Reborn Into Pokémon With An Odd System

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LostThe50_50

This story is just........how do i say this.......spontaneous? It gives the feeling that the story had no intention to be completed right from the start.......i'm sorry if how i say this is kinda harsh but.....that's how it is.... Fact # 1 - the background check of mc? Cringe.....sorry there are lots more of scenario's where most children are in worst situation and they grow up normal.....the mc here was at the very least adopted....though it was a "substitution" kind of adoption...nonetheless he has the "chance" to grab the feeling of having parents...... Fact # 2 - was the god speech truly necessary?.......not really i dont see anything happening with that in the future...would've rather had the mc directly reincarnate into another world without meeting god and suddenly gain a system, than read a long cringe ass talk with god that serves absolutely no purpose....like what? 10 billionth death?......he has one of the most pathetic reasons to be reincarnated, even worse than the novels that just say they reincarnated to another world because the "supreme being/God" is bored and will make you entertain him...... Fact # 3 - bruh when he was reincarnated the descriptions of the surroundings were so nice.....along with the description of the pokemon....those small detail were a saving grace.......until mc suddenly became a condescending piece of sh*t that looks down on ash despite having good qualities about him.......(while even i hate ash i at the very least have respect for his determination)......not to mention..........actually i'll save this for the 4th fact. Fact # 4 - fate stay night?????? Summoning???? This is where it completely and utterly shows.....that it was made spontaneously without thought.....even in the novel the author himself made the MC admit that there is absolutely no reason for the mixing in the characters of fate stay night......he couldn't even think of the possibilities of mixing it up......like integrating the heroes into the world of pokemon.....where man can fight against pokemon with the use of techniques, mastery of weapons and aura.....like what????? When i read the summon system that was what i expected when the author hyped up it's reason to be revealed in the next chapter.....only to be disappointed........by mc admitting he just summoned a character because he was lonely???? Like what the fuk are your family for? What are the pokemon for???????? This is the main reason why i think this novel will ultimately fail.... Fact # 5 - he is in another world he has a family for f*ks sake.....he hasn't changed one bit spineless and stupid....... Author if you see this, i am sorry if what i said here is offensive but facts are facts, while i would like to believe that this novel will be successful, this remains to shown with how the story is continuing..... Although i say a lot of harsh things, i do wish you good luck and hope you persevere in writing.

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Mark_D_Dragneel

Summon servents in Pokemon.....pokemon is about an adventure with the Pokemon you capture...what is is the use of summoning servants....do you want to conquer the world....plus the servents are heroes at least you should have made summon other monsters....the idea to summon heroes is so dumb..

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Beniiboy23

Fate servants in pokemon ? Sounds silly ,but the thing its the main thing its really boring...its like he prepares for war not adventure..fate servants have their own wish they want to fullfill and not one of them would want to serve him just for his amusement...

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CoolFire12

Please Do Not drop this Story...........................................................................................................................................................

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Goblina_Gremory

Amazing story hope to see another few chapters soon. Honestly the best Pokémon story I have read so far, also my first review on this site. The only thing I’d have to say for a critique is that you’re going really slow with the gyms. I don’t hate that and really like the story that you are building, but I’m anxious to see his Pokémon journey more than his business ventures. Its a small critique cause I’m still enjoying it a lot.

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The_Wolf_Senpai

...................................................... I love it!! One of the best Crossover pokemon that i have ever read before! Love it!❤️ ......................................................

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happy360

It is a very good novel but can you please start updating new chapters fast ..........................................................................................

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Sharkman007

This is a great story for pokemon lover's. Awsome story can't get enough of it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Dvarchan

Very odd indeed what are you going to do with fate character ( going to hang around) those are not suit in your world. They are very suitable in medivel isekai. Or future sci-fi.

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America_Yea

You get a perfect score from me this is one of the very few extremely well written pokemon novels on this site. Needless to say I will be watching this rather keenly heres hoping theres no deaths among the main cast.

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Xrkerr

So far so good. I am honestly enjoying it and find myself wishing there was more after reading each new release. I feel that the character has been handle well and the interactions between each character is amazing. I personally love the Harem genre and love Pokémon so this is honestly a piece of holy scripture to me. I am hopeful that in the future the Harem grows and judging by how well the author has maintained his characters relationships so far, I feel it would work it well if the Harem was large (Kinda wish Delia was in it ahaha) The plot is also really unique and entertaining, I like the fate series so seeing this being implemented so smoothly into the pokemon world is truly impressive. Anyways this is a really good story so far and I hope the author continues to keep up the amazing work.

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slayte

Really enjoy the book and the characters but I feel like it is a little thin story wise it's almost like things just happen and he doesn't have a real goal or anything but I do recommend reading it it is fun novel to read

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Chronosyphon

So I don't know about other people but I'm liking this little adventure that we are on this makes me want to see how far it can go im genuinely looking forward for more.

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Kirito342

Больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше.больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше больше

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GB_Luke

I am enjoying it and I hope it does not get dropped. I just want to know if the MC will travel all the region’s in the Pokémon world. It’s ok if that’s not the case though.

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Pfeifer

Love it and please keep working on it, i would pay coins for it. Don't let bad comments influence you and just form this story how you would like to do this!