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Hey guys, here are images of our main characters. I hope you like them! These are images of their childhood. I will also update their mature forms later when the story has progressed to a certain point. **** Please leave a review about your experience in the review or comment section. **** Yomi
The story is good i have no problems with it. The main character is likable, Yumi while annoying at times is great too. Ryota and Kiba is just perfect. The one problem with this fic that im experiencing is that the fic has shallow dialogue. The grammar is eh, not bad but can be improved on. If you dont understand what i mean by shallow dialogue i’ll give you an example (not related to the fic just a random example) Example: “Leave me alone, Mike. We aren’t a couple anymore.” “I say when the relationship is over.” Example 2: Claire frees her wrist from Mike’s grip, rubs it and says, “Leave me alone Mike. We aren’t a couple anymore.” He steps forward, forcing her back against the wall and hisses, “I say when the relationship is over.” The second example has action that gives more depth to the situation and this can be applied in combat too.
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I came for the fate tag and was expecting another mc born into naruto world but gets isekai into the fateverse but i didnt find what i wanted, but tbh the story is alright
a decent story but the author or MCs knowledge of Naruto is mostly based off of other fanfictions. he has no respect or knowledge of the OG. mostly knowledge gained from reading fanfics from biased idiots who make the 3rd hokage the enemy, which makes every story suck. Other than that, the grammar is at a child's level. It doesn't feel natural, especially dialogue. it lacks a certain emotional quality and smoothness, almost like a robot takes over at times. finally, I found it very annoying having to hear the nickname "old man" or "uncle" 50 to 60 times a chapter. no name should be used that much each chapter. the plot is cool tho.
One of the best naruto fanfic [img=recommend][img=recommend]..…………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………[img=update]
10/5 super nice read so far most 200 chapter's looking foreword to more..............................................................................................................................................................[img=recommend]🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪
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Seriously one of the best Naruto Fan fics easy 5/5 for me. Most of them dont bother changing things in the story like the Uchiha massacre. This one does and in a way that actually makes sense which was very refreshing. There are some info dumps early on that are boring but I just skipped them personally and im glad I kept reading as the start gets much better in later chapters.
Not a review, I’m just confused. How is this different from your other fanfic? It has the same titles, and the main character images you posted in the comments have the same names, and the MC is a half uchiha half senju like the other one. At first I thought this was just a rough draft that you dropped, and the other fic is your rewrite. But you’ve been updating this too. What’s the difference between the two fics?
Hasta el momento es una excelente historia con una velocidad de desarrollo agradable ni muy rápido ni muy lento, con varios detalles que no se mencionan en el manga y que se agradece bastante, el MC es simpático y un maníaco del entrenamiento jajaja y se siente bien su desarrollo como shinobi
It was a good read until chapter 81, where everything went to hell. It’s by no means the best Naruto fanfiction I’ve read, but it was enjoyable, if we overlook the fact that it introduced Senju characters from some unknown place, knowing that the only Senju is Tsunade. Setting aside the main female character, who seemed to support something in the story, I really thought she would die and trigger the Sharingan, but that was fine. Everything changed with chapter 81; he was steadfast in his decision not to join that clan for too many plausible reasons, but one damn meal made him change. Ugh, what a huge disappointment. I can’t say if it gets better later, but we know that his ideals and convictions are made of paper.
Olá a todos, bem a obra tem um potencial gigantesco, gostaria de poder acompanhar até o final, espero ver o nosso protagonista alcançar patamares inimagináveis, apoiem e venham aproveitar, o protagonista faz justiça a alguém que reencarnou, ele não é um idiota.
great story and good writing so far no major mistake and quite a good read and I didn't expect his nature to be that . .. bye and please don't drop this like othe great Naruto fics
Very good book. it was an unexpected find, it was low in ranking but i decided to give it a try and to my surprise its a very steady book. the mc is slowly but surely developing into a powerful ninja. only thing is, its been 30 chapters and we dont have any goals other than becoming stronger to not get affected by timeline. my guy has been living for almost 2 years in ninja world and has no foolish ambitions....
I'm a little more than 30 chapters in. This is a solid fanfic for any Naruto fan. I recommend anyone who's looking for a good story to check this one out.
in my personal opinion this novel would be much better in the femal lead wasnt intoduced right away and if she wasnt a o.c she serves no purpose and the communication between them is a lil cringe, but i do love the idea of the M.C and am trusting the auhor and his vision i will tag along for the ride and hope it gets better.
It's nice to reread this and refresh the story. I've forgotten some of the details so I'll reread instead of wait for it to catch up with the unedited version. Not edited as in he censored anything edited as in fixed grammar issues and whatnot.
It is going really well till now, also it has potential, Just don't stop the updates, Now I am looking forward to what will happen in the story
a truly up and coming masterpiece, I have read this novel before and there is a previous version in the author profile with 180 chapters in the moment im writing it. you can expect uchiha affiliated character, loyalty to the village, and making allies with all of our beloved characters. i love the romance interest for the mc, shes powerful and original and he isnt some wuss but also not sexually devious since he is very young here. i love the way things progress and all in all a 5 out of 5 for me!
揭示劇透
This story has good potential, spice and dice everything nice. ~~~ From Chapter One, I was hooked. The story flows effortlessly, and before I knew it, I had reached the end of Chapter Fourteen. The narrative is smooth, the characters are well-developed, and the pacing is perfect. It's a captivating read that makes time fly by. Highly recommended!
