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摘要
This story is about a man who lives solely for himself. A man who travels from world to world for sole reason of leaning new things and bettering his skills.
(fair warning I'm a first time writer and English isn't my first language)
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(If the owner of the cover wants it removed just let me know)
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Rocky Road Cake Recipe For the cake; preheat the oven to 350 degrees then butter and flour three 6” pans. In a small bowl, mix together the buttermilk, sour cream, coffee and vanilla paste and set it aside. In a large bowl, whisk together the flour, cocoa powder, baking powder, baking soda and salt. Give it a whisk and set that aside as well. Beat the butter and sugar in a stand mixer, or with a hand mixer, until it is light and fluffy. With the mixer on low, beat in the eggs and egg yolks one at a time. Now beat in the flour mixture and buttermilk in three alternating batches. Mix just until it’s almost combined, use a spatula to scrape the bottom, then complete the mixing. Divide the batter between the pans, smooth the tops and bake for about 30 minutes or until a skewer inserted in the center comes out clean. Let cool for about 10 minutes then invert onto a wire rack. For the buttercream; cream the room temperature butter then add the salt. I use a stand mixer fitted with a paddle attachment but a hand mixer works fine too. Add the cocoa powder and mix until it’s incorporated. Sifting will help prevent lumps and improve consistency. Now scrape the bowl down and mix until homogenous. Add the confectioners sugar in batches and mix until nice and creamy then pour in the melted chocolate. If it is a bit thick, you can add cream a tablespoon at a time until desired consistency is reached then add the vanilla. For the Ganache; scald the cream in a small saucepan over medium heat. Bring it just to a boil the pour it over the semisweet chocolate. Let it sit for a couple minutes then whisk until it’s nice and smooth. Reserve about 2/3 cup of the ganache for the drip. Add the walnuts and marshmallows to the chocolate once it has cooled down and give it a mix to make sure everything is well incorporated. To assemble this cake; Pipe a ring of buttercream around the top edge of the first layer. Use a spatula to fill the center with the ganache. Place on the next layer and repeat until the last, then cover the outside with buttercream and smooth it out. Drizzle the ganache on top of the cake. If it’s thickened, then you can mix in a bit more cream and zap it in the microwave for a few seconds at 50% power. Pile the extra rocky road mixture on top of the cake and then press in a few extra marshmallows and walnuts for a nicer look, then a light drizzle of chocolate as the final touch.
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Based on things you've said in the past I was expecting far more from you, for shame author, for shame. Perfect example, I never understood how some people who read suddenly forget how things should be formated when they write there own. You've disappointed me.
I will be honest I was liking the story, when I saw the tags I thought maybe this won't be a harem, and how wrong I was, in the end, harem is just not my cup of tea. If you don't mind the harem the give it a try, I think it is worth at least that much. Author I won't keep reading but I wish you all the best!
Overall a good story. Plus very few spelling mistakes. The protagonist uses his powers fully and doesn't take his powers for granted and in constant progression of bettering himself. Plus the plot caries on smoothly to become the most OP ever.
Ok I havr read Until chapter 15 and l’m disappointed and confused I mean my guy was an assassin a cold killer yet he isn’t acting like one and then he meets momo and the rest then BAMM there in love like what in the living ****is this please explain too me
To be honest, I didn't like the job. Like why ask for the power of Yahweh and not use them. Alo world "My Hero Academy" is a weak world, mc should already be the strongest there. And his interactions with the characters are just awful, almost no full-fledged dialogue. And when the author told us his background, I was expecting a cold mc, and here he answers everyone with such a friendly
Am giving you 5 * but to be honest am very disappointed 😞 in you on the way you develop the story D I S A P P O I N T E D 😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞
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A good story idea, being a hero with yhwach abilities, but it became boring because there are no interactions at all. Everything about training. He went to training and then trained. He went to school. He fought and took second place and returned to training. There is no talk that makes a realistic story, no reactions, nothing. Moved straight to the next fight. We didn't see anyone's response. Briefly contains many loopholes that would have made a great story. You probably didn't want to make connections because he would leave the world. So what's the point of watching if we don't have fun? You should do your best to make the story realistic and believable before you do. Anything
One of the major problems I have with the MC is that the author tagged the novel as having SelfishMC but he keeps saving people time and time again when he has nothing to gain from it. Selfish - (of a person, action, or motive) lacking consideration for other people; concerned chiefly with one's own personal profit or pleasure. "I joined them for selfish reasons".
Honestly one of the best system in the MHA world fanfictions coz the mc was OP everyone knew he was OP but they still tried to look down on Jim coz he was quirk less which I found realistic. The only reason that I only gave it a 4🌟 in story development was that the mc made a big speech about him clawing his was from the bottom to survive and save the child he picked up but didn't even consider saving eri ahead of time.
This is a heavily invest on gaming system isekai mc. Starting from MHA with his main system as bleach at the moment. A very strong mc yet he didn't fight for real, ever. Kind of like superman that love to abuse himself by fighting in opponent prowess level...
I’ve never red something so stupid in all my life. Mc has nearly every power in bleach(even ywach) and decide to use a gun. everything stupid. Mc personality doesn’t match what was said in chapter 1. In the sports festival, mc was slightly moved by a finger flick of deku when mc has 12.5 million weights on. The whole novel is irritating.
Overall Rating: Subpar/average fanfic which could've been better if the pacing isn't too rushed and too many skills with lack of MC development & interaction which resulted to poor story progression that created tons of plot holes. Still, kudos to author-san for having less to no mistake grammatical errors and good English vocabulary. xD
The story suffers from feeling rushed with jist how thr lack of description is shown. The first chapter atleastbdescribedbwhatbwas happening but the next chapters felt rushed, like a friend trying to explain something but really telling everything. The main character is pretty bland even for someone described as carefree. He should show atleast some interesting personality but nothing. Yachiru also doesn't add much but just be there for women to get close to Yhwach. It jist further makes the romance rushed. Everything else is just unlrealistic in a logical sense. The way on how some characters just act feels like what they are doing just doesn't make sense.
I like the story it had potential to become a great one but I hate how this guy went and help the other characters like didn't he day he wouldn't have attachments so yeah dropped chap16 you can read it's not bad but it's what I good either just disappointed
It has some potential but I'm just gonna state everything I think Is wrong with this fanfic 1. It lacks realisticness like this man is doing stuff beyond human capabilities yet they keep saying he dosent have a quirk also they dont question him bringing yachiru to school at all 2. Your writing is to clumped up together you need to space some of it apart and do punctuation I recommend grammarly it's a app that would help you alot 3. All his abilities and spirits are too much especially If bleach fans read this I think you should give more detail and explain each spirit and abilities like I am and anime only fan for bleach So I dont know anything about ywache yet and hollow black so it would be nice if you could explain the abilities in detail 4. I think the mc personality is lacking and too care free so I think if you make him more aggressive it would be better So this is all I have for you if you fix these things it would be golden