/ Movies / Champion: Shazam in the M.C.U.
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* 15 advance chapters in my Pat.reon.
Pat.reon.com/Saintbarbido.
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Shazam. A Champion of the Gods.
Blessed with the Wisdom of Solomon, the Strength of Hercules, the Stamina of Atlas, the Power of Zeus, the Courage of Achilles and the Speed of Mercury.
I never asked for these powers.
I never asked to be booted off to Marvel in a new body with these powers.
But you know what you do with lemons right?
Yeah, I never really liked lemons. I'm probably going to die here.
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* Story Progression is slow.
The universe is a mix of the MCU and the marvel animated projects, so expect to see mutants and other characters.
Disclaimer: I own nothing but my character.
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It's shazam in the world of marvel and he needs a completely unnecessary system to get strong [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
You need to change the title in the marvel with shazam system. Don't read it it just gonna waste your time. Boring if you just give the power of shazam then the story may be get interesting
You are in the Marvel universe and you nerfed your own protagonist in such a little way 🧠[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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You should change the name of the fic, it is very misleading, Shazam does not need a system to become strong, rather training to learn to control his magic, strength and speed, not giving him powers, he will soon reach 500 chapters and he will not have them complete
揭示劇透 Boring and it's clikbait how the story goes so that the Mc has all the powers of Shazam will reach chapter 200 the story is very boring[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
I hate clickbait like this... With that title I expected him to actually have the powers of Shazam. You should really change it, if you don't want to get review-bombed by people annoyed by your clickbait.
Why is it every story involving Shazam the authors nerf him to the point of barely super soldier. He is literally the embodiment of several godly powers, yet here we have this one who can't even take a hit.
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bluds not even Shazam.And author uses weakest excuses to give MC the randomest powers.like how does "wisdom of Solomon", "WISDOM" turn into telekinesis, psychometry, and flight, and talking to the earth😭.
Giving someone amazing power then feeding it to them piece meal while watching them struggle not to die is not a story that interest me. He has power but cant use it is very weak. Its give a sense of falseness to his struggle. Like he could fight and be a hero but whoops he has no power then right before he die HE HAS POWER so f-king lame.
Bad title it should be “in marvel with Shazam system” your story isn’t just “slow” it’s boring af man. We are trying to read something exciting not fall asleep. Just should have given him normal Shazam powers but I feel like you don’t know how to write that and make it fun so you made…this…
Yeah so... shameless author giving themselves 5 stars across the board. Gotta love my brain child after all.
Trash click bait+trash spineless mc+nerf+completely random system = trash generic marvel fic ☺☺☺😵😵 this is all I have to say ..................
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The title is totally misleading. But aside from that it's a decent story. And before some salty fanatic weak MC lover rants, yes I am only here for a OP MC. I saw the name Shazam and I expected to see Shazam. Sue me. I didn't expect a 1/6th of Shazam. What the synopsis should make clear is that He will become something akin to Shazam at the very end of the story. He doesn't have any of those powers so to speak. Not at the moment. Might have in the distant future. WQ(4/5): Some dialogues and scene Sequences need work. A bit of randomness makes them a bit confusing. Aside from that decent grammar. The writing style suits me as well. Good job. Story Development and Character Design (3/5): Don't really like it, don't really hate it. I expected something and got totally something else. and not the good kind. Hence I'm disappointed. But anyways it's a good story for showing progression I guess. It's still too early on saying that tho as there's so few chapters. I just hope there are a few adventures he does as a fully powered Shazam in the end. It's unlikely but one can only hope. Updating Stability(5/5): It's apparently commissioned work. Don't know how that reflects but 5/5 for me. World background(4/5): Still many things left to explore and so far so good.