ErozothDraeor

Wrong chapter... again.

I tried to find a more "realistic" image of the armor, the original looks... Power Rangers. AI generated this, not very similar to the original but...

Any sort of relationship\romance\harem in this story? Either, even as a sub plot or is the MC just a machine to gain more power?

Can't say I like the MC, he is too... fake, pretend to be "alpha", that kinds of things don't just pop out from thin air, they are built over time with experience. Every time he talks and acts like "I'm the man!" it just feels fake, EVERYTHING he has, all his power, was given, none earned, no achievements, no power he earned himself. Having said that, it made me cringe a bit but not terribly enough to drop. The new monster? So the story changes, the world changes without the MCs input, I see no point in reading this any more, its no longer the original story + fanfic, if the author wants, he will change things for no reason and likely will since it happened already. The story hasn't even started, this is basically an intro and almost the original story starts, instead we now get a new monster for no good reason or explanation. Good luck, just not my thing. Changes that come from the MCs action are good, others... may well go look for a good original story to read.

It's good, but I read similar ones already, more than a few. For some reason a lot of good Harry Potter "Crossovers", except no magic, or severely nerfed, etc. This is no different. "It will come later" is not a reasoning, like I said, its good but I read others, it just feels like reading the same story again. Good writing, a few issues but minor.

Writing the story using "logic" then ignoring it and leaving something for the "cool" factor, nothing about this was remotely cool. Dumb, stupid, unbelievable? Yes, and it is exactly what I mean, it is unbelievable, I cannot believe this would have worked in any way without plot just forcing it.

Iy may turn good, but with all these powers it will likely turn boring very fast.