バッジ 8
Moments 89
Technology doesnt work in the shelter tho ...?
After punching he goes to the treadmill, to test his speed. The machine will tell the data instantly but first it will gather data from all the equipments and calculate the fitness level.
Reincarnated in Super Gene World
Anime & Comics · Hell_Dragon_Azavok
Where is the story? No interaction no plot just informing us he just did things , you can just combine all the chapters from the start to now into two or three sentances there is no story here , no plot , just nothing. sigh... good luck anyway..
ch 0 6 CH 6 : DESERT
Super Gene:Ten Thousand Lottery System •
Others · Heavenly_Lord_07
Kinda stupid
[Don't worry, it will be shown to you every day the moment the sun rises in the east.]
Chronicles of the Multiversal Wanderer
Movies · SlimeSage
Tbh the story is kinda more castle less noah you should try to include the mc more or get him more involved if someone really wanted more of castle they can watch the show tbh a fanfic is usually to make changes to the og not add a background character that makes minimal changes to the story but its still early so cant really judge it for its just a thought not a problem with the story also the switching of scenes is not bad but maybe space it out a bit between chapters? Good luck and thanks for your work
A lot of things at play right now. Where is the MC in all of this. How will he come into play. To find answers to all the above questions and more. Please.... read the next chapter. Pretty sure it's released by the time you read the note below as well.
Reincarnated into an AU world of TV
TV · Hellblaze
The story is good but the song lyrics are too much tbh and quite distracting would be better if you just leave it at the song name and suggest to listen to it instead of this because if im reading the story then next line is the song i would need to reread the lines again then try to skip the lyrics to be able to picture the story maybe you are going about it like it would be with a movie with BGM but it doesnt do as well in text anyway thanks for the chapter a good work so far
ch 12 CH - 10 - American Duos - Part - Two
Reincarnated into an AU world of TV
TV · Hellblaze
I think this one should be uncle nine from the zombie movies or mr vampire as it is called a taoist with two idiotic students
Jiu Shu(The Evil Way of the Heavens)
I FOOLED THE ENTIRE CHAT GROUP
Anime & Comics · Slothful_Cliche
At first, everybody who was looking was confused as if nothing happened. But in the next moment as Elucid was quickly approaching. All of his limbs slid off his body, he was now only a flying torso, speeding toward Isaiah. Going too fast to stop.
DxD: ReKiba
Anime & Comics · Alcoholic_Panda
"Hahahaha! This is fantastic! My sworn friend is becoming a Dragon. No we are not mere friends anymore. We are BROTHERS! RAHAHAHAHA!!" Veldora laughed like a madman
DxD: ReKiba
Anime & Comics · Alcoholic_Panda
Better both always both ...and specially zeus
"Look man, I wish I could! I really do, but this is direct orders from the gods themselves"
Percy Jackson: Son of Hades - Prince of the Underworld
Book&Literature · Shadow_D_Monarch3
Where was that exp when they first met?
Both Lucian and Luke winced in pain slightly before moving back, Luke wiped his cheek while Lucian looked down at his thigh with a smirk, they both managed to injure the other at the same time.
Percy Jackson: Son of Hades - Prince of the Underworld
Book&Literature · Shadow_D_Monarch3
Soo taking out the glasses is harder than hiding the giant he is riding ? And he cant just put the bag in another bigger bag and act like he took things from that one? Or just put it in his pocket away from sight? Yeaaah sure that makes sense ....🤦🏼♂️
"I forgot I have fucking dyslexia"
Percy Jackson: Son of Hades - Prince of the Underworld
Book&Literature · Shadow_D_Monarch3
Good thing you didnt because why would he flinch ( as a real kid who didnt know her past) and it would be problematic
(1): originally I was going to turn that whisk into a knife and have the Mc flinch at her, making Medea lower the knife slowly and continue baking sadly, until the Mc softly apologizes for flinching and then they would have had a touching moment… but it was too much drama so I said no.
Percy Jackson: Son of Hades - Prince of the Underworld
Book&Literature · Shadow_D_Monarch3
The start of the story is not bad but it has a few problems like the pacing should be slower it feels kinda jumpy too fast also it would do better if you write a time pass when changing scenes like when he was training one second and the next line he is cleaning if you put a transition between or even just a few lines about going home then giong with her to do the cleaning instead of just starting to clean , it would flow smoother and the dialog also needs a bit of work and things like who is talking and to whom needs a bit of work to make it more clear , in any case good work and good luck hope you can keep at it and make a great story out of this✌🏻 oh and emojis in the story are kinda awkward to have while reading
ch 0 1 Becoming Issei Hyoudou
DxD: The Reincarnated Supreme Conqueror
Anime & Comics · Pinto_sh
"Its due to his personality and looks, I mean look at him. He's so beautiful, ahhhh, I wish he would just take me and choke me against the wall."
The Eminence of a True Monarch of the Shadows
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
"Sorry, I'm late. Got caught up with an exorcism. You wouldn't believe the idiots who think dealing with demons is good-… Son of a fuckin' bitch!" I was interrupted by a gruff, smoker-voiced apology and sudden swearing.
Gotham's Dead End Bar
Anime & Comics · Daddy
Should have just used a sword like the one in his bankai instead of those like i get the bigger weapon looking cool and all but lets be honest its not really practical and kinda gets in the way specially when having 2
The Hollow stopped chasing the boy and looked at Ichigo. "WRROOOOOAAAARRRRR!!!!" It roared at him. Ichigo smirked. He stabbed the claymore in his left hand onto the ground. He grabbed his claymore in his right hand with both of his hands.
Bleach: Another Story
Anime & Comics · some_writer
He didnt need that when she turned him into one and just switched it off in the end so he should be able to transform without leaving his body
"This is a Gokon Tekkō. It is a device used by the Shinigami to forcibly remove souls from bodies. Your physical body is alright, it's not dead. " Rukia explained. Ichigo sighed.
Bleach: Another Story
Anime & Comics · some_writer
Why would he do that ? Dont say he is just a normal guy etc this is not a normal reaction , humans react with anger towards fear so as to overcome the fear , so if someone swings a sword at you you dodge and swings back you dont stop yourself from defending youself it illogical
Yu Tian tried to stop the sword with all his might, but no matter how hard he tried, he couldn't do anything and the sword continued to cut the man in half.
Human Of Rise In Against The Gods
Anime & Comics · Akasaki_Ryujin