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概要
Arthur was a soldier and well he died and got reincarnated in the world of Naruto and got the classic 3 power ups from ROB . - Isshiki's Dojutsu , Demon slayer breathing techniques and 2 cool weapons. Read the story to find more about it
MC is born before Hashirama dies. He is of the same age group as Danzo and Hiruzen.
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Author notes:
MC will be strong but not so overpowered that he can fight armies alone or kill kages like cabbages . It will take time for him to get that strong.
There will be no harem .Maybe romance but that will be a little late in story.
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レビューを書くA fanfic full of mistakes and errors, the author can't decide the personality he wants MC to have so now MC have 3 personality. He just gave mc multiple personality disorder without intending to, the 1st is the 45 year old soilder used as a method to skip charecter development but is never used for that purpose. 2nd zoro the reincarnate mc who should have the mentality of a 45 year old soilder but does the evil laugh just thinking about his plans to get strong and gets excited just to be breastfed by his mother. 3rd and last Yoriichi his shinobi personality, the shinobi name mc gave himself that thinks he will be able to save evryome when the attck on uzumaki village happens, he acts like he knows everything and is leader of the 'kids' he is studying with and in the process losses the last 2 personalities but switches back to zoro form time to time. And in this process of creating 3 personalities non of them is able to be used nicely and it destroys the story it just becomes a fanfic with mc having a multiple personality disorder without and feel or touch to it
Mate the prologue 1 is copy paste from the fanfic Madara in the Avatar world just the numbers of days are a little bit different. Can't you think of something original really. I will continue to see if the novel is good but you lost points for the prologue
The Mc is A former soldier Died and got stuck in the void for almost a year, God found him and says that he passed the trial/test and got reincarnated memories intact with wishes (1-7 chapters). The author is Switching to 2 names the mc's new name and Yoriichi, hope he sticks to one and only changes it during 1st,2nd and 3rd perspective and not the narrators. The author also suddenly shows a glimpse to the future this early in the story he should not do that as it's spoils the story. Anyway the mc currently (chp15/ age 3) does not use/know his powers nor he is already OP. I really like the story also the author do polls to what the story should progress so im going to tell this, there are not that many FF where the mc is a kage and not in konoha or pro-konoha. The timeline is before the 1st ninja war as hashirama is still alive. Lastly is that I hope to see more chapters as this story has many potentials, I cant tell much more cause there is not that much of chapters so that s only I can tell.
everything up till where I read (chapter 35) seemed just convient and undeserved, just so happen to find friends that fit roles of what he wanted in his school, just so happened to find kekkei genkai (don't know if I spelled that correctly). just so happen to have a family that doesn't question knowledge that is above his age or creating jutsu at a young age. it's all just too convient and his power seems shallow, any fight taken he dominates unless he fights an obviously better opponent. the world around seems shallow and isn't described well. the concept was decent but the execution was mediocre. if author were to go back and edit his past chapter to input some more detail, stop giving everyone kekkei genkai, while also expanding on the main character getting his power through effort (like getting expirence through life or death situations), I think this novel could be better otherwise I feel it's too bland to continue.I hope my criticism is constructive and isn't taken poorly. i also hope if the author reads this it could help him for the future of his writing.
Language is good, but abilities falling from the sky is annoying, mc takes 3 for zero price and makes it double, while remaining non op if we can trust to author. Prologue feels like useless, because all it does is choosing abilities that are not op but it is, and explaining that all 45yrs of his life was essential only for not womiting while killing. Overall about 3/5, good lang and nice worldview, but all overwritten by bombarding mc with gifts, like author himself didn't know what build mc will be using
I quite like this fanfiction. However, I think the author is making the Uzumaki Clan a bit overpowered, six people who can seal Tailed Beasts seems too much. He would have a tough time making other villages relevant if he went on like this. Even Konoha had a handful of S-rank shinobi in most of the wars and, to me, it makes no sense for Uzu to have 10. Still, I find it better than the other Uzumaki fanfictions out there, at least the MC is not overpowered since birth.
ignore what others say. for me, this novel is an amazing naruto novel fanfic. spoiler, ie not canon and not in konoha like most other novels. mc will be in uzumaki village and is the grandson of kage uzumaki who will later succeed him and become the amazing kage uzumaki!
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I’m gonna say this is good and the writing is very easy to understand thanks the world good choice and the cheats are op enough but not to overpowered
Hey, Author of the Tsunade Novel. Someone told me you borrowed a bit from me. Just wanted to let you know I completely support the novel and I hope you finish it!
*Let it be known that this review is based on 4 wasted chapters on the Prologue itself and one other review that explained the core issues with this fic, which i myself agree with completely.**I'm not an experienced reviewer,so don't expect bullet points or specifics.**I also want to note that this isn't meant to be harsh criticism. Just thoughts on what i hoped would have been, had it been presented in a different manner.*I came in thinking that i was gonna read about a reincarnator who was just gonna get thrown into the narutoverse with demon slayer breathing techniques/skills/moves, as well as have what any great demon slayer/swordsman needs, which is a sword, be it notable ones from Enma From One Piece,Tessaiga From Inuyasha, Ea From Fate Series, Venuzdonoa From The Misfit,Murasame From Akame Ga Kill, Ryujin Jakka From Bleach..etc.. so many choices with minor restrictions because of the power the blades themselves wield to which the mc could have trained to overcome/ unlock /obtained at certain points in the story. I thought, "Narutoverse, Demon slayer, iconic sword, let the road to becoming the greatest Swordsman this world has ever seen begin," he gets into the world an bam, that's it. But no, this ended being the biggest wish fulfillment I've read so far, with an mc whose mentality is questionable for his age (which is 45yrs old)and past occupation as a former Spec Ops Soldier. The wishes in this story are questionable as well. The supposed "GOD" is more of a ROB, but I'm not gonna get into that. This is already far too long for a comment. This is my first time writing something this long, i guess it's cause these prologues have left much to be desired for something that could've been better executed. It's been said that first impressions are the most important,but so far, I'm not impressed. Good luck to the author, and I hope you don't take this as me bashing your work👍
Thanks a lot for this story, while not the best I ever read, the story was both enjoyable and well written. I sincerely recommend it to anyone who may read this. Thank you author-san [img=recommend]
Good read, only issue I have with it is that the MC is supposed to be a 45 year old soldier. He doesn't act like one at all. Then they go on to explain that he lacks battle experience when he has been in the army for years.... Another minor thing is the last wish still bugs me. Him wanting 2 contract scrolls seems so pointless. Like what even is the use of that? Are the beasts he eventually contracts going to suddenly gain intelligence??? Cause if I'm correct, only the summoning clans have intelligence. So, these contracts just seem so pointless and a downgrade from just getting a different wish?????
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