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Chronicling The Chain

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A self-insert story about a young non-binary protagonist who dies and gets to go on a chain.

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Gunts92
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Vous avez dit personnage non binaire et à partir de là j'ai su que cette histoire était une maison que je ne lirai jamais de cette vie, ............jwkdkfufiduudidiwikckcifolwkqjxicirkjsjd

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Tugsoo

non-binary? you mean mentally ill? hahaha. joke aside, i hope you get the help you deserve. stay strong and don't let the media wash your head.

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yiyo_XD

Dijiste personaje no binario y desde ahí ya supe q era una casa esta historia que no leeré nunca en esta vida , ............jwkdkfufiduudidiwikckcifolwkqjxicirkjsjd

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sveryan

charcter isnt bland english is good story hasnt done anything special yet

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KJkJkJ

Hai detto personaggio non binario e da quel momento in poi ho capito che questa storia era una storia che non avrei mai letto in questa vit,.........jwkdkfufiduudidiwikckcifolwkqjxicirkjsjd

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William_Claw

author got spammed by 1 star reviews for some strange reason, and the novel definitely doesnt deserve to be tanked like that. while not perfect, the author puts a lot of thought into it. noticeable grammar and spelling mistakes are rare. he can kind of get lost in monologues of thoughts and plans sometimes, and they can be repetitious at times, and i find myself skipping most of the "future jump" plans and "perk" descriptions, as the author spends way too much time talking in circles about them. and rehashing why those random perks have an effect. it is annoying as the list of his choices isnt explicitly given initially, so he just rehashes all of his applicable perks everytime an event happens that include them, and it reads kind of dry in those moments because of that. i would suggest making the reader aware of the perks at the beginning of the jump. just knowing the perks ahead of time, and just making the decisions without re-explaining his reasoning and how the perks function again and again would be better. other than that it is a promising start to a jumpchain, and i am looking forward to more, assuming it isnt dropped.

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