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Pretty good fanfic about a guy with Homelander's powers and more. The focus is mostly on his mental state and his influence on the world. Quality and update stability vary a bit, but the rest is good.
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work of an excellent author I give it 5 stars directly [img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Good night][img=Out of it][img=Good night][img=Relaxed][img=More pls][img=Mad][img=Moneybags][img=Moneybags][img=More pls][img=Unalived][img=Speechless][img=Speechless][img=More pls][img=Moneybags][img=Speechless][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=Speechless][img=Smug]
Needs a villain tag. Dude gets upset at pedo rapist uncle and child trafficking parents to the point that he straight murders them. Okay, sure. Almost the next chapter he starts mind raping people and later starts human experimentation. I'm fine with a hero who has no problem killing, but the author made the protagonist as bad, if not worse, than the people he kills.
I didn't like the beginning of the story, but I have to say that it got better. In the last chapters I was really convinced and liked the development of the story as well as the MC. MC doesn't just have the Homelander powers, he's getting stronger which I think is good because otherwise his goal/mission would be hard to achieve.
Not worth losing time for reading, if whoever takes a time to use a little bit of brain power while reading the ff will know that nothing about makes sense.
Greatly improved I’m not going to lie I’m super impressed with the story so far it’s starts of okay but later in the story it looks good great work improvement with the story
Just hand wave anything you want into existence. Then, the author creates new things just to progress the "story". Has no logical connections at all. Small example here. He leaves wherever he starts from, possibly New York( Don't believe it's mentioned) and just so happens to go to Mystic Falls but has no idea about anything Vampire Diaries related. It's literally a small town like any other. Why did he stop here of all places, and you know not one of the 100s of other small towns on the way there? Handwaved because the author said so. Continuity? story flow? That's not needed here.
Five stars anyday, very well-written story. Capturing every aspect of homlander...good and bads. Well-developed story characters explained in really good detail. I love the story, do give it a read.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I like the Novel Continue This I will send 2 power Stones daily. Don't Drop Like Other's Ok Try To read Other Novel's and Try to not end story too early
The story was beautiful it was well done. I have read so many books on here and yours was just perfect
You are doing something great here man. I like the progress. I only wonder why he is always in conflict with himself and his powers. But overall, MC is chill, I enjoy his emphasis on self control. Please, upload faster.
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The story started nice but at some point it turned from an anti-hero to something dark and not fun to read anymore. I have read till chapter 19 and lost interest when it only focused on the secondary character. I know the author probably wanted to expand his world and not focus only on the MC but for me it felt boring. The grammar was okay though so that and Updating Stability will get five stars from me.
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I thought the first part was good in started going down hill when he got really emo and homelander like. then the story went even more down hill with the oc you used taking not only fore front in the story but being part of the most likely main villian. This is NOT an i have homlander powers in marvel fanfic that was a straight lie. This is a multi crossover with a face lift fanfic and i can smell the chaos coming off this story. I have kinda a big problem when u mix anime and american comics it just doesnt work most of the time unless ur really good. This is just too random and becoming really edgy which is not really what was advertised.
Great potential, good grammar. The story is a good read. Would ask the author to make the chapters longer in exchange for slower updates, makes the reading experience better. Strong advice to keep continuing the story.[img=update]
I don't know how to feel about this. Writitng is good but gives off watpad vibe, I dont understand MC motivation and i don't even know how his power work, It redundant to say he have homelander and new order power when its totally differnt and have limitation and uses thats totally unrelated, More like author is making it up as they go so with each new chapter the setting from last one become useless.
MC is a maniac who want control everything, his powers don't write how work(And i read to 27 chapter and don't understand how work his 2nd power ).
Grammar need alot of work, the story development is not good, the character design could be better, the world background is meh all in all a meh story
my very first story with homelander si that i somewhat liked. i mean i don't like boys series but i always thought of writing an si with homelander powers this one is good.
Ok. Thor here. Writing this review because it is a marvel story. So basically, I can say that this story has high potential. Integration of Homelander in the storyline is also ok. Grammar can be improved but I think since your are an Indian, English isn't your first language. Overall it is a good story. Nice work.
I like this story very much, the mc is also great for an op character not just one dimensional.
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This is a good story, I'm really enjoying it. I'd just like the MC to be less mental, I get that it's probably for character development, but it's slowly becoming tedious to read. I suggest you just have the MC use his reality warping to remove all mental illness/ mental problems from himself since you've shown he's able to use it on himself.
its a good story so far with definite emotional depth that mc's in stories don't really have and there's also emotional depth to the other character shown so far. The mc is not the perfect being with no problems and I assume will get character development from the way it's going, and character development is always the best in a story otherwise it gets bland with no mental and emotional growth so expect that. The mc has good powers, op as well which is what you look for in this pic and also knows how to use his powers well not like most of the idiotic op mc's out there where the author can't use the powers correctly. Updates are extremely consistent. The world background is marvel with mutants and the whole of it with maybe even potential mini crossovers that I'm seeing, nothing major though so it doesn't ruin the story. overall, a good story so far and looking forward to more.
Pretty good start. I personally don't like MC's with mental issues. And I also don't like non human or not similar to human love interests. So I can't give it full stars.
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the mc is not homelander power wise. theres more but I don't like complaining, maybethe author can improve.
