HP: Lord Of Seven Sins

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Vector_Neo

Everything seems good until now so do keep up the good work. I've liked it so far but I do hope Hermione isn't the FL. I feel like Luna or Daphne or even Fleur will go will with Alex's personality. Although Fleur will be my last choice.

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IINeeRoII

A rather scattered fiction in reality. (Note that I only read up to chapter 30) - To summarize the protagonist: "I think of something difficult to do and I do it easily". -An important point is that the characters are not explicitly defined at any time, one must imagine how they are without including any description (Tip: this is a Harry Potter fic, which includes characters that grow while the school years go by and not here nothing is described). -In the first year it is only said that he gathers several books but his level of knowledge is not taken into account. Just creating that game should be a revolution for the wizarding world, as it includes: Mind and Consciousness Transference, runes, advanced wand lore (I think the game detects the owner's signature? or something similar), illusion, He transmits messages by means of the tablet (wouldn't this method replace owls?), advanced alchemy, transfiguration and then space magic (teleportation). -He is a protagonist capable of doing so many things and he is still in his first year, but nothing is explained, he just does it and one is left with so many doubts and questions. -His actions do not have any impact on the story, the characters only accept what he does, period. What are their reactions? What are the consequences of their actions? What is the real impact of your presence? Remember that just by existing everything should change. Example: The game he created giving experience not only to him, but also to his enemies (Keep in mind that just colliding with a person would change everything, like the domino effect). -Then there is the fact of saving Germioni and killing a troll as if he were crushing an ant. (Is he able to kill such strong creatures that fast at this point?) It's not explained... -The chapters are uploaded quite quickly from what I see so great. -There are grammatical errors but they are few. -The upload speed seems to be quite fast and regular. I hope this helps in some way, I will continue reading since it is not boring, in fact it is interesting, but still it has too many inconsistencies that it does not describe in the review [img=recommend]

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PsionicMind

Well, I like my work so... yea 5 stars. A message to all my dear readers is that this fanfiction is for mentally mature people. I'm not talking about the age. Also, tell me about your female lead opinion through a review. You can also ask me stuff and I'll do my best to answer you. Finally, if there's anyone who is a super fan of HP, I'd love to hear your thoughts on all of the potential female leads. Basically, the personality and stuff but you can also give me your opinion on some other character who could be a female lead other than the ones I've talked about. For example, Bellatrix or someone else

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God_Of_Chaos

who is the female lead, how dark are we talking about, and will we get some face slapping

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Tenzing_Choeying_5139

This story is one of the best Harry Potter fanfic there is, I can't wait to see more of the mc's journey to power.

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Ender_Peach

So I don't actually don't know much about Harry Potter, but a swap is a swap.The writing quality is pretty good the only things that are missing are a few descriptions from time to time. The story development is moving at a slower pace than what I'd normally read, but that's just a personal problem. Why I'm giving 3 for the character design is because 10 chapters in and I still don't know what Alex looks like. The updating stability is amazing. And the world background is just Harry Potter so it's a 4. I wouldn't read this probably because I know absolutely nothing about Harry Potter other than the obvious things. I'm sure people enjoy this though.

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Aurelius_Imperator

Hats off to author he did quite a good job writing the fan fiction of hp the story is well written and the plot is fun to read although I have only read 5 ch I am hooked

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fischlllll123

One of the best hp fanfics I've read and it's unique compared to the others. Writing quality is pretty good grammatically and the typos are little to none.I like where the story is going so I'll be waiting for more chapters. As for the female lead, I vote for Hannah.

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Jana_Hyasat

just supporting my friend, keep scrolling away people

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Akhil_Kumar_5322

is it dropped???? if not, do release the chapters . it's a good reading I would say. Hopefully the author complete the novel before going for another one.

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KingBomblaze

love this book already ... a deep rooted fan forever

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KING_ABBASI

writing quality is good story is also good cuz it's Hp but the character design was not my type of thing and lastly world background and the only reason i am giving you 3 stars is that I've been read lot of hp novels and i am f**king bored now hp but overall your telling of a story is quite good keep up the good work 👍👏👏

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Garessta

Looks good for now, so i'll keep reading. MC isnt dumb, and the plot isnt boring repeating of the same stuff again and again...... idk what else to say but five stars

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anime_god_9144

I'm here from your previous fanfic which you decided to scrap because of some reason. I've read this remake and I've like this one better but I'll give a serious review unlike last time.Writing quality is very good and there's no grammatical mistakes whatsoever and even if there were, I'm sure that it's atleast readable.The story development is goof and I see no changes from the last book but I really hope you write for your own sake instead of your readers since that's the most enjoyable way to do it.Character design seems to be the one that changed the most compared to the last fic but this ones way better. updating stability seems good until now but I hope everything is going well at your job. world background... it was already done by JKR so there's no point talking about it. oh wait, it'll be better to write down the fact that this is an AU since there are a few key differences compared to the original if you are following your other fanfic's setting.As for the FL, assuming that you are going to make your own decision since you asked about the personalities, I'll write down what I think.Luna seems to be the best choice if you want an innocent and wholesome atmosphere since she's just weird but in a good way.Daphne will be a great choice if there's going to be some politics and drama. she's actually a great choice for most of the things since there isn't much written about her.Fleur.... a few months of relationship and then it'll go long distance. Better for a fling instead of a proper relationship.Hermione... well, keeping my prejudices aside, she will be a decent girlfriend but she will probably not listen to Alex and get into the thick of things. She'll be a great friend but she's just overused.I guess that'll be it. I put a lot of effort into this review so please don't quit. I love this book.

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Jana_Hyasat

take all the support my guy, u deserve it. I can feel this will be great!

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Griffin138

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