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Liked the overall story, the various different cases, the small charcter development and pulling in different part of the cyberpunk world but the story gets distracting when there are writing errors or misspelled names/words. I would appreciate it if you would let me edit the story to fix those errors.
He needs to fix the grammar it hurts to read. please, author, get a proofreader.
aburrido, aparte de que es todo el rato los puto mismo, tiene un equipo > completa misiones > cosas locas > se desintegra el equipo, todo el rato. Cuando por fin crees que algo va a cambiar mesclando con personajes principales o va haber algún romance, pues no era bait todo sigue igual. y así como 4 veces ya. es horrible y encima no cambia nada del canon del juego o de la serie. te hace creer que va a haber un romance con Sasha y no, se va y no vuelve nunca mas en la historia, es lo mismo que si le hubieran matado. es muy repetitivo y carece algo interesante que deje con ganas de mas, es esta imagen.
I like this fanfic a lot. The writing and English have a few mistakes but it really is better than some fanfics I have read. The concept of the fanfic and the development of the story is good. In all this is my favorite CyberPunk fanfic.
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Great story, not a lot of thing to say to be honest apart from the fact that if the author changed the title to "The Penguins Commando" i wouldn't be surprised XD. Writing Quality (5/5): Nothing to say since i didn't see any grammatical error (not that i could since English isn't my 1st language) and his writing is good enough to make you laugh easily. Even if, from my understanding, he write his story in his 1st language than translate it to English so it's good! Stability of Updates (4/5) : The only reason why i choose 4 and not 5 it's because it's not a lot more each week. But that's not really important since he add more chapter, once a week. Story Development (4/5) : Great beginning an interesting way to introduce the MC to his new reality and a realistic one in the Cyberpunk clusterf*ck. And as the story goes on, the veil of "innocence" is being pull away from you to look at the real face of the Corporation and to be fair i'm even impress that there is some "good" guy in there. Character Design (5/5) : One word, Simplicity. I will not spoil but when he arrive he is like a blank sheet, a really Pure one from Cyberpunk perspective. So No magic or anything like a perks from a ROB just straight in his "adventure". And for the last part... Cat. World background (4/5): Same as Stab of Update, the only reason i don't set it to MAX is because i don't know enough about Cyberpunk Lore to accurately say that there isn't any hole in there but since everything make sense and if you go on the wiki all the thing that are not explained in the story will be say there.
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I love it. I enjoyed reading this fan fic even though I know next to nothing about cyberpunk. Hoping for more chapters keep up the good work author.
An amazing story that helps expand the worldbuilding done by the original creator of Cyberpunk 2077. Highly recommend this if you are thinking of checking this out.
At the beginning the grammar was very bad and put me of but now that I read it it's not that bad and the story is very good would definitely recommend, more chapters please.
this is really really good, why, the approach, the ideas, the author is building the characters into an existing world why not completely following the script that world was created with, we have not even seen the most of the main characters in cyberpunk, i read it with other books like in cyberpunk with fallout system, marvel superman, i know there are others that has this kind of feels and are interesting with not including too much forced narrative. but the author is giving it up, i will not say i am happy but thr author have their reasons so i will just say i will miss this, good work author.
The only issues I have with this fic is the plot twists that are uncalled for and the slow updates.
Book is fine, author needs to touch up in grammar though, some characters speak like cavemen and the writing is inconsistent when it comes to proper grammar, punctuation and vocabulary, the author I also suggest should do some more research into firearms, the technical details of them, and weapons in general.. Writing quality is down to a 3 due to authors grammar inconsistentcy World background as well due to his clear lack of knowledge of military tactics and weapons and lack of research..
Just writing this review because I've kind of lost interest because of the fact that he will probably leave trauma team. I'm not sure if he does because I've not read that far but its the main reason I liked this fanfic, it was cool and unique to see a trauma team members daily life and without that its not as unique.
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The grammar makes me look twice every two seconds to see if I misread something. The story is forced bs, i'd rather he had transmigrated directly into a newbie of the trauma team. The mc's reactions are generic and cringy. Also the whole "I predicted that i'm in trouble cause of a bad feeling" trope is a bit overused, especially in non supernatural power worlds. It's like what, did you unlock ultra instinct or something?
good story over all and showing the bleak of the cyberpunk world with the mc being used as a blood bank :D. the exits of his job was rather sudden he could have stayed and have them pay for the stuff but its a small point
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Amazing, I love this story so much. chapter 22 was a nice plot twist. Really really looking forward to more.
