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Jesus, man, are you seriously writing something like that? Even for the finite logic of the world of Dxd, what you wrote looks like the delusions of a schoolboy. Although maybe you really are in school. People who rate it more than 2-3 stars clearly something wrong with the head.
it started good on till you made the Mc call Gaya mother I hate that I hate that I hate that I hate that I hate that I hate that I hate that I hate that
The characters feel like machines the dialog is one dimensional, and stilted. The grammar itself Is awful, I have a headache just attempting to read it. The story itself is interesting and fairly unique premise wise. It's just brought down to illegible at best by the writing quality and dialog
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not gonna lie, you had us at the first part, but as the chapter enters 2 digits it got lamer... you were just reiterating all the events on Greek Myth, overly brief summary of them.. lame .. but the part where he developed his powers are cool
This story is unique and makes great use of real life mythology to deepen it's lore. It contains a lot of interesting ideas but it is dragged down by some silly decisions like the name of the MC and the... too faithful to the myth obssission with MC genitalia.(though it is a weirdly interesting thing to read, like not being able to take one's eyes of a train crash)
keep up the great work, and I can't wait for the next chapter. Also, what's gonna happen with demeter? Will he eventually save her or something
+ The theme is very interesting and i like the snowball effect the OC has on human history. + A very great use of many Pantheons and Gods that are never used in the canon of DxD - The power scaling is quit over the place and seems to heavily favor anyone losely connected to the main character. A single drop of his blood seems enough to take anyone from "competent" all the way to Satan-Class and beyond in a single moment. - Sadly the changes in human history don't stick. The author uses "Fate" as the singular reason for that, but if everything is already determined to such an extent i question the possibility of the OCs birth in the first place and why this continues even after the gods agreed to not mess around with humans any longer. All in all a quit the entertaining read, if you are searching for a wider perspective into the godly pantheons. Up to this point (chapter 21) there weren't any exciting fights, so i can't comment on the authors ability to write thouse.
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I only read up to chapter 10, but so far, so good. I'm curious how the mc is going to fit into the original timeline and how much it's going to differ from canon.
more pls mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmore
卷 1
- 1 Prologue 1 years ago
- 2 Chapter 1 1 years ago
- 3 Chapter 2 1 years ago
- 4 Chapter 3 1 years ago
- 5 Chapter 4 1 years ago
- 6 Chapter 5 1 years ago
- 7 Chapter 6 1 years ago
- 8 Chapter 7 1 years ago
- 9 Chapter 8 1 years ago
- 10 Chapter 9 1 years ago
- 11 Chapter 10 1 years ago
- 12 Chapter 11 1 years ago
- 13 Chapter 12 1 years ago
- 14 Chapter 13 1 years ago
- 15 Chapter 14 1 years ago
- 16 Chapter 15 1 years ago
- 17 Chapter 16 1 years ago
- 18 Chapter 17 1 years ago
- 19 Chapter 18 1 years ago
- 20 Chapter 19 1 years ago
- 21 Chapter 20 12 months ago
- 22 Chapter 21(R18) 11 months ago
- 23 Chapter 22 11 months ago
- 24 Chapter 23 11 months ago
- 25 Chapter 24 11 months ago
- 26 Chapter 25(R18) 11 months ago
- 27 Chapter 26 11 months ago
- 28 Chapter 27 11 months ago
- 29 Chapter 28(R18) 11 months ago
- 30 Chapter 29(R18) 11 months ago
- 31 Chapter 30 11 months ago
Kinda bad, first the mc name is Ouranos II it’s as lame as Bob Uchiha. Second the character interaction are bad all the moon god come to the moon the mc says bless the moon and they do it? Just like that? Gods are supposed to have a minimum of pride. Another example is making Gaia blush by telling her she’s pretty… Seriously