Wrote It when i got an Idea. Seems like it is headed towards great Succes. Though I irge you to check my other stories they're different from this one but great stories ive poured my heart into nonetheless.
Pretty good fanfic about a guy with Homelander's powers and more. The focus is mostly on his mental state and his influence on the world. Quality and update stability vary a bit, but the rest is good.
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Needs a villain tag. Dude gets upset at pedo rapist uncle and child trafficking parents to the point that he straight murders them. Okay, sure. Almost the next chapter he starts mind raping people and later starts human experimentation. I'm fine with a hero who has no problem killing, but the author made the protagonist as bad, if not worse, than the people he kills.
I didn't like the beginning of the story, but I have to say that it got better. In the last chapters I was really convinced and liked the development of the story as well as the MC. MC doesn't just have the Homelander powers, he's getting stronger which I think is good because otherwise his goal/mission would be hard to achieve.
Not worth losing time for reading, if whoever takes a time to use a little bit of brain power while reading the ff will know that nothing about makes sense.
Greatly improved I’m not going to lie I’m super impressed with the story so far it’s starts of okay but later in the story it looks good great work improvement with the story
Just hand wave anything you want into existence. Then, the author creates new things just to progress the "story". Has no logical connections at all. Small example here. He leaves wherever he starts from, possibly New York( Don't believe it's mentioned) and just so happens to go to Mystic Falls but has no idea about anything Vampire Diaries related. It's literally a small town like any other. Why did he stop here of all places, and you know not one of the 100s of other small towns on the way there? Handwaved because the author said so. Continuity? story flow? That's not needed here.
Five stars anyday, very well-written story. Capturing every aspect of homlander...good and bads. Well-developed story characters explained in really good detail. I love the story, do give it a read.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I like the Novel Continue This I will send 2 power Stones daily. Don't Drop Like Other's Ok Try To read Other Novel's and Try to not end story too early
The story was beautiful it was well done. I have read so many books on here and yours was just perfect
You are doing something great here man. I like the progress. I only wonder why he is always in conflict with himself and his powers. But overall, MC is chill, I enjoy his emphasis on self control. Please, upload faster.
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The story started nice but at some point it turned from an anti-hero to something dark and not fun to read anymore. I have read till chapter 19 and lost interest when it only focused on the secondary character. I know the author probably wanted to expand his world and not focus only on the MC but for me it felt boring. The grammar was okay though so that and Updating Stability will get five stars from me.
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Reveal Spoiler I thought the first part was good in started going down hill when he got really emo and homelander like. then the story went even more down hill with the oc you used taking not only fore front in the story but being part of the most likely main villian. This is NOT an i have homlander powers in marvel fanfic that was a straight lie. This is a multi crossover with a face lift fanfic and i can smell the chaos coming off this story. I have kinda a big problem when u mix anime and american comics it just doesnt work most of the time unless ur really good. This is just too random and becoming really edgy which is not really what was advertised.
Great potential, good grammar. The story is a good read. Would ask the author to make the chapters longer in exchange for slower updates, makes the reading experience better. Strong advice to keep continuing the story.[img=update]
I don't know how to feel about this. Writitng is good but gives off watpad vibe, I dont understand MC motivation and i don't even know how his power work, It redundant to say he have homelander and new order power when its totally differnt and have limitation and uses thats totally unrelated, More like author is making it up as they go so with each new chapter the setting from last one become useless.
MC is a maniac who want control everything, his powers don't write how work(And i read to 27 chapter and don't understand how work his 2nd power ).
Grammar need alot of work, the story development is not good, the character design could be better, the world background is meh all in all a meh story
my very first story with homelander si that i somewhat liked. i mean i don't like boys series but i always thought of writing an si with homelander powers this one is good.
Ok. Thor here. Writing this review because it is a marvel story. So basically, I can say that this story has high potential. Integration of Homelander in the storyline is also ok. Grammar can be improved but I think since your are an Indian, English isn't your first language. Overall it is a good story. Nice work.
I like this story very much, the mc is also great for an op character not just one dimensional.
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This is a good story, I'm really enjoying it. I'd just like the MC to be less mental, I get that it's probably for character development, but it's slowly becoming tedious to read. I suggest you just have the MC use his reality warping to remove all mental illness/ mental problems from himself since you've shown he's able to use it on himself.
its a good story so far with definite emotional depth that mc's in stories don't really have and there's also emotional depth to the other character shown so far. The mc is not the perfect being with no problems and I assume will get character development from the way it's going, and character development is always the best in a story otherwise it gets bland with no mental and emotional growth so expect that. The mc has good powers, op as well which is what you look for in this pic and also knows how to use his powers well not like most of the idiotic op mc's out there where the author can't use the powers correctly. Updates are extremely consistent. The world background is marvel with mutants and the whole of it with maybe even potential mini crossovers that I'm seeing, nothing major though so it doesn't ruin the story. overall, a good story so far and looking forward to more.
Pretty good start. I personally don't like MC's with mental issues. And I also don't like non human or not similar to human love interests. So I can't give it full stars.
Reveal Spoiler the mc is not homelander power wise. theres more but I don't like complaining, maybethe author can improve.
Wrote It when i got an Idea. Seems like it is headed towards great Succes. Though I irge you to check my other stories they're different from this one but great stories ive poured my heart into nonetheless.