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摘要
Jayden, a talented and ambitious boy, has always dreamed of becoming a Barber.
However, his aspirations seem out of reach in his ordinary life.
One fateful night, as Jayden was walking back home he encounters a woman in danger and tries to save her...unfortunately, because of his recklessness, he died...
But that wasn't the end for him as he awakens in a realm beyond imagination, finding himself reincarnated into the DC Universe.
Now trying to live out his lifelong dream, Jayden must navigate this new reality where superheroes and supervillains coexist.
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My last story wasn't really starting off well so I decided to change it for this dc one while I fine-tune and mark out the other one that I'll upload into another story category.
I'll be honest here I've never read a dc comic in my life but I love the movies and have been reading up on my favourite characters. I'm still confused about the whole rebirth thing and the new 52 but I'm trying.
In any case, most of my knowledge will be from the movies, some videos I've seen from Kinglion, variant YouTube and of course the wiki. I've been recommended to watch the young justice TV show, static and other animated stuff so while writing this I'll watch some of that stuff in my free time.
Also just a reminder, I'm not a professional writer and don't claim to be, I'll make mistakes, so pointing out those mistakes would be much appreciated.
Then with nothing more to say I hope you enjoy my story, and if not then thanks for trying it out.
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at the start you'd think it's slice of life type story but since he's in DC MC becomes hero/anti honestly disappointing development.. ohh also he has a magic time travel rock
I don't think there is any potential of development for this story. Propably would be dropped around chapter 30.
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Honestly I haven’t seen anything at all like this so I’m really interested to see where it goes.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update]
First and foremost I intend for this review to be constructive for the author and to hope that this helps to improve his writing no matter how little. I gave 2 of the five categories a 1 and it was intentional. I like the other three very much so I gave them a 5. I love the concept of the cheat as its unique and also like the pacing for now (chapter 26) as the heroes have only started 5ish years ago so a loong time to get to darkside and other villains, so the small time skips are appreciated. Here is what I hate about the story: the MC's character and how he behaves. the DC verse (for who can realize it) is a grueling world, one where committing major crimes and breaking the Geneva convention is a morning cup of coffee. Our MC has the knowledge of the DC verse and should know about this. Yet he still CHOOSES to get plopped into this verse, and CHOOSES to move to Gotham city with a happy go lucky/everything will go swell if I keep cutting hair attitude? What do I mean by this? You have to understand that he somehow got into the flow of things and goes to a convention and "sees" some one he is close to die/sacrifice herself, therefore "losing" her. Isnt this too lax for some one who CHOSE to be in this verse? I get what the author is trying to do, he is trying to do something I HATE in novels and that is character development (sponge bob rainbow gif) (P.S PERSONALLY I hate character development, I mean why should I see someone else's struggles while I am already struggling. But I digress). But it gets kinda weird too, the guy seems to get a switch flipped and goes all- imma make you regret this cause you gonna kill my girl - after he catches penguin? I mean should that switch not already be flipped when he is born into DC? Why does something need go wrong before it gets flipped? I think the time stone/power thing is too much a safety net and an unnecessary one that the MC gets considering his already OP powers. Is it supposed to be his crutch every time something goes wrong? Also his happy go lucky attitude is also kinda weird if he is going to get involved with Harley, I mean torture is her fun time and if he gets involved with her, the only attitude I can see that relationship working with is if the MC goes in with the mindset of "I can fix her, all I need to do is cut her hair.". Here is how I think the MC should be, keep the hair cutting cheat and make it a hobby, but give him some background something like in his past life that gives him some grit to stand up to the threats that are in DC, for eg: he was a criminal and the only solace he got was the barber old man and reading comics, novels and watching anime. Make it so that he has a cautious nature to him and a 6th sense of something might go wrong here, but he got the tools to deal with it. Make him be funny, but have an edge to him that can handle a psycho like Harley. Get rid of his time cheat, its too much of a crutch. Make him a bruce wayne/tony stark level genius instead so that he can use his hair related powers better, i mean he can make hair into ANYTHING, he literally has infinite resources, he is Momo (from bnha) on crack. If anyone wants to correct me write a reply to this review, but be prepared to able to be digest my responses and not just hate on my ideas instead of being able understand my point of view. Hope this helps you author-san.
Fam this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
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If I may give you suggestions!! 1st: Write a synopsis. ASAP! 2nd Write a synopsis. ASAPP! 3rd Write a synopsis. ASAPPP! 4th Write a synopsis. ASAPPPP! I don't know why or how that took me 3min to type...
Author, you probably should try use grammarly to better most typing and pronunciation mistakes you made
🔥🔥🔥 never read something like this before but loving every chapter! Keep em coming 🤙🏾
I love the plot, the idea, and how the story is developing. Keep it up or else I'll go Joker irl. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Nothing bad to say about the novel. The start got me hooked and im really excited about the future of this novel.
Keep up the good work. Keep up the good work. Keep up the good work. Keep up the good work. Keep up the good work. Keep up the good work. Keep up the good work.
Hair manipulation? That’s the best you could think of? Hair manipulation? It’s a great story but really hair manipulation….. I understand that the new trend of slice of life is hot topic right now but this is just a whole new level of “ I dOnT wANt tO bE a HeRo oR VillaIN aNd iNvoLve mYself HUR DURRR”