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Öncelikle incelememin daha iyi olması için İngilizce yerine Türkçe yazdığımdan ötürü özür dilerim. İngilizce yazmakta pek iyi değilim... Hikaye gerçekten güzel, teması ve potansiyeli bir hayli fazla. Hikayemiz de ki tek husus entrikanın oldukça az olması ve akılda kalıcı karakterlerin olmaması diyebiliriz. Her şeyden önce burası bir Cyberpunk evreni, ne kadar manyak varsa hepsi burada toplanmış durumda. Bunu da travma ekibinde olarak çok güzel yansıtıyor. Karakterin günlük yaşamı ve zevklerini anlatan kısa bölümler olsa da aslında ana karakterin kişiliğini anlamamıza yardımcı olmuyor. Oldukça sığ bir şekilde anlatılıyor. Hikaye içerisinde entrika yerine saf aksiyon görüyoruz ki; esasında bu evrende entrika öyle bir dallanıp budaklanmış ki kafan patlayana kadar düşünsen bile çözemezsin. Sonuç olarak; hikayenin temelleri oldukça iyi, gelişmesi gerekiyor evet ama bu temellerin sağlam olmasıyla çok basit bir şekilde düzeltilebilecek bir şey. Ayrıca evet bu seride "Harem" görmediğimiz için de mutluyum. Haremsiz serilerin çok daha iyi olduğu tartışmasız aşikar, diğer türlü sadece mastürbasyon malzemesi oluyor.
I don’t write many of these reviews but I have to say this is a great novel. The author brought the character into the world a little off, but the growth and struggle while having a dark sense of humor that you would hear in the field helps paint vivid and interesting characters.
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love it. its a cool and unique read. quality: 5. really good no problems. development: 4 i only put 4 because it doesn't seem to have much of a story but that's actually preferable to me. I just wanted people to know that right now its not that story driven, more just daily life of a trauma team member. design: 5 no problems from me. it would be nice if you added a bit more to the other team members that didn't get much attention but apart from that great. stability: 5 I'm not really sure about this one, I'll pit 5 stars but we'll just have to wait and see. background: 5 quite fleshed out. it doesn't seem like you just skimmed over the wiki which is good and I can tell there's heart in it.
sorry for bad grammar english is not my first language. however i really like this story and wanted to say some nice words. i really like the characters and the fact that he went with trauma team, the main character isnt op and has a nice personality. the action scenes are good written and i am interestes in seeing how the author is going to expand the story and how it is going to progress.
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Liked the overall story, the various different cases, the small charcter development and pulling in different part of the cyberpunk world but the story gets distracting when there are writing errors or misspelled names/words. I would appreciate it if you would let me edit the story to fix those errors.
He needs to fix the grammar it hurts to read. please, author, get a proofreader.
aburrido, aparte de que es todo el rato los puto mismo, tiene un equipo > completa misiones > cosas locas > se desintegra el equipo, todo el rato. Cuando por fin crees que algo va a cambiar mesclando con personajes principales o va haber algún romance, pues no era bait todo sigue igual. y así como 4 veces ya. es horrible y encima no cambia nada del canon del juego o de la serie. te hace creer que va a haber un romance con Sasha y no, se va y no vuelve nunca mas en la historia, es lo mismo que si le hubieran matado. es muy repetitivo y carece algo interesante que deje con ganas de mas, es esta imagen.
I like this fanfic a lot. The writing and English have a few mistakes but it really is better than some fanfics I have read. The concept of the fanfic and the development of the story is good. In all this is my favorite CyberPunk fanfic.
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Great story, not a lot of thing to say to be honest apart from the fact that if the author changed the title to "The Penguins Commando" i wouldn't be surprised XD. Writing Quality (5/5): Nothing to say since i didn't see any grammatical error (not that i could since English isn't my 1st language) and his writing is good enough to make you laugh easily. Even if, from my understanding, he write his story in his 1st language than translate it to English so it's good! Stability of Updates (4/5) : The only reason why i choose 4 and not 5 it's because it's not a lot more each week. But that's not really important since he add more chapter, once a week. Story Development (4/5) : Great beginning an interesting way to introduce the MC to his new reality and a realistic one in the Cyberpunk clusterf*ck. And as the story goes on, the veil of "innocence" is being pull away from you to look at the real face of the Corporation and to be fair i'm even impress that there is some "good" guy in there. Character Design (5/5) : One word, Simplicity. I will not spoil but when he arrive he is like a blank sheet, a really Pure one from Cyberpunk perspective. So No magic or anything like a perks from a ROB just straight in his "adventure". And for the last part... Cat. World background (4/5): Same as Stab of Update, the only reason i don't set it to MAX is because i don't know enough about Cyberpunk Lore to accurately say that there isn't any hole in there but since everything make sense and if you go on the wiki all the thing that are not explained in the story will be say there.
