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honestly, i partly enjoyed it for the first 40 chapters or so which made me keep reading during my free time to cure boredom but the mc is nonsensical... his base character should have never been placed in Slytherin tbh but then the author slowly starts warping him to be more like other Slytherins which makes no sense since he may as well have been like that from the start if that was the case... there are like 10+ chapters in a row missing at one point and mc treats hermione well and says he admires her then when his brother instigates a fight and she slaps him he tells her that their friendship is over and she went too far(claiming she insulted his family by slapping his brother) etc and breaks her heart which was dumb af since he was the one who intervened to make her his friend and took away harry and ron's chance to save her in the bathroom etc and the mc doesn't actually change anything in terms of story development... he just takes Harry's place in every major scenario and uses it to stroke his ego and even made a book about fighting the basilisk (with a grammatically atrocious name btw lol) and the mc goes from someone who wants to learn more and grow to someone who's willing to turn his back on a friend and break her heart just to secure his place among other people he isn't close to...(he privately said to the two girls who are essentially part of his harem after breaking Hermione's heart by saying they were no longer friends in front of everyone that they just have different values and can't be friends and when it showed his thoughts he said that he can't afford to have any internal disputes in slytherin as he's trying to gather power... so he was willing to throw hermione away completely just because he wanted to stabilize his control over Slytherin when that doesn't at all match the character we were originally introduced to)
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Man, the title was dope AF and the concept was bomb but the translation and story really sucks, even GPT4 does good translation than you[img=faceslap]
I haven't read it yet, but I will give it 5.0 even if it's bad. at least there's something to read to pass the time. Stories have been getting boring sometimes, and finding something that's an okay to read story is hard to come by all the time but will give it 50 chapters just to pass a few hours
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It was an interesting concept, but the author is very contradictory in terms of wanting to follow the plot. MC makes changes that should have changed the plot, but the author just gloss over them and follows the plot like a checklist with no reason. Not to mention, the translator skips certain things from the novel, which would have helped in character and world building, which makes people unable to immerse themselves into the novel. AND some tags are simply given to the novel as I specifically came to read a system novel that made me personally VERY DISAPPOINTED!!!
if you wanted to be in the story you should've made it y/n author. it is honestly just pure "I am the greatest" fan fiction. that being said it's pretty good
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Story has stopped making sense, characters are acting outside of what they would…. Was well written in the beginning but just started to fall in quality and design.
Chinese Mc. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=fp][img=fp]
the writer is not consistent with what he writes, he forgets what he is doing, he has a great lack of knowledge of the names/surnames of the characters, the story makes many time jumps that do not explain anything and in general creates power up of character so that immediately afterwards someone appears with a new enemy, a typical Chinese novel, aside, the new organization is totally unnecessary in the fancic, it's a little over 100 chapters in and I can't stand it anymore Besides, the novel is translated horribly, thanks for the 100 chapters but I can't take it anymore. In general, a 3.5 for the translator, mainly for bringing the novel, I didn't like either the novel or the translation but the attempt is appreciated, a 1 for the writer, the story he invented is horrible and look, with HP they have it easy.
A lot of in consistency with this novel. The power up of the MC is repitative. He doesn’t learn from mistake. Character development is trash. He allows his woman to get kidnapped even though he knows he has hidden enemy inherited raven claws inheritance he still can’t protect his love once. Super trash writing please report this nov
the plot is good, but it's so full of loopholes that it could be called Swiss cheese.
I tried to be generous, but there's a lot of issues I can't get past. 1.it was stated in the first chapter that Skyler the mc was an adult before being transmigrated/reincarnated but the oringal author is trying to disguise his clear attraction to children as on multiple occasions he has claimed that the twelve year old female characters are attractive and later writes that styler has mature fast as if he was a kid (which physically he is but mentally he's a grown man). 2. paragraphs repeat with a quick summary of what happened then loops and play the paragraph out with them actually speaking what was just brushed over, like a scrip that someone was editing left it in accidentally, so that not good it really takes you out of a scene. 3. midway through the first year ( which is brushed over fast) the mc states with full confidence that he's stronger than all but a few 7th years, let me rephrase that he (the main character) is stronger than soon to be adults at the age of eleven, now I love a good op mc, but come on even I thinks that's extremely rushed, with how he has 'mastered' ever spell in all course work and is so great that mcgonnagal even gets him to publish his transfiguration theory in a thesis study. ther are no intentional flaws. Every flaw that skyler has is entirely unintentional, and the original author doesn't see them as flaws, such as his blatant attraction to children. it'd be bearable is he wasnt a child groomer as even if he's op it's still kinda fun but every time he's around little girls, the author can't help themselves from making things skeevy and disgusting
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it's pretty good but can be pretty jarring, i.e. the Ravenclaw trial was almost out of nowhere, also the issue with Hermione? like he knew what was going to happen and still either acted or got mad and cut her off but it's not well stated, like you could say that he knew it was going to happen and took the opportunity to distance himself for her protection instead of saying he had to pick his family over her? that was a bit of a rant, finally the fight in chap 59 is out of nowhere but i think it's missing a chapter so it ain't that bad
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The author does a really good job of keeping things interesting. The plot doesn't go too slow or too fast. The mc feels realistic. It's not just a bunch of common fanfic tropes, either. I honestly think this is a really good read that the author seems to spend a lot of effort writing. If you're any sort of fan of Harry Potter, then I highly recommend reading this. At least on WN, this is one of my top HP fanfics without a doubt.
