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4.09

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Yokai53

The concept of story is quite unique as we don’t normally see many si/oc hyuga fics. However, the power scaling completely ruins this fic for me. Saying the hiashi is a mid-kage level shinobi and that 12 Neji is has enough strength, speed and skill to match base might guy is ridiculous.

5mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Gekyume
LV 11 Badge

real novel ends at chapter 16, after that the author's probably using chatgpt.

7mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Haze_
LV 4 Badge

I really like the story but the author couldn’t think of a way to make the story longer so he puts a ton of info dumps and it’s really annoying and lowers the quality of the story there was a lot of way to make the story last longer that was not it. At that point it would be better having a great short story.

8mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
EternalEden

The quality is good, but it has a lot of info dumps that it constantly drops on the reader. Not to mention the author already has a story about the Hyuga clan, so there are a lot of parts that are basically the same and repeat themselves. The author also has no concept of power levels. Throwing around "Kage Level" left and right to many different characters. They even call Sasuke Jonin level right after he just got the curse mark. Originally I gave it 3 stars, but after 20 or so chapters, the story's quality gets worse and worse. I lasted until about 30 chapters since the premise of the story was interesting but it really just becomes intolerable.

8mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
emjason

The word Kage is thrown around too much in this story. Just anyone can be called kage, also low kage, mid kage, high kage…this isn’t a cultivation story. Kage is Kage! Hiashi is a jounin, not a kage!!!!! Guy wasn’t kage level till very very much later yet Danzo is rating Guy as high kage before the chunin exams, Guy that was on par with Kakashi then, would you say Kakashi was kage level too? Also Neji found it hard to beat two jounin level samurai and had to be hospitalized after the battle and was also rated low kage Please just stop using the word kage altogether cos this is just disrespectful!

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9mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
GHAIYATH_ALSOUKI

The story is great if the author would just get on with it. It’s like he is writing a story for someone who has never read or watched naruto before. It’s a FAN-fiction. As in the person reading is already a fan of the show, there is no reason to go over every little tiny point in character motivations and backstories in exposition form. maybe add some dialogue instead of writing paragraphs upon paragraphs of Wikipedia facts?

10mth
ดู 1 การตอบกลับ
uplifting_exorcist

Great fan fiction, unfortunately some users are stupid and don't like to know the info about the world, different from others generic fan fictions, the author was expanding the world background, but stupid readers dislike it, they only search for "op op op op op mc".

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
hero4hire

Too much useless info dump also illogical character introduction that makes no sense, if itachi killed random uchiha (who luckily survived due to mc intervention) with Mangekyou sharingan then he'll have collected them in cannon. Here author randomly gave mc a MS level powerhouse sidekick without any logic or reason.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Jeff_freakin_Bozos

Love the story so far, hope you come back to finish it when you’re ready

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Kauant4FbtAL

Simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, o protagonista é um lixo, suas escolhas são um lixo.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
KnifeEarEnthusiast

When you start a fanfic and it's good so you're enjoying it, but then the updates stop coming, then you see the author's writing a different book and left you behind.

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
uchiha_satoru

great story but please work on the updating stability

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Lord_Azathoth

I'm gonna finish this today. Hope you can increase the pace and take these 5 stars 🙏

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Hsaet_Uchiha

Too much information dumping. without that it would be great.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Mikele

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
R0B
LV 2 Badge

The story is good, but for me author made questionable choises (mainly reverse plot protection) for the story progression. This novel is also a naruto-verse Wikipedia so prepare to skip half of the content. Also, everyone already watched naruto, so I don't understand why the author rewrites things that we already know will happen. Instead of 3 chapters 1 sentence would've been enough...