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I love it. I enjoyed reading this fan fic even though I know next to nothing about cyberpunk. Hoping for more chapters keep up the good work author.
An amazing story that helps expand the worldbuilding done by the original creator of Cyberpunk 2077. Highly recommend this if you are thinking of checking this out.
At the beginning the grammar was very bad and put me of but now that I read it it's not that bad and the story is very good would definitely recommend, more chapters please.
this is really really good, why, the approach, the ideas, the author is building the characters into an existing world why not completely following the script that world was created with, we have not even seen the most of the main characters in cyberpunk, i read it with other books like in cyberpunk with fallout system, marvel superman, i know there are others that has this kind of feels and are interesting with not including too much forced narrative. but the author is giving it up, i will not say i am happy but thr author have their reasons so i will just say i will miss this, good work author.
The only issues I have with this fic is the plot twists that are uncalled for and the slow updates.
Book is fine, author needs to touch up in grammar though, some characters speak like cavemen and the writing is inconsistent when it comes to proper grammar, punctuation and vocabulary, the author I also suggest should do some more research into firearms, the technical details of them, and weapons in general.. Writing quality is down to a 3 due to authors grammar inconsistentcy World background as well due to his clear lack of knowledge of military tactics and weapons and lack of research..
Just writing this review because I've kind of lost interest because of the fact that he will probably leave trauma team. I'm not sure if he does because I've not read that far but its the main reason I liked this fanfic, it was cool and unique to see a trauma team members daily life and without that its not as unique.
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The grammar makes me look twice every two seconds to see if I misread something. The story is forced bs, i'd rather he had transmigrated directly into a newbie of the trauma team. The mc's reactions are generic and cringy. Also the whole "I predicted that i'm in trouble cause of a bad feeling" trope is a bit overused, especially in non supernatural power worlds. It's like what, did you unlock ultra instinct or something?
good story over all and showing the bleak of the cyberpunk world with the mc being used as a blood bank :D. the exits of his job was rather sudden he could have stayed and have them pay for the stuff but its a small point
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Amazing, I love this story so much. chapter 22 was a nice plot twist. Really really looking forward to more.
Reveal Spoiler Öncelikle incelememin daha iyi olması için İngilizce yerine Türkçe yazdığımdan ötürü özür dilerim. İngilizce yazmakta pek iyi değilim... Hikaye gerçekten güzel, teması ve potansiyeli bir hayli fazla. Hikayemiz de ki tek husus entrikanın oldukça az olması ve akılda kalıcı karakterlerin olmaması diyebiliriz. Her şeyden önce burası bir Cyberpunk evreni, ne kadar manyak varsa hepsi burada toplanmış durumda. Bunu da travma ekibinde olarak çok güzel yansıtıyor. Karakterin günlük yaşamı ve zevklerini anlatan kısa bölümler olsa da aslında ana karakterin kişiliğini anlamamıza yardımcı olmuyor. Oldukça sığ bir şekilde anlatılıyor. Hikaye içerisinde entrika yerine saf aksiyon görüyoruz ki; esasında bu evrende entrika öyle bir dallanıp budaklanmış ki kafan patlayana kadar düşünsen bile çözemezsin. Sonuç olarak; hikayenin temelleri oldukça iyi, gelişmesi gerekiyor evet ama bu temellerin sağlam olmasıyla çok basit bir şekilde düzeltilebilecek bir şey. Ayrıca evet bu seride "Harem" görmediğimiz için de mutluyum. Haremsiz serilerin çok daha iyi olduğu tartışmasız aşikar, diğer türlü sadece mastürbasyon malzemesi oluyor.
I don’t write many of these reviews but I have to say this is a great novel. The author brought the character into the world a little off, but the growth and struggle while having a dark sense of humor that you would hear in the field helps paint vivid and interesting characters.
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love it. its a cool and unique read. quality: 5. really good no problems. development: 4 i only put 4 because it doesn't seem to have much of a story but that's actually preferable to me. I just wanted people to know that right now its not that story driven, more just daily life of a trauma team member. design: 5 no problems from me. it would be nice if you added a bit more to the other team members that didn't get much attention but apart from that great. stability: 5 I'm not really sure about this one, I'll pit 5 stars but we'll just have to wait and see. background: 5 quite fleshed out. it doesn't seem like you just skimmed over the wiki which is good and I can tell there's heart in it.
sorry for bad grammar english is not my first language. however i really like this story and wanted to say some nice words. i really like the characters and the fact that he went with trauma team, the main character isnt op and has a nice personality. the action scenes are good written and i am interestes in seeing how the author is going to expand the story and how it is going to progress.
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