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HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREMWarning for those who don't like harem.The mc is so confused at what he wants to do, half the time he wants to power and influence but then allows Canon events that negatively affect him to still play out.He's an experienced and knowledgeable man with lots of maturity but then some how allows himself to be bullied by girls, give them anything and everything even his own techniques that he created to make himself powerful, they give him nothing and he also goes dumb whenever the story wants to add romance elements.
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All things considered it is a great work with an excitingly new immersive point of view.
Starting 5 whole chapter doesnt have have a single conversation or character interaction. It was all overview of this happened, that happened, they did this, they feel this etc... Not a single dialogue in all that time, I think thats a very poor way of writing,
it slowly got better though I don't understand why its branded as system also i wish to see more of that eye power i hope you continue posting more chapters
A slight bit better than MTL, it seems the "author" ran a grammar tool without any proofreading/editing. The frequency of updates seem to be good though
I liked the story as the concept was new and gave meaning to everything.... I just think the characters could be a bit annoying at times but it's just common in Chinese ffs to see such characters like how the mc seems pedo Or into lolis and the girls are a bit too much. They seem mature one minute and immature another but it actually is pretty common in Chinese ffs. The only complaint I can do to the translator is that please read what you write once before posting because sometimes it repeats and sometimes it's gender or name confusion and sometimes it's missing paragraphs which come later at the end of the chapter and cause confusion. But i liked the concept of story with all those dark forces and branches of white magic it seemed in depth into the very history of magic.
honestly, i partly enjoyed it for the first 40 chapters or so which made me keep reading during my free time to cure boredom but the mc is nonsensical... his base character should have never been placed in Slytherin tbh but then the author slowly starts warping him to be more like other Slytherins which makes no sense since he may as well have been like that from the start if that was the case... there are like 10+ chapters in a row missing at one point and mc treats hermione well and says he admires her then when his brother instigates a fight and she slaps him he tells her that their friendship is over and she went too far(claiming she insulted his family by slapping his brother) etc and breaks her heart which was dumb af since he was the one who intervened to make her his friend and took away harry and ron's chance to save her in the bathroom etc and the mc doesn't actually change anything in terms of story development... he just takes Harry's place in every major scenario and uses it to stroke his ego and even made a book about fighting the basilisk (with a grammatically atrocious name btw lol) and the mc goes from someone who wants to learn more and grow to someone who's willing to turn his back on a friend and break her heart just to secure his place among other people he isn't close to...(he privately said to the two girls who are essentially part of his harem after breaking Hermione's heart by saying they were no longer friends in front of everyone that they just have different values and can't be friends and when it showed his thoughts he said that he can't afford to have any internal disputes in slytherin as he's trying to gather power... so he was willing to throw hermione away completely just because he wanted to stabilize his control over Slytherin when that doesn't at all match the character we were originally introduced to)
揭示劇透 Man, the title was dope AF and the concept was bomb but the translation and story really sucks, even GPT4 does good translation than you[img=faceslap]
I haven't read it yet, but I will give it 5.0 even if it's bad. at least there's something to read to pass the time. Stories have been getting boring sometimes, and finding something that's an okay to read story is hard to come by all the time but will give it 50 chapters just to pass a few hours
MC (but chinese): [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
It was an interesting concept, but the author is very contradictory in terms of wanting to follow the plot. MC makes changes that should have changed the plot, but the author just gloss over them and follows the plot like a checklist with no reason. Not to mention, the translator skips certain things from the novel, which would have helped in character and world building, which makes people unable to immerse themselves into the novel. AND some tags are simply given to the novel as I specifically came to read a system novel that made me personally VERY DISAPPOINTED!!!
if you wanted to be in the story you should've made it y/n author. it is honestly just pure "I am the greatest" fan fiction. that being said it's pretty good
Yes, Mc is Hermione's dog. Mc cuck kid. Mc simp. Mc pathetic. Mc chinese. Mc Asian. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Story has stopped making sense, characters are acting outside of what they would…. Was well written in the beginning but just started to fall in quality and design.
