/ Anime & Comics / Young Justice: Red-Eclipse
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During the attack on Cadmus Kid Flash, Aqualad, and Robin found not just SuperBoy but also another Project under the name Sa but will I be free to choose my own path or will I be under the control of the Light and The Reach? (I do not own Young Justice or the cover photo. All rights reserved to the creators the only characters I own is Arctora'hm and any other characters I create.)
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The all thing is craped together that it is unreasonable hard to read make space I have read 3chps and it still looks ugly so please fix it. The all thing feels like you had a hangover well writing it make no sense for the first 2chps try fixing that too.
It lacks development the first chapters are basically temporary jump and dialogues one after the other and it is not understood if it is a character or another speaking the grammar needs work
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