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please author i beg you, don't let the MC go to the shrek academy, shrek in doulou dalu 1 is very boring, has few characters, will be the same arcs as all the other fanfics and even in romantic interests there is only one ning rongrong and if you tell her before she likes oscar, if the MC goes to another academy she has more possibilities of plots and relationships, besides the opportunity for the MC to seriously face the 7 demons of shrek, 100% of the fanfic of doulou dalu is in the shrek academy , instead of helping tang san it would be cool for the MC to defeat him and change the original story
One of the best fanfic there is and doesn't have a simp and boring Mc. Has fast update and the flow of the story doesn't fell forced at all.The mc is good and does not let other force him like the other typical Mc because of the plot not that he knows about it,and the most important of all the author does not nerf the Mc so that he could go to Shrek academy and the author gave the Mc appropriate power level that showcase his cheat and hard work
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É tanta habilidade, que o leitor fica perdido. O típico MC que tem todo tipo de habilidade, outro pirralho fora da configuração do mundo DD. Uma porcaria. Sim, uma merda. É sistema! Quer algo bom disso?
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it is quite a nice fan fic of Douluo Dalu ( the timeline is dd1) where our mc has a unique system. The mc is quite a likeable character and is not your average protagonist who is a idiot or a person who leeches of others. Overall it was fun to read even though it has not been updated for a while.
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Other then the grammar the story is great and I really enjoyed reading this but the main problem is the spastic updates till the current nonsense where the author is just gone
It needs some serious rewriting as it has lots of grammatical mistakes, and many more mistakes needs to fixed about the world setting and character design
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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
This is clearly machine translated with zero effort put into editing it i highly recommend avoid this atrocity at all costs as it will kill your brain cells just reading it
Not really a review but more of a question, is it needed to have knowledge of Soul Land before reading this fanfic? I have heard of it but never had an interest in it at the time, so I'm hesitant in starting to read. Not to mention that there's like, what? 4 Soul Land series? I'm really not going to waste time reading 4 novels/manhuas that might not even be really connected to each other.
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Very good novel a bit of problem with grammar no other complains from my side. Want more. Nothing other to write so rest is spam. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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It completely blew my mind. It managed to surpass my high expectations AND be nothing at all like I expected. Or in simple language "Double Plus Good." Let me preface this with an apology. If I sound stunningly inarticulate at times in this review, I can't help it. My mind is completely fried. This fanfic novel is one of the top out there. The world-building is so fully fleshed out and spine-tinglingly terrifying that it's almost as if "author-san' travelled to such a place, escaped from it, and then just wrote it all down.
please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.
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need more chapters I love the way the story is going I mean obviously you can improve as a writer but when I started reading this became a personal favorite but needs more chapters
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trash fic like many other. the cliche system that spread the mc for anything he do. mc gaining op power like it was normal and even so being extremely because he dont use right. this without counting how the girls fall in love with him so easily. of course I know that is impossible to write a completely original fanfic without cliche but the author writing style make this story completely unlikable only people that are starting with fanfic will like this fic
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Five star review to bribe author.. Maybe the handsome or beauty will mass release... Anyway, I love the idea or more like the cheat.. The Canon way of Kiba using the sword birth is dumb, but it's shounen after all.. Hope author will really unleash the sword myriad abilities to fullest... A bit suggestion of sword.. A tempering sword like Xiaoyan Xuan Ruler sword that could slow down the spirit power so you have to forcefully push the spirit power, kind of weight training for spirit energy. Then pressure claymore that could pressurised the body and make it feel like you constantly working out. It train your muscle, bones, organ through a thorough pressure. Vein sword, sword that when stab inside you and its ability is to pump your spiritual energy vein like balloon and rupture then. Combine with healing lotus to heal and you have stronger vein. Maybe.. Poison sword to train your poison resistance because immunity is kind of a thing in DD... Mentor sword, a sword with ability to vibrate when you make a mistake in sword manship. If you slash in weird angle, it vibrate until you correct your posture. Space sword, a sword that could slash space, expand space, stabilise space to create your own space bag..