Chinese Mc. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=fp][img=fp]
the writer is not consistent with what he writes, he forgets what he is doing, he has a great lack of knowledge of the names/surnames of the characters, the story makes many time jumps that do not explain anything and in general creates power up of character so that immediately afterwards someone appears with a new enemy, a typical Chinese novel, aside, the new organization is totally unnecessary in the fancic, it's a little over 100 chapters in and I can't stand it anymore Besides, the novel is translated horribly, thanks for the 100 chapters but I can't take it anymore. In general, a 3.5 for the translator, mainly for bringing the novel, I didn't like either the novel or the translation but the attempt is appreciated, a 1 for the writer, the story he invented is horrible and look, with HP they have it easy.
A lot of in consistency with this novel. The power up of the MC is repitative. He doesn’t learn from mistake. Character development is trash. He allows his woman to get kidnapped even though he knows he has hidden enemy inherited raven claws inheritance he still can’t protect his love once. Super trash writing please report this nov
the plot is good, but it's so full of loopholes that it could be called Swiss cheese.
I tried to be generous, but there's a lot of issues I can't get past. 1.it was stated in the first chapter that Skyler the mc was an adult before being transmigrated/reincarnated but the oringal author is trying to disguise his clear attraction to children as on multiple occasions he has claimed that the twelve year old female characters are attractive and later writes that styler has mature fast as if he was a kid (which physically he is but mentally he's a grown man). 2. paragraphs repeat with a quick summary of what happened then loops and play the paragraph out with them actually speaking what was just brushed over, like a scrip that someone was editing left it in accidentally, so that not good it really takes you out of a scene. 3. midway through the first year ( which is brushed over fast) the mc states with full confidence that he's stronger than all but a few 7th years, let me rephrase that he (the main character) is stronger than soon to be adults at the age of eleven, now I love a good op mc, but come on even I thinks that's extremely rushed, with how he has 'mastered' ever spell in all course work and is so great that mcgonnagal even gets him to publish his transfiguration theory in a thesis study. ther are no intentional flaws. Every flaw that skyler has is entirely unintentional, and the original author doesn't see them as flaws, such as his blatant attraction to children. it'd be bearable is he wasnt a child groomer as even if he's op it's still kinda fun but every time he's around little girls, the author can't help themselves from making things skeevy and disgusting
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it's pretty good but can be pretty jarring, i.e. the Ravenclaw trial was almost out of nowhere, also the issue with Hermione? like he knew what was going to happen and still either acted or got mad and cut her off but it's not well stated, like you could say that he knew it was going to happen and took the opportunity to distance himself for her protection instead of saying he had to pick his family over her? that was a bit of a rant, finally the fight in chap 59 is out of nowhere but i think it's missing a chapter so it ain't that bad
揭示劇透 The author does a really good job of keeping things interesting. The plot doesn't go too slow or too fast. The mc feels realistic. It's not just a bunch of common fanfic tropes, either. I honestly think this is a really good read that the author seems to spend a lot of effort writing. If you're any sort of fan of Harry Potter, then I highly recommend reading this. At least on WN, this is one of my top HP fanfics without a doubt.
Yes..................................................................................................................................................................................,.,.,.,..,.,.,..,.,.,.,.. .,.,.,..,.,. .,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,..,. . . . ..,.,. . .,..,,..,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,..,,..,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.
揭示劇透 HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREMWarning for those who don't like harem.The mc is so confused at what he wants to do, half the time he wants to power and influence but then allows Canon events that negatively affect him to still play out.He's an experienced and knowledgeable man with lots of maturity but then some how allows himself to be bullied by girls, give them anything and everything even his own techniques that he created to make himself powerful, they give him nothing and he also goes dumb whenever the story wants to add romance elements.
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All things considered it is a great work with an excitingly new immersive point of view.
Starting 5 whole chapter doesnt have have a single conversation or character interaction. It was all overview of this happened, that happened, they did this, they feel this etc... Not a single dialogue in all that time, I think thats a very poor way of writing,
it slowly got better though I don't understand why its branded as system also i wish to see more of that eye power i hope you continue posting more chapters
A slight bit better than MTL, it seems the "author" ran a grammar tool without any proofreading/editing. The frequency of updates seem to be good though
I liked the story as the concept was new and gave meaning to everything.... I just think the characters could be a bit annoying at times but it's just common in Chinese ffs to see such characters like how the mc seems pedo Or into lolis and the girls are a bit too much. They seem mature one minute and immature another but it actually is pretty common in Chinese ffs. The only complaint I can do to the translator is that please read what you write once before posting because sometimes it repeats and sometimes it's gender or name confusion and sometimes it's missing paragraphs which come later at the end of the chapter and cause confusion. But i liked the concept of story with all those dark forces and branches of white magic it seemed in depth into the very history of magic.