1yr
ดู 1 การตอบกลับ
Jordi_Hardiansyah

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Transhumanist

The constant info dumps and the really stupid MC was hard to get used to. But the constant and inconsistent power creep was what killed this story for me.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Terminator123

can you send me patreon link. I am trying to search patreon hanma_jack but it's not showing naruto fanfiction overthere

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
drewcifer82

If you’ve never watched, read, or been spoiled on ANY lore in Naruto, this is for you. For the fans who’ve steeped themselves deep into it? I believe you’ll spend a LOT of time scrolling past walls of text regarding things you already know. Don’t get me wrong, it’s very well written. The exposition is very well done. The world building is top notch. For those that have the time and patience for it, and really want to immerse yourself in it, this really really is for you.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
PhantomTheif

It’s good so far up to chapter 50 couple of chapters of explaining etc but i say it’s worth it since this story changes the plot a lot

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Nagisa_Akahoshi

I don't really like long explanations so I'll keep this short. The story is good, the character relationships is good though a bit forced, and the writing is also good almost with no errors. My problem is the way the story is going, sure the scenes are properly given explanations and informations but it has TOO much information, the story progression is too fast and the chapter is mostly details in a short scene and that makes it hard to focus on the story

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Simoncso

It was a nice read, even considering the info dumps at the start and grammatical errors here and there, until the stupid deal with orochimaru.

1yr
ดู 1 การตอบกลับ
NO_YURI_000

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
rawthentic

this is an amazing, well explored novel with plenty of narutoverse hidden lore explored and explained in a realistic manner without compromising the quality. i also felt connected to the MC, and his thoughts and actions are well reasoned for the most part. Naruto was also my first manga as a kid, so i feel deep nostalgia for it, and it still hurts me to admit that unlike onepiece, the author of Naruto killed his own series. The amazing but unexplored characters for the first part, but the unreasonable and sudden insane powerscalling near the end with pain, madara, kaguy, etc, killed the whole shiobi aspect of the show (one piece knew what it was and stuck to it and instead just explored deeper into its own world while sticking to its pirate theme) My point of saying all this is that you are a very talented writer, and im sure you will write other amazing novels as well but the novel started out amazing like naruto but fell victim in the same way as naruto. the breaking of the plot is cool, but i feel the powerscalling killed the mood of the story. i feel you should have explored more the growing and failing process of neji and not relied on just the ultimate goal of tenseigan as it felt like a crutch to get away from the plot. maybe im not explaining my feelings in a clear way, but i really like your writing style and wanted to let you know how i felt about your book. i wish you great luck.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
SrMori
LV 13 Badge

Love the story. I really wish you would stop with the random dumps on info in the middle of fights. ’Neji’ goes of on a tangent talking about things that people already know, an example of this being a complete recap of what the Rasengan is in the middle of the fight.

1yr
ดู 1 การตอบกลับ
Xiphos_Gladius_03

A truly quality work! I love the realism of the fanfic and the emotions experienced by him. I am however curious in how he will tackle the overwhellming adveseries whom are more powerful than their canon counterparts due to his unintentional actions.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Zerufuke081205

Reading Status - C34 Its a wonderful fic with a smart, powerful,antihero non-harem mc[ till now] against the whiny,weak female mc's who who have the arrogance of a god from their foreknowledge without having strength of a chunin and some start having mental breakdown by punching a person in academy spar[I saw in a fic]. Most are filled with romance or mc with treating random human. lives more valuable than their own . those mc's got brainwashed with the leaf's propaganda even while knowing all about its darkness. while this one is still better than most as long as he keeps its promise of destroying Konoha or even killing a few main characters. It sucked when he spared those who tried to kill him from Konoha , he made random excused to spare hash and hanabi which made the situation forced be otherwise its a good one

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Sleeping_Owl_00

The story is good no doubt about it but after a certain point of time for me the story lost its charm. The author seemed to be in a rush, I remember reading the message one time he posted about not getting enough recognition for his work. I am not an author so can't really sympathise but the story just lost that beauty and loveliness it once had.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Htk_Kksh

I am very impressed by how fleshed-out everything is, keep going author!!!! And I would love to suggest a plot point on your story!! I would love it if Neji gets an interinteraction with Isshiki Otsutsuki!!!! Now that would be aan interesting one!!

