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Una historia interesante pero no tiene nada nuevo o especial hasta ahora, se necesitan más capítulos para analizarla mejor. El protagonista es un tonto, es como Naruto. Sabe que el mundo está podrido pero en lugar de ser egoísta el quiere defenderlos a todos
I genuinely don't have any complaints. I usually have lots of problems with everything I read but this is really good. Really enjoyed reading this. This fanfic is like Kakashi, well versed in everything. It has good action romance and the drama isn't over the top. The characters have their own personality. All is good.
It has been incredibly entertaining so far. I admit that when I selected this story I wasn't expecting much and felt it would become one of the many stories that imposed the system's importance every few paragraphs, but you proved me wrong. You used the status screen as a small measuring stick while the main character remained the focus of importance. I like this take on things.
It's alright. Not quite my cup of tea, though, for two reasons. 1. The MC is too selfless for my tastes (befriends Naruto, rescues Karin, wants strength to "protect his friends and family"). It makes him feel kinda flat and unrealistic. 2. The MC is too powerful. He claims to be at chunin level as an academy student, and manages to fight off Sasori as a genin. There's just an uncomfortable divide between how strong he is, and how strong his friends and family are, which makes this story hard to relate to. The MC isn't really a human with hopes, dreams, and fears. He's an ideal of selflessness and strength, the ultimate knight in shining armor. I don't doubt his validity as a character, but he's just not for me.
I read until chapter 17 and then quit reading so I don't know anything above that. The first 10 chapters were really promising and fun to read, seemed like it is non harem plus the author gave some love to tenten who is usually left out. I don't think I have anything negative to say about it, maybe kicking Kiba out of team 8 is a little too used in fanfics, but other than that all good. The problem started popping up from the first team 8 fight, It was just rubbish, it made no logical sense in any way. I tried to justify it, but the only conclusion I came up with is it being a genjutsu to train team 8, as I forced myself to read upto chapter 17 nothing seemed to fix the hole that the fight left in the story. The Author also mixed up ranks, thinking that Tokubetsu Jōnin is higher than Jōnin.
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Overall it's alright if you are new to fanfics. The author is very familair with the world and is so far avoiding most pitfalls other fanfics find themselves in. However the story has some bad vibes from the get go. First of all the pacing is way to fast to give the reader any sort of stability when reading the fanfic. What I mean by that is the author gives us the readers the bare bone set up that most fictions give to set up the story when using reincarnation, Mc dies then is reborn. Simple right but the problem lies with that after that the author's focus is on the MC's power rather than their character. From what I got from the MC in the first few chapters is that he was a kid who played football, had decent tolerance in ignoring drunks and that he didn't ignore Naruto. Everything else is a stat flex on a bunch if children who aren't even in the academy and we even got a time skip to boost MC right before it. And the biggest dissapointment to this point is that by doing so one of the biggest factors that draw in readers is ignored, The DOG. Seriously i'm not saying you shouldn't give it a read as the author clearly puts their heart into the story, it's just that there is a clear feel in lack of direction to the story to make it feel unique. And to people who argue it's inherently great because there is no harem, and that the MC isn't God from chapter 1 you are doing the author and yourselves a disservice for rating the fiction highly on that alone.
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Im in chap 9 and I can't help to notice that even though he is an inuzuka he barely had an interaction with his dog so let me see in the next chap if there is a change. All in all its good
I’ve reas up to chapter 20 so far, and i have to say that I really enjoyed the quality of the writing and plot, but my absolute dealbreaker for this book was the ‘No-Harem’, cus almost every fan-fic has a harem and it destroys the story and I find it weird that people write about harems, It’s almost like a fetish for the author.🧐🤫🤯🥳
This has quickly become my favorite naruto fanfic Dont want to spoil anything But the bloodline choices are good and how they were explained is easy and done smoothly And the MC love interest wasn't what I expected at all But I can get behind it and like the character development. Author please don't disappear before you've completed this xp
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Nice. Really like that the author chose the inuzuka clan for the mc. I am hoping there is more of a development in the romance and possibly a harem or at least two woman. The writing is good and i like the way the system only shows the jutsus and nothing else.
Inuzuka + Alpha = Harem😶😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏
Tell me who is the pairing please Please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please
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A very good naruto fanfiction good characters and for those who are like me who hate system its only show the status and nothing more :D. But character has shallow personality
it is quite good. the mc isnt too op and is quite good in character too. but i hope he gets some powerup soon. overall its good. inuzuka ryota
I really liked the novel... keep up the good work bro.....and by the way keep it this peaceful will you...and Mann if possible make the MC at least strong enough to repel the Uchiha massacre to just killing of people who want to revolt.. that would be really likable... that's just my opinion....I will like the way you write it...Mann and I need more updates...[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
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great novel keep up the great work..................................................................................................................................
i really liked these 4 chapters and how it is going for now , i only hope he sticks with inuzuka techniques and doesnt get cliche powers (like sharingan)
Gracias por el capítulo hace tiempo esperaba un a novela donde mostraran a los lobos de esta manera en el mundo de Naruto 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Una historia interesante pero no tiene nada nuevo o especial hasta ahora, se necesitan más capítulos para analizarla mejor. El protagonista es un tonto, es como Naruto. Sabe que el mundo está podrido pero en lugar de ser egoísta el quiere defenderlos a todos
I genuinely don't have any complaints. I usually have lots of problems with everything I read but this is really good. Really enjoyed reading this. This fanfic is like Kakashi, well versed in everything. It has good action romance and the drama isn't over the top. The characters have their own personality. All is good.