I already read this novel it is fantastic🤘 please support our author-san. 🙏
Hey guys, here are images of our main characters. I hope you like them! These are images of their childhood. I will also update their mature forms later when the story has progressed to a certain point. **** Please leave a review about your experience in the review or comment section. **** Kaida
Hey guys, here are images of our main characters. I hope you like them! These are images of their childhood. I will also update their mature forms later when the story has progressed to a certain point. **** Please leave a review about your experience in the review or comment section. **** Yomi
The story is good i have no problems with it. The main character is likable, Yumi while annoying at times is great too. Ryota and Kiba is just perfect. The one problem with this fic that im experiencing is that the fic has shallow dialogue. The grammar is eh, not bad but can be improved on. If you dont understand what i mean by shallow dialogue i’ll give you an example (not related to the fic just a random example) Example: “Leave me alone, Mike. We aren’t a couple anymore.” “I say when the relationship is over.” Example 2: Claire frees her wrist from Mike’s grip, rubs it and says, “Leave me alone Mike. We aren’t a couple anymore.” He steps forward, forcing her back against the wall and hisses, “I say when the relationship is over.” The second example has action that gives more depth to the situation and this can be applied in combat too.
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I came for the fate tag and was expecting another mc born into naruto world but gets isekai into the fateverse but i didnt find what i wanted, but tbh the story is alright
a decent story but the author or MCs knowledge of Naruto is mostly based off of other fanfictions. he has no respect or knowledge of the OG. mostly knowledge gained from reading fanfics from biased idiots who make the 3rd hokage the enemy, which makes every story suck. Other than that, the grammar is at a child's level. It doesn't feel natural, especially dialogue. it lacks a certain emotional quality and smoothness, almost like a robot takes over at times. finally, I found it very annoying having to hear the nickname "old man" or "uncle" 50 to 60 times a chapter. no name should be used that much each chapter. the plot is cool tho.
One of the best naruto fanfic [img=recommend][img=recommend]..…………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………[img=update]
10/5 super nice read so far most 200 chapter's looking foreword to more..............................................................................................................................................................[img=recommend]🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪🍪
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Seriously one of the best Naruto Fan fics easy 5/5 for me. Most of them dont bother changing things in the story like the Uchiha massacre. This one does and in a way that actually makes sense which was very refreshing. There are some info dumps early on that are boring but I just skipped them personally and im glad I kept reading as the start gets much better in later chapters.
Not a review, I’m just confused. How is this different from your other fanfic? It has the same titles, and the main character images you posted in the comments have the same names, and the MC is a half uchiha half senju like the other one. At first I thought this was just a rough draft that you dropped, and the other fic is your rewrite. But you’ve been updating this too. What’s the difference between the two fics?
Hasta el momento es una excelente historia con una velocidad de desarrollo agradable ni muy rápido ni muy lento, con varios detalles que no se mencionan en el manga y que se agradece bastante, el MC es simpático y un maníaco del entrenamiento jajaja y se siente bien su desarrollo como shinobi
It was a good read until chapter 81, where everything went to hell. It’s by no means the best Naruto fanfiction I’ve read, but it was enjoyable, if we overlook the fact that it introduced Senju characters from some unknown place, knowing that the only Senju is Tsunade. Setting aside the main female character, who seemed to support something in the story, I really thought she would die and trigger the Sharingan, but that was fine. Everything changed with chapter 81; he was steadfast in his decision not to join that clan for too many plausible reasons, but one damn meal made him change. Ugh, what a huge disappointment. I can’t say if it gets better later, but we know that his ideals and convictions are made of paper.
Olá a todos, bem a obra tem um potencial gigantesco, gostaria de poder acompanhar até o final, espero ver o nosso protagonista alcançar patamares inimagináveis, apoiem e venham aproveitar, o protagonista faz justiça a alguém que reencarnou, ele não é um idiota.
great story and good writing so far no major mistake and quite a good read and I didn't expect his nature to be that . .. bye and please don't drop this like othe great Naruto fics
Very good book. it was an unexpected find, it was low in ranking but i decided to give it a try and to my surprise its a very steady book. the mc is slowly but surely developing into a powerful ninja. only thing is, its been 30 chapters and we dont have any goals other than becoming stronger to not get affected by timeline. my guy has been living for almost 2 years in ninja world and has no foolish ambitions....
I'm a little more than 30 chapters in. This is a solid fanfic for any Naruto fan. I recommend anyone who's looking for a good story to check this one out.
in my personal opinion this novel would be much better in the femal lead wasnt intoduced right away and if she wasnt a o.c she serves no purpose and the communication between them is a lil cringe, but i do love the idea of the M.C and am trusting the auhor and his vision i will tag along for the ride and hope it gets better.
It's nice to reread this and refresh the story. I've forgotten some of the details so I'll reread instead of wait for it to catch up with the unedited version. Not edited as in he censored anything edited as in fixed grammar issues and whatnot.
It is going really well till now, also it has potential, Just don't stop the updates, Now I am looking forward to what will happen in the story
a truly up and coming masterpiece, I have read this novel before and there is a previous version in the author profile with 180 chapters in the moment im writing it. you can expect uchiha affiliated character, loyalty to the village, and making allies with all of our beloved characters. i love the romance interest for the mc, shes powerful and original and he isnt some wuss but also not sexually devious since he is very young here. i love the way things progress and all in all a 5 out of 5 for me!
揭示劇透 This story has good potential, spice and dice everything nice. ~~~ From Chapter One, I was hooked. The story flows effortlessly, and before I knew it, I had reached the end of Chapter Fourteen. The narrative is smooth, the characters are well-developed, and the pacing is perfect. It's a captivating read that makes time fly by. Highly recommended!
I already read this novel it is fantastic🤘 please support our author-san. 🙏
Hey guys, here are images of our main characters. I hope you like them! These are images of their childhood. I will also update their mature forms later when the story has progressed to a certain point. **** Please leave a review about your experience in the review or comment section. **** Kaida