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So far terrible grammar and not great writing, mc is arrogant and randomly proud about things he got for free (like boasting about his massive genius for building a boosted laptop with a bunch of parts he got from his system with points from a free starter pack), and the dialogue is more cringy and unnatural then I thought possible. The interactions between characters feel more like ai than Jarvis.
A very interesting concept for a fanfic, however unfortunately things feel a little too childish for me. The conversations and scenes are forced and doesn't flow right. The grammar definitely needs an editing, as although it's still understandable, it's still bad. The world building was done all right so a four star here. So in overall I will give this fanfic a 2.5 stars review.
this book seemed interesting so i gave it a read and it started out ok but progressively got worse and very confusing the writing quality dropped like a brick using the same descriptors repeatedly inconsistent point of view complete loss of continuity and attempting to explain fictional science but used non fictional materials honestly i spent the last few chapters just mentally fixing grammar but even then it was just nonsense as for the story it starts with modern family then moves into Wednesday and devolves into supernatural nonsense with transformers and then Egyptian gods show up and by then i was nearly done with the book have no idea how it ended but i doubt that the author could finish the book in a satisfying way his family despite being described as extremely caring seemed to completely forget about him he starts dating Wednesday only to disappear from her life to fight immortal monsters this book had so much potential but honestly failed to do anything with it. it's a mix of random nonsense plot holes dropped plot lines save yourself the headache and avoid this story if I Had to give the author advice is say you need to drastically improve your understanding of the english language stop putting so many plot elements into your storys the immortal supernatural beings were completely understand necessary and should never have been included don't bother explaining fictional science and keep it simple and work with someone that has a better understanding of writing to proof read your work and keep you on track and build on what you all ready made stop adding new things into the mix
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I have read to the last chapter of 194 I can whit certainty say that this book has more plot holes than Swiss cheese.
I just want to know what happened to modern family and what happened to Wednesday his girlfriend?
I added this to my library to read about chill and slice of life genre about modern family but maybe you should change the title from in modern family as iron man to Iron Man and the monsters that are unkillable because the concept of death from the clasing of energies is gone lol and now that I think about it Death is unkillable and the story is more on fighting building stuff instead of modern family slice of life genre it frustrates me because I just want to read a modern family fanfic this put my hopes high but in the end it just disappointed me.
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I'm really enjoying the story alot with the Sci-fi and the supernatural stuff and romance for once but now I'm just trying to get through the transformers battle turned MC vs SET battle and hope everything goes back a little
Author was doing so good, modern family x wensday was so smart and it worked ... until the totekbracu whatever their called its so dumb. Idk how you produced such good chapters and then throw all that talent in the trash make stupidly dumb monsters for the mc to fight for NO REASON AT ALL. bro you should like remake the whole thing and take out the tocken whatever bs
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Story is really good I don’t like the frog. It’s kind of weird kind of confusing, but I think I understand the story.
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I like the idea of using chatgpt. but could you give some details and advice on how you used it? I would also like to do that.
I like the overall story but i think the story should take some time to flush out the romance and some more slice of life but that may just be me
I was expecting slice of life with mc trying to be the top drag of the world and having some romance and trying to live life, but after ch 84, it’s battle after battle against supernaturals, and at first I did not mind the supernatural and fiction bs, but now it got too much that there is no more slice of life and dude either seems to be building something or fighting some supernatural being, the story is losing the touch of when I first read it, I hope the author slowly reverts back to that slice of life feel. And I understand adding the fighting and supernatural bs since he literally has abilities that are not meant for the world, but I just wish that it would not be every day full of battle and no slice of life.
does this include him getting powers from versions of Tony stark that became Sorcerer Supreme instead of Dr Strange??
I realy like this story the only real problem i have with it is that it seems like the chapters are pretty short and it takes a while to get to the next chapter, that said i get that this is probaly(i can't spell lol) just a hobby so the longish wait time isn't really all that bad it's just that with the action and everything going on it loses some of the wow factor when every chapter is basicly a cliff-hanger. Again i love the story the people and just the idea in genrale so looking forward to the next update.
okay the fanfic fusion is good the story was good actually but.. it's sucks. well it's gonna be. because the story is just a loop he's powers is points he earns everytime he Destroy a original story or a canon event and when he Destroy a og story or a canon event THE world gonna get a Immortal enemy that wants to kill him. so it's just a loop.
