. what does this actually mean? it means he doesn't try in sparring matches. He lets her use magic and skills while he doesn't so this love is really him just allowing himself to get beat up and her enjoying beating him up. He never seems to try in matches, which is another reason why the tournament arc killed the novel for me. Tournament arcs are normally bad, but here he takes a back seat for buddies, avoids what he's best at in individual, and then doesn't even try in his matches cause he wants to know what dying feels like. He's just too pathetic to be likable to me. all his greatest moments are just different ways of hating himself and committing suicide for others he cares about more than himself. He's got issues. He even refuses to properly equip himself because he's too busy equipping everyone else because he's not as important as others.
The idea is good, but it has critical flaws: To begin : -in this perfect world there is no industrial espionage, a company can maintain a research monopoly for decades without the government or another company having knowledge. -Even having knowledge of technology, the government does not move to acquire or apply pressure, even though it would have popular support. -In that world contracts are perfect and can even annul human rights or law. These are just a few of the points.
I rarely write a review and I can say confidently that I’ve never written more than 5 reviews. But I will write one for this story ‘cause I really like it. So far, there’s no problem with the grammar. The story itself is very good and I really like how the story is progressing. Not too fast but also not too slow. I see a lot of potential but I’m also afraid that this story might not last long. After all, very well written stories are, most of the times, hard to continue. The author has to keep the expected quality consistent and most of the times. And if he couldn’t do it, the story would, of course, lose viewers. Anyways, I’m just saying that this novel is really good. I hope the author would keep on working to make this story better.
There are a couple of things that don't make sense... the mc shouldn't be that fat... He bikes to university every day and because he is at university he wouldn't spend anything on takeouts or tons of junk food to save money. It was also mentioned he didn't spend money like water and always saved what he earned. Boosting the fact that this makes little sense... To me, it just feels like you made him like that as a joke to try and make it funny. Leading to this being extremely forced... I'm not trying to hate, I'm just stating the fact that it just doesn't make sense giving the background you bought him upon. I also feel like him being a "chubby" elf is going to be a reoccurring joke throughout until he slims down from the training. For me, this is just going to annoy tf outta me as I will always think back to this and how it was forced anyway leading to all mentions of it just annoying me more each time. If that makes sense? I hope this doesn't happen constantly with the forced try at humour as it would be extremely disappointing. If you want humour it will flow naturally in the story. There is no need to force it as it will just bring down the story as a whole. Oh, another thing is his chosen name. Like wtf? Who cares what it means in Chinese? He is an elf... chose an elf name. His own name Eldrian? Is more fcking elfy than Haru... If he was a human I wouldn't mind him having the name Haru but he is not. He is an elf... It's like the mc is a dragon and calling it Haru. It doesn't fit at all. The immersive feel of the book is again compromised by doing this. I am assuming the Author is chinses? Again this is not hate so don't take it as that. It's just you are writing about an elf so why give it a human name? That sort of thing. So far it isn't looking like a great book but I haven't read a lot yet. I will read further and change the review depending on how it reads later.
Great story with a realistic take on a “realistic VR game” book. The MC, Eldrian, starts his journey slowly by training and adapting to the new world in the game. Battle scenes are gruesome and, due to the realism of the game, cause players problems seen in real life battles like PTSD and trauma. Alternatively, the realism in the game causes the MC problems in his non-virtual life as well, like forgetting he can’t regenerate stamina after overworking his body. The story develops well and the MC isn’t immediately overpowered. The NPCs have clear personalities and aren’t just background noise to the players. Overall, this is one of the best VR-game novels I’ve read on Webnovel (and trust me, I’ve read A LOT of them.) This novel is one of the ones that feels most true to what might happen should we actually manage to develop highly realistic VR games in the future. I can’t wait to see where the author takes this story!
Up to: Chapter 470 This is, by far, one of the best-written novels on this site, and it’s hard for me to find things I dislike about it, excluding two decisions Eldrian made that I found highly disagreeable, but I won’t go over that since I don’t want to dissuade you from trying this amazing novel for yourself and it’s not a huge deal at the end of the day. The MC is overall very competently written, and has a distinct personality not found in many of the bland OP protagonists that litter the site. Sometimes he messes up, but I prefer it that way as it shows he isn’t a mindless perfection robot. This is doubly so since the author made sure to give him some real, actual flaws that hinder him in ways he doesn’t realize and that the author doesn’t specially highlight. Even if it isn’t especially common that it happens explicity, his flaws are pervasive in all the ways he acts and he acts in character very consistently, though he does change over time. The only other novels on this site I’ve read that share similarly well-written MCs would be Supreme Magus and The Oracle Paths, and it’s a huge breath of fresh air. Other than the MC, the world and magic system in particular is super well thought-out, and most of the time unanswered questions are not left as loose ends. The novel is a bit of a slow burn, but it’s superbly executed; that extra time between improvement isn’t filler, but instead juicy bits of lore, IRL stuff, third-person tidbits, training, and tasks, with only a couple of minor timeskips. We’re almost at 500 chapters, and not even half a year has passed because we’re pretty much following everything Eldrian does in its entirety (again, minus a few time skips). This is a huge plus for me, as I really hate a majority of mid-story time skips even if they’re really well done and a one-time thing like in One Piece. Either way, I strongly recommend that you at least try to trad this hidden gem, I highly doubt you’ll regret it.
One of the best books on this app. MC isn't an overpowered monster. Great character development. It really reminds me of when I first started playing MMORPGS .
I put this rating because this main character is too stupid. Everything is fine when he grows over time in the game, in training. He may be wrong there, but not in a real situation. Namely, when concluding a contract with a company (chapter 164-165).He is too shocked, has not enough information, has not hired a lawyer, has agreed to a small salary. It made me write this review. It's not 1 star because I don't want to write another one with 5 stars. After all, the author has created an amazing work and this is a fact. So I'm going to read on anyway.