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Yokai53

The concept of story is quite unique as we don’t normally see many si/oc hyuga fics. However, the power scaling completely ruins this fic for me. Saying the hiashi is a mid-kage level shinobi and that 12 Neji is has enough strength, speed and skill to match base might guy is ridiculous.

5mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Gekyume
LV 11 Badge

real novel ends at chapter 16, after that the author's probably using chatgpt.

7mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Haze_
LV 4 Badge

I really like the story but the author couldn’t think of a way to make the story longer so he puts a ton of info dumps and it’s really annoying and lowers the quality of the story there was a lot of way to make the story last longer that was not it. At that point it would be better having a great short story.

8mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
EternalEden

The quality is good, but it has a lot of info dumps that it constantly drops on the reader. Not to mention the author already has a story about the Hyuga clan, so there are a lot of parts that are basically the same and repeat themselves. The author also has no concept of power levels. Throwing around "Kage Level" left and right to many different characters. They even call Sasuke Jonin level right after he just got the curse mark. Originally I gave it 3 stars, but after 20 or so chapters, the story's quality gets worse and worse. I lasted until about 30 chapters since the premise of the story was interesting but it really just becomes intolerable.

8mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
emjason

The word Kage is thrown around too much in this story. Just anyone can be called kage, also low kage, mid kage, high kage…this isn’t a cultivation story. Kage is Kage! Hiashi is a jounin, not a kage!!!!! Guy wasn’t kage level till very very much later yet Danzo is rating Guy as high kage before the chunin exams, Guy that was on par with Kakashi then, would you say Kakashi was kage level too? Also Neji found it hard to beat two jounin level samurai and had to be hospitalized after the battle and was also rated low kage Please just stop using the word kage altogether cos this is just disrespectful!

เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์
9mth
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
GHAIYATH_ALSOUKI

The story is great if the author would just get on with it. It’s like he is writing a story for someone who has never read or watched naruto before. It’s a FAN-fiction. As in the person reading is already a fan of the show, there is no reason to go over every little tiny point in character motivations and backstories in exposition form. maybe add some dialogue instead of writing paragraphs upon paragraphs of Wikipedia facts?

10mth
ดู 1 การตอบกลับ
uplifting_exorcist

Great fan fiction, unfortunately some users are stupid and don't like to know the info about the world, different from others generic fan fictions, the author was expanding the world background, but stupid readers dislike it, they only search for "op op op op op mc".

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
hero4hire

Too much useless info dump also illogical character introduction that makes no sense, if itachi killed random uchiha (who luckily survived due to mc intervention) with Mangekyou sharingan then he'll have collected them in cannon. Here author randomly gave mc a MS level powerhouse sidekick without any logic or reason.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Jeff_freakin_Bozos

Love the story so far, hope you come back to finish it when you’re ready

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Kauant4FbtAL

Simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, simplesmente lixo, o protagonista é um lixo, suas escolhas são um lixo.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
KnifeEarEnthusiast

When you start a fanfic and it's good so you're enjoying it, but then the updates stop coming, then you see the author's writing a different book and left you behind.

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
uchiha_satoru

great story but please work on the updating stability

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Lord_Azathoth

I'm gonna finish this today. Hope you can increase the pace and take these 5 stars 🙏

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Hsaet_Uchiha

Too much information dumping. without that it would be great.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Mikele

Waters waters waters waters Waters waters waters waters Waters waters waters waters Waters waters waters waters Waters waters waters waters Waters waters waters waters Waters waters waters waters Waters waters waters waters Waters waters waters waters

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
R0B
LV 2 Badge

The story is good, but for me author made questionable choises (mainly reverse plot protection) for the story progression. This novel is also a naruto-verse Wikipedia so prepare to skip half of the content. Also, everyone already watched naruto, so I don't understand why the author rewrites things that we already know will happen. Instead of 3 chapters 1 sentence would've been enough...

