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Naruto: A Broken Dream

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Autor: DesMark

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Hiroshi was never someone who would rush into a fight, he was a happy person, someone who enjoyed getting everyone to laugh alongside him, Hiroshi was Mark Baker, a weeb who one day woke up in the world of Naruto and became Hiroshi Aburame...
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I wanted to see what outside the scope of canon could do to the timeline, the story would probably go into massive AU in the future, with the whole world of Elemental nations going up and down because of Hiroshi's choices. If you want to read it, give it a try as the story won't be a linear worldbuilding, and everyone would be trying to screw one another...

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This novel is my attempt at trying the Simulation system trope, I liked the idea behind the system, just the execution of many novels using this troupe was a blunder to navigate due to them being mostly MTL...

So here's my attempt at a Simulation type novel.

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Average_Daoist

the overpowered tag is pretty misleading. this is a weak to strong fanfic not overpowered. know the difference. progress of the mc is pretty slow too. and many bots reviewing this. pretty sad.

1yr
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BanTheKitten

So the beginning is great and very much made me want to read the novel so I binged all available chapters(41+stats sheet) and man I wished I read the stat sheet first... while the tags say MC is overpowered but I would argue he is severely nerfed. first his system only activated at the beginning of cannon(Naruto just became a genin) MC is 2 years older and is in the genin reserve force so he has a lot of freedom. second while being from the awesome clan of Aburame(insect controllers) MC denied all of his heritage from there because he felt it was icky to have a clan of insects residing in his body... so he already nerfed himself in a world as dangerous as Naruto. other than that till the start of the 4th great ninja war he would only have been trough 22 simulations and while some would say that is plenty enough I don't really feel that it is enough when you read some of the decisions the MC take... While doing simulations when he "dies" in the simulation he gets the singular choice between 4 options, 1 - get stats obtained in the sim 2 - get the skills created or obtained in the sim, 3 - get the skill proficiencies from the sim, 4 - get simulation points which is then used to upgrade the body's natural bloodline limit i.e. mc not able to get stats over 40 need to upgrade his natural limits... so basically he will loose if he chooses anything other than those points unless he made some actual good progress in skills or created some good jutsu...

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1yr
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Lol1san

That's good! Really good! Mc's attitude and the system itself make the reading very enjoyable. The author uses the simulation system very well and leaves no room for any inconsistency in the development of his power. I had fun reading it, keep writing.

2yr
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Monarch_Ash

The novel is good and I enjoy the premise and how the author utilizes the simulation power but the chapters are way too short and barely anything of substance happens each chapter

1yr
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ToonDragonable

Nice Story. And the MC is cautious and uses the System to make sure he doesn't get killed of by his sh**** Clan, really killing him off because he doesn't want the Kikaichu in his Body? What are they the Hyuga with their Slave Seal or the Uchiha with killing their best Friends for Power? Anyho keep it up dude and thank you for the Chapter's till now.

1yr
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skidmark

probably a good read but why make a character an aburame and not have there clan trait along with that the bugs are put in them before they turn 2 witch is just stupid of the author no offense if your going to write a fic research no offense also with the bugs they usually for most members of the clan stick in a certain body part eg the arm

1yr
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MinhNam_Le

This fanfic has potential. The system is original and interesting (The system can "predicts" the future to a certain degree). MC is weak at the beginning but has a lot of potential to grow. All in all a great start for a Naruto fanfiction.

2yr
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Joanjudo

Good story though it is a weak to strong fanfic he does get a lot stronger each simulation. Also dude when are you gonna update; no pressure or anything.

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1yr
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tetsuo

I don't know why they leave such a bad review and he has character development, the mc is not an op from the beginning, he is intelligent and the world is well done

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WickedQueen2

I will preface this with saying, I want to give this a lower rating, I can't sadly because it's only one aspect that I dislike though it's arguably the most important. I am on chapter 35 now, I don't think I'll be continuing sadly because of a single thing. the MC has revealed meta knowledge, only marginally at this point but it's enough. I'll admit I mostly just hate Danzo and the root and it's clear they're gonna be important continuing forward so I'll be leaving early.Regardless of my distaste for Danzo I have an even bigger issue with the system and the far too many critical downsides.First, it takes too long between simulations, I can sort of understand this one but it's still annoying.Second and likely my biggest issue with this system, the system is limiting him in such a way that he can't use it for anything but getting simulation points as he needs them to get his natural capabilities back, most significantly with his learning abilities being hindered immensely.if everything else wasn't better by such a significant margin this story would have run into the ground on the disappointment of a system long ago.if I do come back to this and i find it better than I expected it to become i will update this review but so far i am disappointed.

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Leon_Luis_

Its an overall 5 star fic.. 1 - I like MC's attitude and character 2 - No Harem 3 - Mc isn't overpowered without any hardwork 4 - Regular Updates that fits nicely in my reading schedule 5 - Story is developing quite nicely right now(Simulation system , can see into the future kinda , weak to strong mc)

1yr
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Immortal_Readr_001

Please author don't drop this novel 😭. Don't worry I'm suppotrting you, I'm tired of seeing that authors are dropping their fanfic for various and i understand if there is problem as everyone has a life to live, just don't listen to someone saying bad anything bad about you in the comments. There are many who support you and wanting to read your fiction and we love how you are spending your time to write for us audience. Be safe, happy and healthy.