I must say, I’ve been very hesitant of this fic for a good while now due to obvious reasons (Ironman in a real world setting). Well now I have to say I’m pleasantly surprised so far! It’s definitely humble in some parts and the fact that there are supernatural things that you can stop #withscience is very cool. I especially enjoy the fact that you are focusing on one female as of now (I’m on chap 46). Harem is fine and all but I enjoy the realism you are trying to go for. My only complaint as of right now would be to just double check your spelling on words but other then that I slow clap for you
It was good until the frog came in then it just got boring. I feel like other stuff should have been added in slowly. Also after the first few chapters it’s really not even a modern family fic anymore
At what point does this stop being a wednesday fanfiction? Because I’m 30 chapters in and this was supposed to be a Modern Family fanfic with elements from other shows. Instead, almost all of the plot has been happening in the wednesday side of things, and I haven’t even watched that show. I didn’t mind when i saw it in the synopsis because it said the fanfic had ELEMENTS from shows such as Wednesday. I don’t mind having some things here and there I don’t know, but the entire fanfic so far is based around the wednesday plot, and now he’s attending their school and it’s just getting deeper and deeper into that plot which is just not what I came here for at all
Could not read after ch. 35, MC turned into a watcher and is just cocky for no reason even after almost getting killed, The way Wednesday is introduced is very stupid, he just goes to her is like hello i know ur father kill someone and here is the proof and the she falls in love with him 1 chapter later
a ideia e super legal mas foi mal executado, itens aperarecendo do nada (carro) e alguns dialogos forçados acho que seria coisa de quem nao esta acostumado a escrever, e bom para passar um tempo mas nao algo que te faça grudar e ficar envolvido lendo sem parar.
Keep going young whipper snapper, your story is unique 👌 so far. I have high hopes for this fanfiction!!!!!!!¡!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Amazing story! One of the few stories that kept me in anticipation for more, but I need a break from it as it gets pretty intense at around chapter 100. I need to get my emotions in check because this story is real rollercoaster. Anyways great job and keep doing what you do Author.
Hey there guys, I made this fanfic mainly due to the lack of updates by another Author on modern family, So I got impatient waiting and decided to write one myself. I hope you guys can point out any mistakes I may have made in the Chapters and where I can improve them. Otherwise leave a comment letting me know you enjoyed the chapter, it's a great motivator. Enjoy the Chapters that are to come. For your Information, the Story will begin to have changes but in the first season atleast nothing Major. But the later seasons is where the Fun is at. 🥳
So far terrible grammar and not great writing, mc is arrogant and randomly proud about things he got for free (like boasting about his massive genius for building a boosted laptop with a bunch of parts he got from his system with points from a free starter pack), and the dialogue is more cringy and unnatural then I thought possible. The interactions between characters feel more like ai than Jarvis.
A very interesting concept for a fanfic, however unfortunately things feel a little too childish for me. The conversations and scenes are forced and doesn't flow right. The grammar definitely needs an editing, as although it's still understandable, it's still bad. The world building was done all right so a four star here. So in overall I will give this fanfic a 2.5 stars review.
this book seemed interesting so i gave it a read and it started out ok but progressively got worse and very confusing the writing quality dropped like a brick using the same descriptors repeatedly inconsistent point of view complete loss of continuity and attempting to explain fictional science but used non fictional materials honestly i spent the last few chapters just mentally fixing grammar but even then it was just nonsense as for the story it starts with modern family then moves into Wednesday and devolves into supernatural nonsense with transformers and then Egyptian gods show up and by then i was nearly done with the book have no idea how it ended but i doubt that the author could finish the book in a satisfying way his family despite being described as extremely caring seemed to completely forget about him he starts dating Wednesday only to disappear from her life to fight immortal monsters this book had so much potential but honestly failed to do anything with it. it's a mix of random nonsense plot holes dropped plot lines save yourself the headache and avoid this story if I Had to give the author advice is say you need to drastically improve your understanding of the english language stop putting so many plot elements into your storys the immortal supernatural beings were completely understand necessary and should never have been included don't bother explaining fictional science and keep it simple and work with someone that has a better understanding of writing to proof read your work and keep you on track and build on what you all ready made stop adding new things into the mix
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I have read to the last chapter of 194 I can whit certainty say that this book has more plot holes than Swiss cheese.
I just want to know what happened to modern family and what happened to Wednesday his girlfriend?
I added this to my library to read about chill and slice of life genre about modern family but maybe you should change the title from in modern family as iron man to Iron Man and the monsters that are unkillable because the concept of death from the clasing of energies is gone lol and now that I think about it Death is unkillable and the story is more on fighting building stuff instead of modern family slice of life genre it frustrates me because I just want to read a modern family fanfic this put my hopes high but in the end it just disappointed me.
