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One moment I was in my world, the next, well... not there anymore, at least I was given something to survive.
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I hate people that just give 5-star reviews because "it's *insert author name here*!" without giving any kind of constructive criticism what-so-ever. The story has quite a few flaws, from some basic grammar mistakes (that can be glossed over, as those things are inevitable) to stupid and nonsensical actions taken by characters, be they from the main cast or not. It makes the story feel unnatural and inflexible. The characters' personalities are so-so, with some characters being actually adequately thought out, while the others seem to be there just because. The story between the MC and Emily feels forced and unnecessary. It is simply there for the "cute" factor and to limit the MC and his choices early on. I have read from other reviews that it does get better, but I simply am not capable of pushing myself through this story any longer. Props to the author for good update stability.
Usually love Cornbringers stories, but on this one the mc feels....incomplete, he barely acts like a actual person and more of a comment than anything else. Lose thoughts inserted into a story and sold as a character. Which is disappointing. Rest is of usual quality, well made, just if the main character isn't that good it pulls the rest down as well.
Hopefully this one doesn't get put into hiatus for 10 months again. But yeah I think I enjoyed the previous one kinda forgot since it's quite a bit of time ago, but yeah it's probably good.
It CORNBRINGER... What you expect from me.. hope you update the venom once again.... . . . .[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I like the story, and when theres action it’s heavily entertaining. But theres a lot of cheesy pointless dialogue between Alex and Emily, we don’t need to know everything that happens between, especially when it adds little to no importance to the story. Like when Emily asks for Ice Cream, and then it shows us Alex’s reaction to Emily wanting Ice Cream, and then Emily’s reaction to Alex’s reaction to Emily wanting Ice Cream, you get where I’m going with this?
Honestly author, I am enjoying this fic. That said, it has its faults. 1) The writing quality is subpar. I don't say that to be mean... it's just the truth. From simple mistakes, like names, places, and dates often being wrong. Then on to more complex issues, such as sentences often making no sense... sometimes to the point of forcing you to re-read them. While these are all small things at first, they quickly become frustrating over the course of the fic. I believe that should you take the time to polish your work a bit... make it shine, so to speak. Perhaps try recruiting an editor, should you not have the time to do so? 2) Another issue is character design. Firstly, your MC comes off a bit shallow, often making outrageous choices (choices which sometimes border on being outright insane) that make no real sense, even from a comedic standpoint. He has character flaws galore, but even when presented the opportunity to address them, he doesn't do so. One example would be his winking... oh, don't even get me started on his winking. Secondly, most of your other characters lack depth. And most only seem to exist to "please/build up" your MC. Fury for example. By later chapters Fury and the MC are close friends... but how did that come about? Why is it that Fury always has the MC's back, even when the MC is clearly in the wrong? And perhaps most importantly, why is he always cursing? I mean, yeah... he's played by Samuel Jackson in the films, but c'mon! It just feels forced. 3) The background of the world you build is also shallow. Ranging from lack of detail, to sometimes giving no detail at all. Dungeons for example. I literally read and re-read chapters 1-20, thinking I missed something. I still couldn't figure out where that became a thing. ***, it wasn't until chapter 40 that I fully understood how they even worked. Details are important! Without them, your readers will have a hard time keeping up. 4) You always come out with new content and do your best to further the story. And I can tell that your readers appreciate it.
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Always interesting stories from Cornbringer so i try everytime but always end up disappointed by the MC. The MC is always super entitled and act like a troll in a game. By far the most disagreeable MCs i ever read about.
Garbage novel. Stat points only works when plot demands it. MCs IW hits 180. His monologue is too childish. No determination for anything. A stupid waste of time.
A shame given how much I liked the authors DC novel, but I truly cannot stand this one currently. Only on chapter 14 and the MC already acts as though he has moral high ground over almost anyone, wants to kill Charles acting as though he isn’t justified in trying to read the MC’a mind when he finds out the MC knows far more than they do about a very dangerous event that’s currently happening (Phoenix force Jean) and refuses to tell them, despite it being reasonable to assume said information could help stop her, or save her in Charles point of view (something anyone semi competent could see). For what reason? I can only assume another way for the author to bash on the X-men (Charles specifically) Not only is the MC just annoying at times but as I mentioned previously it seems like the author will try to find ways to make other characters act in the wrong (potentially even out of characteristic) so that the MC is in the right. Also how does he go from being wary of Jean / Charles to immediately telling her he’s down to fight? On the topic of him talking about how he’d kill Charles easily and he isn’t even worth it, straight up makes no sense. Unless the MC has some HUGE help from the system to stop Charles abilities then he stands zero chance
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Honestly a great story until the author decided to introduce The Beyonder.... Then it all went to ****, now all the story is about is a higher being toying with the mc :( Will problably come back to try this story again but I don't have high hope...
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
Complete trash novel. This a story about a child taking care of another child. So dumb
The spelling, grammar, and syntax are not perfect but good and easily read. No current updates but previously not bad. The story development overall isn’t bad but it feels rushed. Later chapters feel as though there are a lot of filler moments. The characters are not to bad at the start but feel as though they lose some dimension as the story progresses. Mc comes off as having the mental capacity of a 12 year old child. The breakdown of the world is horrendous. There are no descriptions of the world past some initial values. Everything after that isn’t given any details. The story isn’t a bad time filler but has room for improvement.
Till ~40 ish chapters it was decent, after that, oh my god i got cancer reading this. Now i need bleach to cure this brain cancer............
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The CornBringer has returned......Woohoo............................You shall not be disappointed...........................................
I like the story but the only issue I have is Emily , I can’t see any reason as to why the Mc needs a adopted daughter she doesn’t contribute anything and having nat now also increases that but overall everything else is good
You know me... When Cornbringer drops a new fic I give it five stars and then start reading it. It's practically a schedule by this point. ✌️