1yr
ดู 1 การตอบกลับ
Jordi_Hardiansyah

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Transhumanist

The constant info dumps and the really stupid MC was hard to get used to. But the constant and inconsistent power creep was what killed this story for me.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Terminator123

can you send me patreon link. I am trying to search patreon hanma_jack but it's not showing naruto fanfiction overthere

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
drewcifer82

If you’ve never watched, read, or been spoiled on ANY lore in Naruto, this is for you. For the fans who’ve steeped themselves deep into it? I believe you’ll spend a LOT of time scrolling past walls of text regarding things you already know. Don’t get me wrong, it’s very well written. The exposition is very well done. The world building is top notch. For those that have the time and patience for it, and really want to immerse yourself in it, this really really is for you.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
PhantomTheif

It’s good so far up to chapter 50 couple of chapters of explaining etc but i say it’s worth it since this story changes the plot a lot

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Nagisa_Akahoshi

I don't really like long explanations so I'll keep this short. The story is good, the character relationships is good though a bit forced, and the writing is also good almost with no errors. My problem is the way the story is going, sure the scenes are properly given explanations and informations but it has TOO much information, the story progression is too fast and the chapter is mostly details in a short scene and that makes it hard to focus on the story

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Simoncso

It was a nice read, even considering the info dumps at the start and grammatical errors here and there, until the stupid deal with orochimaru.

1yr
ดู 1 การตอบกลับ
NO_YURI_000

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1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
rawthentic

this is an amazing, well explored novel with plenty of narutoverse hidden lore explored and explained in a realistic manner without compromising the quality. i also felt connected to the MC, and his thoughts and actions are well reasoned for the most part. Naruto was also my first manga as a kid, so i feel deep nostalgia for it, and it still hurts me to admit that unlike onepiece, the author of Naruto killed his own series. The amazing but unexplored characters for the first part, but the unreasonable and sudden insane powerscalling near the end with pain, madara, kaguy, etc, killed the whole shiobi aspect of the show (one piece knew what it was and stuck to it and instead just explored deeper into its own world while sticking to its pirate theme) My point of saying all this is that you are a very talented writer, and im sure you will write other amazing novels as well but the novel started out amazing like naruto but fell victim in the same way as naruto. the breaking of the plot is cool, but i feel the powerscalling killed the mood of the story. i feel you should have explored more the growing and failing process of neji and not relied on just the ultimate goal of tenseigan as it felt like a crutch to get away from the plot. maybe im not explaining my feelings in a clear way, but i really like your writing style and wanted to let you know how i felt about your book. i wish you great luck.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
SrMori
LV 13 Badge

Love the story. I really wish you would stop with the random dumps on info in the middle of fights. ’Neji’ goes of on a tangent talking about things that people already know, an example of this being a complete recap of what the Rasengan is in the middle of the fight.

1yr
ดู 1 การตอบกลับ
Xiphos_Gladius_03

A truly quality work! I love the realism of the fanfic and the emotions experienced by him. I am however curious in how he will tackle the overwhellming adveseries whom are more powerful than their canon counterparts due to his unintentional actions.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Zerufuke081205

Reading Status - C34 Its a wonderful fic with a smart, powerful,antihero non-harem mc[ till now] against the whiny,weak female mc's who who have the arrogance of a god from their foreknowledge without having strength of a chunin and some start having mental breakdown by punching a person in academy spar[I saw in a fic]. Most are filled with romance or mc with treating random human. lives more valuable than their own . those mc's got brainwashed with the leaf's propaganda even while knowing all about its darkness. while this one is still better than most as long as he keeps its promise of destroying Konoha or even killing a few main characters. It sucked when he spared those who tried to kill him from Konoha , he made random excused to spare hash and hanabi which made the situation forced be otherwise its a good one

เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์
1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Sleeping_Owl_00

The story is good no doubt about it but after a certain point of time for me the story lost its charm. The author seemed to be in a rush, I remember reading the message one time he posted about not getting enough recognition for his work. I am not an author so can't really sympathise but the story just lost that beauty and loveliness it once had.

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
Htk_Kksh

I am very impressed by how fleshed-out everything is, keep going author!!!! And I would love to suggest a plot point on your story!! I would love it if Neji gets an interinteraction with Isshiki Otsutsuki!!!! Now that would be aan interesting one!!

1yr
ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
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