The Advent of Spirits

LV 4

Kokushibou

Me, when i see the fifth My Hero Academia ff in 1 week's................................................................................../:

I see you asking why your novel doesn't get a lot of attention. As someone who has read a lot of fanfics, both popular and unpopular, perhaps I can tell you why. The first turn off is the main character. He's pretty.. one-dimensional. I just don't feel any depth. Happy go lucky, amnesia, misses the "warmth" of a family, etc etc. If you want to write this type of character, try OC-drama, not fanfiction. He's pretty morally grey I'd say, but all of the "evil" things you say he does such as murdering and slaughtering gangs are talked about solely in past tense, we're only told he does these things and not shown him doing these things. To me, at this point in the story at least, he just seems like a plot device instead of a character. I don't particularly know why you've decided to shift the focus of this story onto other characters, but the results show, even you yourself admitted it was a bad move making him a teacher. In my opinion, you shouldn't have made him OP. A more ideal scenario is him knowing a little about his powers, but him having to train in order to unlock them. That could have been interesting as we could actually see him struggle and grow, but if you really think about these past 70 or so chapters, nothing really happened. I mean, there was a dream (flashback?) of some sort and he became a bit more mature and silent but nothing else really happened towards him. He's just incredibly bland. I get it already. He isn't a hero, he's just doing it for "fun". No need to say it 30 times. If you hate the prospect of him being a hero so much, just make him a villain. Another thing is the.. err. romance? It was very quick and forced. I think there could have been a more dramatic encounter, and I feel as if Eri opened up to soon. It should have taken along time for them to trust each other, but I honestly cannot be bothered to stick around to see their relationship anymore. You already said you wouldn't be writing any R-18 because you're not 18 (so do you not watch or read hentai because you aren't 18? there's a lot of things you aren't supposed to do until your 18 but you probably do them so I see no problem with writing fictional lemon but you do you I guess). Eri has pretty much been reduced to a background character who the MC goes shopping with sometimes or something. Should have focused more on them instead of the main cast of BNHA. Furthermore, I'm really not a fan of child protagonists. You keep hyping up his "mysterious" identity, but it's getting tedious at this point. It just felt like nothing really happened at all in the entirety of the story. It just feels forced, bland, and congested. I think you should try writing OC instead of fanfiction, you have a very hard time developing the main characters of your own story and instead opt to develop the mcs of the anime your mc is in. Not my thing.

LV 4

Eom

Things that writen here is from chapter comment, because of laziness I just copy pasted here. Before reading I hesitated a lot too, only reason I can give is I think readers think this is MHA only fanfic (because as long it is MHA fanfic I really wouldn't even look at it) only reason I try to read this fanfic because of Date a Live picture and powers you give it to MC. *Only advice I can give is take away My Hero Academia from title because this not MHA only fanfic. *Other is maybe before you going to next world 5-10 chapter earlier tell the what is next world is so maybe people that not interested in MHA can read for next world. And thanx for this novel there is really nothing bad I found about it because of binge reading I have still not give it review maybe copy past this lol.

LV 2

interesting_knight

Yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes 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yes

LV 1

lJeDl

Its pretty good

LV 1

Void_Queen

For those who like date a live here are some links to read some fan-fics that I find interesting: https://archiveofourown.org/works/24982576/chapters/60482917 https://archiveofourown.org/works/17061125/chapters/40116746 (lemon chapter from the fan-fic link above) https://archiveofourown.org/works/20236486/chapters/47959873 https://archiveofourown.org/works/18725896/chapters/44416288 https://archiveofourown.org/works/16978599/chapters/39906261 https://***.webnovel.com/book/elohim-the-spirit_18220992306898705

LV 4

HOS

Idk why this novel haven't entered the top rating but its definitely underrated and I like the author is meticulous to detail like giving yoshinon different forms while the characters feels like a characters not an AI yes man. Still reading to catch up with the latest update so I might edit this later.

LV 2

interesting_knight

I just noticed that I already have two other reviews in this fanfic.. its weird. Most of the time you can only write one review. Filler Filler Filler Filler Filler Filler Filler Filler Filler Filler Filler

LV 2

Nafsu_geass28

Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge Is this a huge harem? harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem?

LV 14

TimHQ

It's good, I like the mystery about his powers and how he doesn't know about them, worldbuilding is well it's a fanfic, you actually hear something about how the characters think which is nice, story is going smootly, writing quality is good, few mistakes here and there but you read over it pretty easiliy

LV 2

interesting_knight

I am once again writing a rating. My phone died so I couldn't read it. So here I am in another gadget. My laptop without a battery. Constantly charging, without power it dies

LV 2

interesting_knight

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LV 4

Be_n

I dont know why this story isnt rated yet, but it is a gem. ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

LV 14

topak

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LV 4

Ahmed_khaled

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LV 4

SageofNothing

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LV 14

Captain_Deadpool

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LV 11

SupDood

This stuff is unique in every way because he wasn’t the same age the protagonist and he had Eri as a love interest also his powers are cool. Also I like MHA stuff jn general do 5 stars

LV 14

wisdomseeker

Hey. .. This much better than your other Fanfic no hard feelings, i just like a OP Protagonist. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