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Bro, fan fiction has good potential, but I've read 24 chapters and haven't seen much of yours. I am one of those who have read the novel not only by manhwa, and I seem to be rereading it again, but with the participation of Meliodas and Elizabeth, I understand that the author is a beginner and, to be honest, to invent his own and write, roughly speaking, "laziness", but a little of his own stories and at least some influence on the plot it doesn't hurt from Meliodas, as I said, it's like I'm rereading a novel and thanks to this I know everything in advance, it's predictable, and I'm not talking about mistakes in writing yet, no offense to the author, but he better know what's wrong with fan fiction so that in the future It was easier and better for him to write. Bye bye
If anyone comes to read this novel because they want to see MC collect a harem of cute girls in the original story, this story will disappoint you because MC throws all those girls to other people. Even though MC is the one who saved them, they fell in love with someone else for no reason, which is very disappointing. MC slowly progresses the story along with Arthur, with the results not much different from the original, just the ending of each event is slightly better, but at least he chooses to kill Lucas.
No cambia nada de la novela original es solo alguien más junto a Arthur Lo entretenido de los FF es que haya rutas nuevas y poderes interesantes pero esto no es mi taza de te,no cambia absolutamente nada y seguimos el camino de la novela Puede que cambie cuando termine el arco escolar pero yo no quiero seguir leyendo esto y suerte a los que se quedan Atte: Un tonto
The plot doesn't change much from the original story aside from a few OC's, but that's my cup of coffee.
Meliodas in TBATE presents a promising premise by bringing Meliodas, an iconic character, into the world of TBATE. However, despite the potential of this combination, the fanfic fails to fully leverage the opportunity to create a fresh and original narrative. One of the most evident issues is the author’s over-reliance on the original plot of TBATE. Instead of reimagining the world of TBATE with the inclusion of Meliodas, the story follows the events of the original novel almost to the letter, with few significant changes. This lack of originality and creativity makes the story feel like a simple "copy and paste" with the superficial addition of Meliodas and a few secondary characters. While the inclusion of Meliodas is theoretically interesting, it does not integrate organically into the TBATE plot. His presence often feels forced and does not add much to the story’s development. The secondary characters introduced also lack depth and seem to exist solely to justify Meliodas’ inclusion, without truly enriching the narrative. The lack of innovation is especially disappointing given the potential for a well-executed crossover. The interaction between Meliodas and the TBATE characters could have provided unique opportunities to explore new dynamics and conflicts, but these possibilities are inadequately explored. Instead, the author opts to replicate scenes and situations from the original material, making the story feel repetitive and predictable. Additionally, the writing itself has issues. Although the action scenes are occasionally exciting, the overall narrative suffers from grammatical and stylistic errors that distract and hinder immersion in the story. A more careful review and rigorous editing could significantly improve the quality of the text. In summary, Meliodas in TBATE falls short of expectations for an innovative and thrilling crossover. The lack of originality and over-reliance on the TBATE plot make the story feel derivative and uninspired. While die-hard fans of both universes might find some value in seeing their favorite characters interact, the story as a whole fails to offer a fresh and engaging narrative. A thorough revision and a more creative approach are recommended to truly do justice to the crossover premise.
If you had read the original novel then there is no need to read this. Just add MC and Elizabeth to the story as twins to the original novel MC and heroin. The story is same as original Beginning after the end with some extra chareters.
Ain't no way this novel only has 5 star reviews, it doesn't deserve it, author probably deletes the negative reviews. The spelling of the author is absolutely trash, a Chinese Author can do better bro I'm sick of seeing "existence" or other spelling mistakes, besides that. The grammar ain't grammaring😭🙏
My first time reviewing but I have to say that this novel has done well to cure my Boredom and make my life just a little better.
I like the idea of this Fanfic but I remember reading it briefly. I have a question will he actually grow up or be stuck in his child form like the original Meliodas?
“I regained my trust back to humanity, I couldn’t access my crypto investment after 3 months of investment. The traders' support team didn't offer reasonable feedback as to why even though I paid all the amount required by the traders. I was very frustrated and that's how I came in touch with a cyber specialist who has expertise in reclaiming crypto. I contacted them via email, *cybergenie (@) cyberservices (.) com*, I opened a task case with them, and within 48 hours my lost investment was recovered along with my profits. I am very pleased with their services.”
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Really good. I think it was a great idea for you to bring Elizabeth in. Also really looking forward to his future relationships. I was always sad about how princess Kathyln was treated in the original story. I hope this will be better.
Never thought I would see this crossover. Author does a great job incorporating meliodas powers in tbate. Also great choice bringing in Elizabeth. Keep up the great work author. Please make update schedule.
Really enjoying the novel, especially since it’s relate to TBATE. Hoping you don’t drop it and keep continuing with the consistent uploads. Thanks for the novel
just found this novel today and finished reading the latest chapter it's interesting as i already read the manhwa but dropped it when he get to the academy so hope this will continue till the end and hope the harem will not get to big
Hello how are you thank you very much for the chapter yes more chapters come on come on more chapters come on come on
The modern day style of writing kinda throws off the immersion of the novel for me. Not bad but its also not good. Major problem im seeing is that author is using words like man in a modern way which should not be happening. Besides that its alright
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Hello, how are you? Thank you very much for the topic. More chapters. Come on. Come on. More chapters
Overall I’d say this fic is pretty good, and I’m even considering ”borrowing” a bit of the plot design. 5 stars!
I love this story I just wish for faster release of chapter because the pace feels a little slow
EEEEY! I think you've gotten used to it by now, like always your shameless and lazy author review. Hope you enjoy the book!
