Pokemon - Adventure

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Moxie

Shameless five-star review from the author: I like where this is going and I have always wanted to depict what my Pokémon journey would be like. So in a sense, I am writing this as if though I was there (most of the time) This gives it a more personal touch to me and the readers hopefully. English is not my first language, so if you find any grammar errors or any of the like, make sure to leave a comment about it... Its free! Thanks for reading if you have.

LV 10

Rex_shed

Love it love it love it...... Hope there will more andhope it will have nice chapter release stability..... I will like to read more..... But..... Can it also get romance sub-plot too...... If so....... Then set pole for it....... So we readers can VOTE! for it......

LV 11

_Blankk

Fantastic story, the best Pokemon based one I've read, on any website not just this one. Anyone who enjoys Pokemon and system stories should definitely give it a read! 👍

LV 4

TheKris

I can't belive such a good hidden gem (author) was hidden in this world. The story is so good that it will make you crave for more. Your grammar is so good. I sincerily hope you won't drop this, because I really enjoy it.

LV 3

0_Jordinio_0

Honestly, I'm disappointed. Shawn is pretty damn bland. There's very little about his character that's interesting. You've shown little to no likes, and no vices at all either. Honestly, he literally revolves around pokemon and the system. He's not a person, he's more like a robot. Not to mention, he's stupid as hell. With the storage option, he doesn't need to settle for just a team of six, he can switch between pokemon freely. You could have been training some of the other ones in your storage like Raticate, Mankey, Sandshrew, Nidorino/Nidorina. Then there's the levels. By time he left Viridian, Charmander was level 12. He only got to that level because he had a bit of a cheat in dragon dance, that let him beat evolved pokemon like Nidorino/Nidorina, Pidgeotto, Raticate and such, so why was Green's Squirtle just a level below? Does not compute mate. On top of that, Viridian Forest is large, very large, it would have taken him days to get through that. So why was he just reaching level 16 against Brock? That's stupid. Writing Quality is decent I suppose, much better than the vast majority on this website. Sadly it doesn't even measure up to the average standard on Fanfiction.net, so 2/5. Your update schedule is good, I'll give you that. So 4/5. Story Development. You progressed along, but too much convenience, too many captures off screen, the quality of battles and such are subpar. 2/5. Character Design. I already went into it above. 1/5. You do a decent job with the World Background, well for someone on this website anyway. I'll just leave it at 3/5 because I'm feeling generous. Overall, a 2,4/5 score. Not bad in my opinion since the vast majority of crap on this website shouldn't even rate a 1. You're at the point where you have potential and would benefit from getting constructive criticism on Fanfiction.net if you upload stories here.

LV 4

Doomey

Great story and nice author perfect for a new story. Im looking forward to reading this theirs always room for another system/pokemon fanfic.

LV 4

LuanaQueiroz

Probably one of the coolest and interesting stories I've read on this site. The writing is really well made and the chapters come very quickly. Definitely worth reading!! o(≧v≦)o \(≧▽≦)/ o(≧v≦)o

LV 4

TheKris

As of chapter 12, I'm still thinking about how good this novel is. Like seriously! Even if the author is sick, he posts chapters. If you love some fun, laid-back pokemon novel, this is the one for you Ps: the author is probobly blushing while reading this

LV 5

gingerghostflewby

Truly an amazing Pokémon fanfic, everything about it is top quality. The writing is very good, character development is very good and I really like the MCs personality, as well as the balance the author has found between making him cool and strong but not so op as to make the story boring. Highly recommend this as my favourite Pokémon fanfic yet!

LV 1

Daniel_Lucas_7905

Do you intend to return? Or did you give up? I really liked your story. The development was very cool, one of the best that I saw here on the site

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dawson_bonaventure

Most interesting storyline about a pokemon story so far. I hope it continues because i am giving a liking to this story. It contains many fascinating characteristic but a the story is a little cliche. I really hope a future to this story. Please continue!

LV 15

BigBoobs

This is a really great story I just wish you would update soon. Please update!!! 📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝📝💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻💻📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📖📝📖📝📝📝📝📝📖

LV 13

funmaxwell

Hm i don't know how i should start this review. But I'm going to start by saying the story and grammar and world building aspects aren't bad but their not great ether. I love the hole idea of the premise of this story. But i felt like the characters personalities were somewhat boring or just lacking some how. For instance pokemon In general just seem to love the mc and besides a few cuddle scenes with his starter pokemon thier isn't much in the way development of a personality or at least that's the way i felt when reading this. Another thing that bothered me about the story was it seem to me that the author was trying to insert some relizum into pokemon world. But left surten aspects unrealistic. The author seemed to be doing this when he set the age to being able to get your starter and going on a journey to 17 years old. One of the things that crossed my mind when i read this couldn't they have just gotten their starters at 10 years old and not levee palet town until their 15 or 17 years-old. Another aspect that bothered me was the names red & green. which are basically the anime equivalent of ash and gary. I know their some type of manga these names come from but don't know much about it. The reason this bothers me is because it seemed to me the author was trying to make this fictional pokemon world follow some form of relizum. But keeps these unrealistic names in the story. I mean onistly who names their kids a shade of color. Personally i think the author should have gone with the more well recognized and realistic sounding name of ash and gary. This would also go long ways in making them seem like real people. The last thing i want say is it felt to me that the story was mostly the game story with a few changes. Not sure how else to elaborate on this.

LV 4

JakeWJElliott

A pokemon novel in which he travels and completes the pokedex. Interesting. I also like how strong the pokes are. I also like the difference in pokemon that he's used. Exeggcute is not commonly used. His pokemon are all op which i like. I hated how Ash seemed like a novice trainer against everyone unless the 'plot' demanded it. So far i like it.

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GodsTongue

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born_lazy

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LV 5

hight999fantasy

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