Chapter 3 has been reworked
ch 0 3 Breakfast
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Chapter 2 has been reworked
ch 0 2 Alaric Astreaus
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Chapter 1 has been reworked
ch 0 1 Where am I?
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Noted thanks for the feedback once again man currently in the works with Volume 2 and this has been addressed. I'll take a short break probably 2 days to review all of this, then I'll resume volume 2. Again I appreciate the feedback, I do not really bother about how I tell the story, I worry about the story itself, you my readers will determine how it's told in the grand scheme of things so worry not.
Alaric ascended the familiar stairs that led to his private chambers within the duchy. The echoes of his footsteps seemed to reverberate with the weight of impending decisions. The events of the day, from his unexpected collapse to the familial exchanges, lingered in his mind as he approached the haven of his room.
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chapter has dropped enjoy
ch 40 Purge(4)
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thanks for the feedback man. I addressed this a little while ago, and while I have still yet to review and redo my earlier chapters for that reason, I will be doing so in days to come. My earlier writing was... immature to say the least and things get much better and more coherent after chapter 20 or so there about. Once again thanks for the feedback
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Hello everyone and new readers especially, I have come to the realization that my first few chapters are a bit of a mixed bag, my writing was a bit immature at times and danced around what was important, in hindsight this is not a mistake I should have made. I will review them one by one and when that is done this comment will be taken down, however for now please bear with me. Try to reach chapter 20, it largely gets more coherent there. from then on I can understand if you would decide to drop the story. Thank you for you patience
ch 0 1 Where am I?
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Thanks man i Appreciate it
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poisensect help man this comment is scaring away the potential readers
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sorry about that mate I got inspiration from a charming book I read not too long ago, which goes by Varda Walk, I'll try to tone it down. I've gotten less "mouthful" in recent chapters with my language. I appreciate the feedback thanks for reading my work.
ch 0 8 Plans
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no harem here my friend
it should be for a transmigrator huh ;)
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no problem :)
ch 0 8 Plans
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it's an error
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yes
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ohhh hadn't seen that one thanks man
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Fantasy · Croppedtrolley
reworked everyone
ch 0 4 Duke
Son Of The Grand Duke
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