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Pokémon: Starting by Crushing Gary Oak
Anime y Cómics · Elara_Vance
I do want to say that I am enjoying this story a lot I’m just not sure where it’s going with this chapter and it’s kind of a massive event that popped out of nowhere
Wow I know how to yap lol
This feels way too sudden. There was no indication that he witnessed what he says he saw red knights doing in previous chapters so it feels forced and rushed. I’m really hoping you don’t plan to say he got controlled by the servant or something like that because everything I’ve seen says that it isn’t possible. But then, with the whole corruption thing, I can’t see how else you plan to make this make sense. I really hope you have some big plan for this that makes it work but right now I feel like it was a way to quickly end this whole arc or something. Which would suck a lot cause you had this whole build up to the fight with Mercedes and it feels like a nothing burger.
I want to know in what way the other league champion level trainer was injured that made it so their Pokémon couldn’t fight, cause there’s nothing stopping them from getting involved from what I can tell.
Pikachu is the one that didn’t want to evolve from what I understand, ash just excepted that decision
In case someone wanted to challenge his main team, they only had to win a 4 vs 4 battle, but they still only got a 3-star Badge. It's more like a self-inflicted difficulty raise since some people like to make things hard for themselves.
Pokemon Alternate Universe Adventures
Anime y Cómics · Azrail93
Also not a fan of the super random system, would rather it be an increase of multiplier based on effort used rather than luck.
I’m loving this story, I know nothing about football but I love the intensity of the scenes. I really enjoy how the story is progressing as well. My one ask is a more solid system description because at the moment I have very little idea of how it works. I think this is most pronounced with the exp suddenly coming in when previously it was just gaining based off actual work he put in (I know it’s still based off what he’s achieved just an example to show my confusion with the system and how it works). I’m hoping you’ll do a quick thing in either a chapter or an auxiliary to explain the system and how it works a bit better. Though most of all great work. I know some people are saying this is AI but honestly it’s free to read and in the end it is the authors idea that I care about not how it’s written.
I feel like redder than red might have worked better for the eye description.
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original The Craftsman
4.51
This is the story of Daedalus on his journey to the peak of craftsmanship. Daedalus has died and been reincarnated by the god Hephaestus to try and reach the peak of craftsmanship. Watch his journey making friends and become incredibly powerful. See how he uses his creations and kills god's. (Tell me tags in the comments of the latest chapters please!!!)Tags: Cultivation, Swords and Magic I thought I would just go ahead and make a quick note, on average each chapter is at least 500 words long. This is because I don't have that long everyday to write a chapter, it's why I try to make each chapter seem like just another part of the previous one. I'm slowing down on chapters lately, once every Sunday, because I am doing a bit of a fanfictiony thing in the latest chapters. I asked if I should make it a side book thing but my readers wanted it here so yeah. I am doing a bit of MHA and other books I have enjoyed lately like Spiderman and marvel stuff. Quick thing, I love reading people's comments so please say Hi if you feel like it, I love feedback!!!491 Chs 1.3k Colecciones
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The Wanderer°
The son of The Craftsman, a wanderer at heart he left home in search of meaning.1 Chs 2 Colecciones
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Mortal Body Refiner
A young mortal found a hint into a secret world, follow him on his journey into the land of cultivators as a seemingly normal mortal.8 Chs 8 Colecciones
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Immortal Of Ancient Times
This is just something I am writing for the sake of writing. I might just suddenly drop so don't expect much, okay? ------------------------------------------------------------------------ A baby was sent into the ancient past, without knowledge of the future the boy was raised by creatures of the mesozoic era. The boy had been granted strange abilities before he was sent back in time. His most prominent is his incredible rate of adaption and his immortality.1 Chs 12 Colecciones
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Gaia's Pride
It was a normal day, before time stopped and people became near immortal. every night the world's resources restart to on that day, but whatever we use through this cycle will stay. Technology bloomed ,and the world became peaceful, but life became boring. the governments solution was to create a Vr game, and by putting the smartest minds of the world together something amazing happened. It was a new world of adventure and fantasy that no-one could have imagined was possible.3 Chs 6 Colecciones
If this wasn’t written by AI this would easily be a 5 star review, but as it is I can’t reasonably give it more than 3 and I think that’s pushing it. If I had any suggestions for this it would be to have the AI not write every chapter like it’s the last because the constant use of overly grandiose nonsense is very quickly getting old and I’ve only read 16 chapters. Other than that maybe read it through and make sure it isn’t adding stuff. I’m not saying that it has so far but the addition of a rocket executive wasn’t something she knew about but the way she talks to Lance after makes it seem like she did when she could have just said “I didn’t know there was an executive.” That’s my only gripe so far for the story itself and beyond its over use of grandiosity I think the concept is great but could use a more human touch.
Pokemon:Rise of the Queen
Anime y Cómics · Neptuno111