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Appearing in a pitch black space after death Sam talks to god spins three wheels and enjoys his second life
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Write a reviewit's really too early for a review, but I will leave it here because I love the potential of a twilight fanfic, and this one, for a moment, was going in the right direction. the grammar is tragic, understandable, but tragic. in the sense that you notice that it's passable, though disappointing as the small flux was nice. the storyline was fluid, with slight bumps until the end of the meeting with god. when arriving in the world, it was too transition-less(?).. then the waitress in the steakhouse was cheap, with low effort, and meaningless involvement.
Reveal SpoilerIs like reading a third rate Chinese cliché novel,full of errors and bad grammar!! first time i saw a author use "u" and not "you"! . .
Honestly dude…you kinda blew it with this story. Some chapters were alright, but others have just been completely cringe. And when your MC just decided to turn into a xiancia murder hobo this story was honestly over at that point…there’s not really any way to redeem it.
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I think the author wanted to give the story some spice a plot twist to entertain the readers and failed miserably He is hostile against the cullens for petty reasons like them favoring edward another (it's nunya business why do you care?) The forced romance and bonding, bonding. And even more bonding This is a hot piece of garbage that you can read if you are bored to death
It was ok Until you went all wham bam thank you mam and enslaved your MC with a mate bond when all he wanted was freedom, not to mention you even made a plot around him trying to break free from it. So you even made it look like he was just fighting the inevitable.
Reveal SpoilerLAZY WRITING... Just type 'YOU' instead of 'U' Why are u using u, u dirty mongrel! Just use Grammarly... Or anything really, just make an attempt...
Trying to balance the spam reviews. This is not a good story anyway,........ nope cringe. so much cringe. .
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Yeah too lazy to go in depth but well we need 140 Characters. Yeah too lazy to go in depth but well we need 140 Characters Yeah too lazy to go in depth but well we need 140 Characters
Reveal SpoilerI'm here just reading 1 -3 stars people's review and i'm having Fun Af... so i gave 5 stars for those ppeople making me wheeze like a madman. Lol
God gives me wishes story... only 10x more cringe. ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ...... ......
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The Mc doing unnecessary decisionss, like almost killing Edward for telling Bella what he is.
Reveal Spoilerstarted off good. i have no problem with and OP MC. But the meeting with Rosalie felt forced and totally unrealistic. Then when then did meet it was a whimper not a bang that started thier relationship. no passion or feeling. just hey we got a bond and shes like okay well be together forever. no passion no feeling no meet cute. nothing. then you surround the most robotic couple in the world with nothing but giant A hole robots in the form of the cullens. they are all one note you rarely ever mention whose talking so. it takes a while to even realize that edward has a sister or that Emmett is even there. not only that but she isnt even freaking out when hes crippled. then you brutalized a character for seemingly small slights that make little sense and have no real outward effect on the MC i mean at that point just kill him and be done with it. my opinion this is the author wanting to rip the story of twilight apart and NOT tell his own story with twilight as the background. if you didnt like any of the characters but a few how bout just DONT do a twilight fanfic.
At the very beginning, I already had a call when he just wants to be a 16-year-old guy and that's it! Well, this is nonsense. You are either born and get used to your body, or then you will stick it all your life without understanding)))) Not really, why didn't he choose the old time? he could have prepared a lot in this world , and in general he does not have any ambitions . Why is he there ? He's like a degenerate!
i give this an average score. this is not a story i would usually read. it was entertaining, but probably not a book/fanfiction i would read a second time. the writing had many flaws, and many words missing in the sentences. the story was very cringe to be honest and it was going at a very fast pace, and don't have alot of depth.but it was still entertaining too say the least 3 stars.
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To be honest, the story was a total disappointment. It started off ok, nothing really special, but it was ok, the bad thing is the most pathetic and forced romance I've ever seen, and over all crepuscle cliche, the MC just comes into the world, tries his powers and bonds with the blonde girl, by force and the MC didn't even care, the bond comes and the MC says he wants to get away, he wants freedom, so he was doing his own thing for a year, then comes the problems that the blonde's family has problems and the MC feels that, blah blah, in the end the MC saves her and falls totally in love with her because of the bond, which ironically makes him a slave to love and the bond, really disappointing, mostly because it seems that no one who does crepusculo fanfic tries to do something new or different, it's all bonding, bonding, and more bonding.