please author i beg you, don't let the MC go to the shrek academy, shrek in doulou dalu 1 is very boring, has few characters, will be the same arcs as all the other fanfics and even in romantic interests there is only one ning rongrong and if you tell her before she likes oscar, if the MC goes to another academy she has more possibilities of plots and relationships, besides the opportunity for the MC to seriously face the 7 demons of shrek, 100% of the fanfic of doulou dalu is in the shrek academy , instead of helping tang san it would be cool for the MC to defeat him and change the original story
One of the best fanfic there is and doesn't have a simp and boring Mc. Has fast update and the flow of the story doesn't fell forced at all.The mc is good and does not let other force him like the other typical Mc because of the plot not that he knows about it,and the most important of all the author does not nerf the Mc so that he could go to Shrek academy and the author gave the Mc appropriate power level that showcase his cheat and hard work
揭示劇透 É tanta habilidade, que o leitor fica perdido. O típico MC que tem todo tipo de habilidade, outro pirralho fora da configuração do mundo DD. Uma porcaria. Sim, uma merda. É sistema! Quer algo bom disso?
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it is quite a nice fan fic of Douluo Dalu ( the timeline is dd1) where our mc has a unique system. The mc is quite a likeable character and is not your average protagonist who is a idiot or a person who leeches of others. Overall it was fun to read even though it has not been updated for a while.
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Other then the grammar the story is great and I really enjoyed reading this but the main problem is the spastic updates till the current nonsense where the author is just gone
It needs some serious rewriting as it has lots of grammatical mistakes, and many more mistakes needs to fixed about the world setting and character design
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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
This is clearly machine translated with zero effort put into editing it i highly recommend avoid this atrocity at all costs as it will kill your brain cells just reading it
Not really a review but more of a question, is it needed to have knowledge of Soul Land before reading this fanfic? I have heard of it but never had an interest in it at the time, so I'm hesitant in starting to read. Not to mention that there's like, what? 4 Soul Land series? I'm really not going to waste time reading 4 novels/manhuas that might not even be really connected to each other.
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Very good novel a bit of problem with grammar no other complains from my side. Want more. Nothing other to write so rest is spam. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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It completely blew my mind. It managed to surpass my high expectations AND be nothing at all like I expected. Or in simple language "Double Plus Good." Let me preface this with an apology. If I sound stunningly inarticulate at times in this review, I can't help it. My mind is completely fried. This fanfic novel is one of the top out there. The world-building is so fully fleshed out and spine-tinglingly terrifying that it's almost as if "author-san' travelled to such a place, escaped from it, and then just wrote it all down.
please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.please don't drop.
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need more chapters I love the way the story is going I mean obviously you can improve as a writer but when I started reading this became a personal favorite but needs more chapters
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trash fic like many other. the cliche system that spread the mc for anything he do. mc gaining op power like it was normal and even so being extremely because he dont use right. this without counting how the girls fall in love with him so easily. of course I know that is impossible to write a completely original fanfic without cliche but the author writing style make this story completely unlikable only people that are starting with fanfic will like this fic
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Five star review to bribe author.. Maybe the handsome or beauty will mass release... Anyway, I love the idea or more like the cheat.. The Canon way of Kiba using the sword birth is dumb, but it's shounen after all.. Hope author will really unleash the sword myriad abilities to fullest... A bit suggestion of sword.. A tempering sword like Xiaoyan Xuan Ruler sword that could slow down the spirit power so you have to forcefully push the spirit power, kind of weight training for spirit energy. Then pressure claymore that could pressurised the body and make it feel like you constantly working out. It train your muscle, bones, organ through a thorough pressure. Vein sword, sword that when stab inside you and its ability is to pump your spiritual energy vein like balloon and rupture then. Combine with healing lotus to heal and you have stronger vein. Maybe.. Poison sword to train your poison resistance because immunity is kind of a thing in DD... Mentor sword, a sword with ability to vibrate when you make a mistake in sword manship. If you slash in weird angle, it vibrate until you correct your posture. Space sword, a sword that could slash space, expand space, stabilise space to create your own space bag..