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t650825t

gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood

1yr
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Fk_Fk
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goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood

1yr
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ARSENAL_101

Ok at the start it was a bit iffy but as the story goes along it gets better and better till now (hope the scientist perk returns🙏🙏🙏)

1yr
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_Harsh_
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till now i like the chapters hope you keep it up but u should really change few tags as mc clearly isn't op also am still waiting for orochimaru omake

1yr
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CrystalFairy124

How did you go about adding those character pictures in the synopsis? Could you please tell me? 🙏😖

1yr
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57843
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I quite like your works, this concept of simulations is also really well implemented

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Humbuub

5-2-3-4-5.......... I'm familiar with the story style of simulated timelines and its biggest downside is you won't be as immersed compared to the standard narrative. Longer simulations could be really annoying since the story progress won't be transferred. The real timeline for MC barely made any progress. We basically have an MC who suddenly have a bunch of skills. It's not even a simulation, the system is just an 80/90s text based interactive game so all the rewards he got felt so unearned.

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Chapter 78: Update! 1 years ago

Volumen 0 : Auxiliary Volume

  1. Stat Range 2 years ago

Volumen 1

  1. 1
    A new day a new me! 2 years ago
  2. 2
    2nd Simulatuion! 2 years ago
  3. 3
    A Way Forward! 2 years ago
  4. 4
    The Body Flicker! 2 years ago
  5. 5
    3rd Simulation - Part 1 2 years ago
  6. 6
    3rd Simulation - Part 2 2 years ago
  7. 7
    3rd Simulation - Part 3 2 years ago
  8. 8
    The Crooked mission! Part-1 2 years ago
  9. 9
    The Crooked mission! Part-2 1 years ago
  10. 10
    The Crooked mission! Part-3 1 years ago
  11. 11
    The chunin Exams! - Part 1 1 years ago
  12. 12
    The chunin Exams! - Part 2 1 years ago
  13. 13
    The chunin Exams! - Part 3 1 years ago
  14. 14
    Calm before the storm! 1 years ago
  15. 15
    Ripples! 1 years ago
  16. 16
    Training! 1 years ago
  17. 17
    Tora! Part-1 1 years ago
  18. 18
    Tora!- part 2 1 years ago
  19. 19
    5th Simulation! Part-1 1 years ago
  20. 20
    5th Simulation! Part-2 1 years ago
  21. 21
    5th Simulation! Part-3 1 years ago
  22. 22
    5th Simulation! Part-4 1 years ago
  23. 23
    5th Simulation! Part-5 1 years ago
  24. 24
    5th Simulation! Part-6 1 years ago
  25. 25
    5th Simulation! Part-7 1 years ago
  26. 26
    5th Simulation! Part-8 1 years ago
  27. 27
    5th Simulation! Part-9(END) 1 years ago
  28. 28
    Breaking Dawn Part-1 1 years ago
  29. 29
    Breaking Dawn Part-2 1 years ago
  30. 30
    Breaking Dawn! Part-3 1 years ago
  31. 31
    Training starts! Day 1 1 years ago
  32. 32
    The Darkness Within... 1 years ago
  33. 33
    Training! Day 5 1 years ago
  34. 34
    Training! Day 7 1 years ago
  35. 35
    The Report! 1 years ago
  36. 36
    The Encounter! Part-1 1 years ago
  37. 37
    The Encounter! Part-2 1 years ago
  38. 38
    Escape! Part-1 1 years ago
  39. 39
    Escape! Part-2 1 years ago
  40. 40
    Escape! Part-3 1 years ago
  41. 41
    Team 10 1 years ago
  42. 42
    The Land of Hot Springs! Part-1 1 years ago
  43. 43
    The Land of Hot Springs! Part-2 1 years ago
  44. 44
    6th Simulation! Part 1 1 years ago
  45. 45
    6th Simulation! Part 2 1 years ago
  46. 46
    6th Simulation! Part 3 1 years ago
  47. 47
    6th Simulation! Part 4 1 years ago
  48. 48
    Uzumaki Fuinjutsu Part-1 1 years ago
  49. 49
    Uzumaki Fuinjutsu Part-2 1 years ago
  50. 50
    Uzumaki Fuinjutsu Part-3 1 years ago
  51. 51
    Fuinjutsu: Chakra suppression Seal! Part-1 1 years ago
  52. 52
    Fuinjutsu: Chakra suppression Seal! Part-2 1 years ago
  53. 53
    7th Simulation! Part1 1 years ago
  54. 54
    7th Simulation! Part2 1 years ago
  55. 55
    7th Simulation! Part 3 1 years ago
  56. 56
    7th Simulation! Part 4 1 years ago
  57. 57
    7th Simulation! Part 5 1 years ago
  58. 58
    7th Simulation! Part 6 1 years ago
  59. 59
    7th Simulation! Part 7 1 years ago
  60. 60
    7th Simulation! Part 8 1 years ago
  61. 61
    Hiraishin! Part-1 1 years ago
  62. 62
    Hiraishin! Part-2 1 years ago
  63. 63
    Breaking down Hiraishin! Part-1 1 years ago
  64. 64
    Breaking down Hiraishin! Part-2 1 years ago
  65. 65
    Learning Hiraishin: Flying Thunder God! Part 1 1 years ago
  66. 66
    Learning Hiraishin: Flying Thunder God! Part 2 1 years ago
  67. 67
    End of the Simulation! 1 years ago
  68. 68
    The Battle of the Jinchuriki! Part-1 1 years ago
  69. 69
    The Battle Of The Jinchuriki! Part-2 1 years ago
  70. 70
    Abducting Naruto! Part-1 1 years ago
  71. 71
    Abducting Naruto! Part-2 1 years ago
  72. 72
    Abducting Naruto! Part-3 1 years ago
  73. 73
    Gaara's seal! 1 years ago
  74. 74
    Returning to Konoha! 1 years ago
  75. 75
    Shinobi Council! Part-1 1 years ago
  76. 76
    Shinobi Council! Part-2 1 years ago
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    Shinobi Council! Part-3 1 years ago
  78. 78
    Update! 1 years ago

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