Reveal Spoiler I'm really enjoying the story alot with the Sci-fi and the supernatural stuff and romance for once but now I'm just trying to get through the transformers battle turned MC vs SET battle and hope everything goes back a little
Author was doing so good, modern family x wensday was so smart and it worked ... until the totekbracu whatever their called its so dumb. Idk how you produced such good chapters and then throw all that talent in the trash make stupidly dumb monsters for the mc to fight for NO REASON AT ALL. bro you should like remake the whole thing and take out the tocken whatever bs
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Story is really good I don’t like the frog. It’s kind of weird kind of confusing, but I think I understand the story.
Reveal Spoiler I like the idea of using chatgpt. but could you give some details and advice on how you used it? I would also like to do that.
I like the overall story but i think the story should take some time to flush out the romance and some more slice of life but that may just be me
I was expecting slice of life with mc trying to be the top drag of the world and having some romance and trying to live life, but after ch 84, it’s battle after battle against supernaturals, and at first I did not mind the supernatural and fiction bs, but now it got too much that there is no more slice of life and dude either seems to be building something or fighting some supernatural being, the story is losing the touch of when I first read it, I hope the author slowly reverts back to that slice of life feel. And I understand adding the fighting and supernatural bs since he literally has abilities that are not meant for the world, but I just wish that it would not be every day full of battle and no slice of life.
does this include him getting powers from versions of Tony stark that became Sorcerer Supreme instead of Dr Strange??
I realy like this story the only real problem i have with it is that it seems like the chapters are pretty short and it takes a while to get to the next chapter, that said i get that this is probaly(i can't spell lol) just a hobby so the longish wait time isn't really all that bad it's just that with the action and everything going on it loses some of the wow factor when every chapter is basicly a cliff-hanger. Again i love the story the people and just the idea in genrale so looking forward to the next update.
okay the fanfic fusion is good the story was good actually but.. it's sucks. well it's gonna be. because the story is just a loop he's powers is points he earns everytime he Destroy a original story or a canon event and when he Destroy a og story or a canon event THE world gonna get a Immortal enemy that wants to kill him. so it's just a loop.
I must say, I’ve been very hesitant of this fic for a good while now due to obvious reasons (Ironman in a real world setting). Well now I have to say I’m pleasantly surprised so far! It’s definitely humble in some parts and the fact that there are supernatural things that you can stop #withscience is very cool. I especially enjoy the fact that you are focusing on one female as of now (I’m on chap 46). Harem is fine and all but I enjoy the realism you are trying to go for. My only complaint as of right now would be to just double check your spelling on words but other then that I slow clap for you
It was good until the frog came in then it just got boring. I feel like other stuff should have been added in slowly. Also after the first few chapters it’s really not even a modern family fic anymore
At what point does this stop being a wednesday fanfiction? Because I’m 30 chapters in and this was supposed to be a Modern Family fanfic with elements from other shows. Instead, almost all of the plot has been happening in the wednesday side of things, and I haven’t even watched that show. I didn’t mind when i saw it in the synopsis because it said the fanfic had ELEMENTS from shows such as Wednesday. I don’t mind having some things here and there I don’t know, but the entire fanfic so far is based around the wednesday plot, and now he’s attending their school and it’s just getting deeper and deeper into that plot which is just not what I came here for at all
Could not read after ch. 35, MC turned into a watcher and is just cocky for no reason even after almost getting killed, The way Wednesday is introduced is very stupid, he just goes to her is like hello i know ur father kill someone and here is the proof and the she falls in love with him 1 chapter later
a ideia e super legal mas foi mal executado, itens aperarecendo do nada (carro) e alguns dialogos forçados acho que seria coisa de quem nao esta acostumado a escrever, e bom para passar um tempo mas nao algo que te faça grudar e ficar envolvido lendo sem parar.
Keep going young whipper snapper, your story is unique 👌 so far. I have high hopes for this fanfiction!!!!!!!¡!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Amazing story! One of the few stories that kept me in anticipation for more, but I need a break from it as it gets pretty intense at around chapter 100. I need to get my emotions in check because this story is real rollercoaster. Anyways great job and keep doing what you do Author.
Hey there guys, I made this fanfic mainly due to the lack of updates by another Author on modern family, So I got impatient waiting and decided to write one myself. I hope you guys can point out any mistakes I may have made in the Chapters and where I can improve them. Otherwise leave a comment letting me know you enjoyed the chapter, it's a great motivator. Enjoy the Chapters that are to come. For your Information, the Story will begin to have changes but in the first season atleast nothing Major. But the later seasons is where the Fun is at. 🥳