揭示劇透the chapter 447 make me go from completely love to completely hating this novel even if this fic is probably a 3.5. the motive is in the chapter in question(447)mc have his soul intertwined with a alicorn and they are tied to each other forever,it's extremely ridiculous how author make mc go for it without thinking in the consequences, mc is literally marry a horse(it's already who that the alicorn parents have this bond). I find it ridiculous to think that in the future his future lover will never have a relationship more intimate with him than a horse and the same go for the horse. I think author in trying to give mc a good pet only make unecessary drama in doing in this way
Fantastic novel, thoroughly enjoying the read. It might be slow for some but I truly enjoy the pacing. The MC is believable and not OP from the get-go which truly annoys me. Great read, so far, keep it up!
Another full immersive online game where the character gets progressively stronger in his own way. However, the way it tackles mental pain and the idea of an NPC dying is much better than many novels. Currently looking forward to where the author takes Eldrian/Haru in the future. By 20 chapters in the novel picks up really well and can make you invested into the characters. I wish there was more than one chapter daily
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Love it. pace is the only red light indicator. this novel is ambitious project, and i hope the author has the stamina to do it justice in reaching a satisfying conclusion .
the depth of thought that went into the world building is amazing. many have tried to tie a game world to the real one, but this takes it to a beautiful level. there is a solid reason the game world is so realistic and the struggle feels as heavy as it should to make the revelations really shocking. the pace can feel long but the payoff is worth it and the relationships are reflective of that. kudos to this story and wish I could blast it with gifts!
I think this is quickly becoming my favorite book on here. The story itself is insanely good, and it continues to amaze me the more i read. the detail that has went into this story is ridiculous, much respect to the author for being able to tie so many things into this story. thank you, cant wait for more!
I have read some or all of hundreds of novels on webnovel. This is one of about 20 that have had me anxiously awaiting the next chapter. The other books are decent reads but this one has me hooked. Extraordinary world building with a pretty unique magic system. Character building and progression is exceptional. World building is focused on progression of the world's concept of magic and is unique beyond words imo. Right now this is my number 1 book and it kills me when the writer's real life interferes with chapter releases, but they always keep us informed.
作者 Breuno
Hello there 👋 ( be aware this review contain some slight spoiler but no major ) Okay so normally, I don’t write review very often, it’s my first to be exact Why could you expect from this book ? Pros : World backgroung : -Your typical western fantasy world with goblin, dwarfs, elves, but with many different races in the same species ( moon elves, sun elves, wood elves... ) Also the map is massive with tons of empire containig even more kingdom, at a point I loose myself sometimes. The lore of the world has not been fully explored but it will come in time... Character development : -First our MC is one of the most human like I’ve ever read, he has anger, embarrassment and all the emotions which define who we are. He is also a lamba human, not some son of mafia gang and all. He will passe several ordeals which will make him mature and affirm his will as well as his goal. He is a 19 man, little bit introvert and clueless in relationships but definitely not your typical nerd who is more dense than mercury. He will open more to others with the game and even through there is no romance until now, there is one main ship which is only waiting to sail. Story development : -*Spoiler* Our MC arrive in a world where a beast tide is about to rase every empire, estimed in the next couple of years if not months, so it’s a rush to becoming strong with a player community completely disorganised. * End of Spoiler* Character design : -There are several others side characters well made, they didn’t feel bland like i’ve seen in some other novel. *Spoiler* Some will die, some will lives, and the despair of the MC will be fully felt.* End of Spoiler* Plot armour : ( what i’m considering plot armour is heaven sent opportunity, like he has nothing to do. Because he will have oppotunity but at a cost he is not willing to shoulder if he was to have a redo) -There is little to no plot armor in this story, the first one will be he met a powerful guy ( at the start ) but this guy will train him like a normal soldier, not like a family heirloom and giving him all the secret techniques he don’t even has. The guy is powerful but only in the city he is. Also the path of the MC will not be a smooth one *Spoiler* , he will choose a very difficult race which magic is blocked so he will experiment many way to unseal it, also he will use every advantage his race talent give him, so if you kinda like jack of all trades it’s for you. Also regarding how he can use magic, he will not have the final solution from the beginning, he will experiment many different way, some wrong, some half-wrong and he is still not accustomed to his final form Also with these experiment, he will become quite special, not overpowered but he has the potential to be* End of spoiler*. Cons : -The pacing of the novel may be boring for some people, it’s a day to day pacing with IRL elements ( not massive but good enough to understand he is not only playing). Also,he will not become OP in tens of chapter. I’m currently at chapter 196 and he is still at the bottom of the barrel, just slightly stonger than normal player and normal soldier. Also the strength mesurement can be quit confusing for beast and human alike: There is your typical level which you gain by killing ennmies and it give you stat. There is also the job (like swordsman and magician) wich are in Tier ( from 1 to 10, each more difficult to pass with a qualitative change at Tier 5) it also give stats And beast have an other factor( player also has it if they choose a difficult race, powerful advantage but the sytem give no help ), the strength of their body : normal animal->magical beast->demonic beast->bloodline beast->ancient beast-> mythical beast So you have to understand strength is like : body strength*job*level with each less important tha the other : body strength>job>level for example a human tier 7 mage level 50 will be completely destroy by a mythical beast Tier 4 level 30 ( also beast don’t have job just tier) ( maybe not but i’m giving an example ) And finnaly the biggest problem this novel has for me is..... NOT ENOUGH CHAPTERS 🤬😡 (Even through the chapter are really lenghty)