Bro, fan fiction has good potential, but I've read 24 chapters and haven't seen much of yours. I am one of those who have read the novel not only by manhwa, and I seem to be rereading it again, but with the participation of Meliodas and Elizabeth, I understand that the author is a beginner and, to be honest, to invent his own and write, roughly speaking, "laziness", but a little of his own stories and at least some influence on the plot it doesn't hurt from Meliodas, as I said, it's like I'm rereading a novel and thanks to this I know everything in advance, it's predictable, and I'm not talking about mistakes in writing yet, no offense to the author, but he better know what's wrong with fan fiction so that in the future It was easier and better for him to write. Bye bye
If anyone comes to read this novel because they want to see MC collect a harem of cute girls in the original story, this story will disappoint you because MC throws all those girls to other people. Even though MC is the one who saved them, they fell in love with someone else for no reason, which is very disappointing. MC slowly progresses the story along with Arthur, with the results not much different from the original, just the ending of each event is slightly better, but at least he chooses to kill Lucas.
No cambia nada de la novela original es solo alguien más junto a Arthur Lo entretenido de los FF es que haya rutas nuevas y poderes interesantes pero esto no es mi taza de te,no cambia absolutamente nada y seguimos el camino de la novela Puede que cambie cuando termine el arco escolar pero yo no quiero seguir leyendo esto y suerte a los que se quedan Atte: Un tonto
The plot doesn't change much from the original story aside from a few OC's, but that's my cup of coffee.
Meliodas in TBATE presents a promising premise by bringing Meliodas, an iconic character, into the world of TBATE. However, despite the potential of this combination, the fanfic fails to fully leverage the opportunity to create a fresh and original narrative. One of the most evident issues is the author’s over-reliance on the original plot of TBATE. Instead of reimagining the world of TBATE with the inclusion of Meliodas, the story follows the events of the original novel almost to the letter, with few significant changes. This lack of originality and creativity makes the story feel like a simple "copy and paste" with the superficial addition of Meliodas and a few secondary characters. While the inclusion of Meliodas is theoretically interesting, it does not integrate organically into the TBATE plot. His presence often feels forced and does not add much to the story’s development. The secondary characters introduced also lack depth and seem to exist solely to justify Meliodas’ inclusion, without truly enriching the narrative. The lack of innovation is especially disappointing given the potential for a well-executed crossover. The interaction between Meliodas and the TBATE characters could have provided unique opportunities to explore new dynamics and conflicts, but these possibilities are inadequately explored. Instead, the author opts to replicate scenes and situations from the original material, making the story feel repetitive and predictable. Additionally, the writing itself has issues. Although the action scenes are occasionally exciting, the overall narrative suffers from grammatical and stylistic errors that distract and hinder immersion in the story. A more careful review and rigorous editing could significantly improve the quality of the text. In summary, Meliodas in TBATE falls short of expectations for an innovative and thrilling crossover. The lack of originality and over-reliance on the TBATE plot make the story feel derivative and uninspired. While die-hard fans of both universes might find some value in seeing their favorite characters interact, the story as a whole fails to offer a fresh and engaging narrative. A thorough revision and a more creative approach are recommended to truly do justice to the crossover premise.
If you had read the original novel then there is no need to read this. Just add MC and Elizabeth to the story as twins to the original novel MC and heroin. The story is same as original Beginning after the end with some extra chareters.
Ain't no way this novel only has 5 star reviews, it doesn't deserve it, author probably deletes the negative reviews. The spelling of the author is absolutely trash, a Chinese Author can do better bro I'm sick of seeing "existence" or other spelling mistakes, besides that. The grammar ain't grammaring😭🙏
My first time reviewing but I have to say that this novel has done well to cure my Boredom and make my life just a little better.
I like the idea of this Fanfic but I remember reading it briefly. I have a question will he actually grow up or be stuck in his child form like the original Meliodas?
“I regained my trust back to humanity, I couldn’t access my crypto investment after 3 months of investment. The traders' support team didn't offer reasonable feedback as to why even though I paid all the amount required by the traders. I was very frustrated and that's how I came in touch with a cyber specialist who has expertise in reclaiming crypto. I contacted them via email, *cybergenie (@) cyberservices (.) com*, I opened a task case with them, and within 48 hours my lost investment was recovered along with my profits. I am very pleased with their services.”
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Really good. I think it was a great idea for you to bring Elizabeth in. Also really looking forward to his future relationships. I was always sad about how princess Kathyln was treated in the original story. I hope this will be better.
Never thought I would see this crossover. Author does a great job incorporating meliodas powers in tbate. Also great choice bringing in Elizabeth. Keep up the great work author. Please make update schedule.
Really enjoying the novel, especially since it’s relate to TBATE. Hoping you don’t drop it and keep continuing with the consistent uploads. Thanks for the novel
just found this novel today and finished reading the latest chapter it's interesting as i already read the manhwa but dropped it when he get to the academy so hope this will continue till the end and hope the harem will not get to big
Hello how are you thank you very much for the chapter yes more chapters come on come on more chapters come on come on
The modern day style of writing kinda throws off the immersion of the novel for me. Not bad but its also not good. Major problem im seeing is that author is using words like man in a modern way which should not be happening. Besides that its alright
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Hello, how are you? Thank you very much for the topic. More chapters. Come on. Come on. More chapters
Overall I’d say this fic is pretty good, and I’m even considering ”borrowing” a bit of the plot design. 5 stars!
I love this story I just wish for faster release of chapter because the pace feels a little slow
EEEEY! I think you've gotten used to it by now, like always your shameless and lazy author review. Hope you enjoy the book!