It has been incredibly entertaining so far. I admit that when I selected this story I wasn't expecting much and felt it would become one of the many stories that imposed the system's importance every few paragraphs, but you proved me wrong. You used the status screen as a small measuring stick while the main character remained the focus of importance. I like this take on things.
It's alright. Not quite my cup of tea, though, for two reasons. 1. The MC is too selfless for my tastes (befriends Naruto, rescues Karin, wants strength to "protect his friends and family"). It makes him feel kinda flat and unrealistic. 2. The MC is too powerful. He claims to be at chunin level as an academy student, and manages to fight off Sasori as a genin. There's just an uncomfortable divide between how strong he is, and how strong his friends and family are, which makes this story hard to relate to. The MC isn't really a human with hopes, dreams, and fears. He's an ideal of selflessness and strength, the ultimate knight in shining armor. I don't doubt his validity as a character, but he's just not for me.
I read until chapter 17 and then quit reading so I don't know anything above that. The first 10 chapters were really promising and fun to read, seemed like it is non harem plus the author gave some love to tenten who is usually left out. I don't think I have anything negative to say about it, maybe kicking Kiba out of team 8 is a little too used in fanfics, but other than that all good. The problem started popping up from the first team 8 fight, It was just rubbish, it made no logical sense in any way. I tried to justify it, but the only conclusion I came up with is it being a genjutsu to train team 8, as I forced myself to read upto chapter 17 nothing seemed to fix the hole that the fight left in the story. The Author also mixed up ranks, thinking that Tokubetsu Jōnin is higher than Jōnin.
揭示劇透 Overall it's alright if you are new to fanfics. The author is very familair with the world and is so far avoiding most pitfalls other fanfics find themselves in. However the story has some bad vibes from the get go. First of all the pacing is way to fast to give the reader any sort of stability when reading the fanfic. What I mean by that is the author gives us the readers the bare bone set up that most fictions give to set up the story when using reincarnation, Mc dies then is reborn. Simple right but the problem lies with that after that the author's focus is on the MC's power rather than their character. From what I got from the MC in the first few chapters is that he was a kid who played football, had decent tolerance in ignoring drunks and that he didn't ignore Naruto. Everything else is a stat flex on a bunch if children who aren't even in the academy and we even got a time skip to boost MC right before it. And the biggest dissapointment to this point is that by doing so one of the biggest factors that draw in readers is ignored, The DOG. Seriously i'm not saying you shouldn't give it a read as the author clearly puts their heart into the story, it's just that there is a clear feel in lack of direction to the story to make it feel unique. And to people who argue it's inherently great because there is no harem, and that the MC isn't God from chapter 1 you are doing the author and yourselves a disservice for rating the fiction highly on that alone.
揭示劇透 Im in chap 9 and I can't help to notice that even though he is an inuzuka he barely had an interaction with his dog so let me see in the next chap if there is a change. All in all its good
I’ve reas up to chapter 20 so far, and i have to say that I really enjoyed the quality of the writing and plot, but my absolute dealbreaker for this book was the ‘No-Harem’, cus almost every fan-fic has a harem and it destroys the story and I find it weird that people write about harems, It’s almost like a fetish for the author.🧐🤫🤯🥳
This has quickly become my favorite naruto fanfic Dont want to spoil anything But the bloodline choices are good and how they were explained is easy and done smoothly And the MC love interest wasn't what I expected at all But I can get behind it and like the character development. Author please don't disappear before you've completed this xp
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Nice. Really like that the author chose the inuzuka clan for the mc. I am hoping there is more of a development in the romance and possibly a harem or at least two woman. The writing is good and i like the way the system only shows the jutsus and nothing else.
Inuzuka + Alpha = Harem😶😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏
Tell me who is the pairing please Please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please
5 out of 5 😘👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾
A very good naruto fanfiction good characters and for those who are like me who hate system its only show the status and nothing more :D. But character has shallow personality
it is quite good. the mc isnt too op and is quite good in character too. but i hope he gets some powerup soon. overall its good. inuzuka ryota
I really liked the novel... keep up the good work bro.....and by the way keep it this peaceful will you...and Mann if possible make the MC at least strong enough to repel the Uchiha massacre to just killing of people who want to revolt.. that would be really likable... that's just my opinion....I will like the way you write it...Mann and I need more updates...[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
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great novel keep up the great work..................................................................................................................................
i really liked these 4 chapters and how it is going for now , i only hope he sticks with inuzuka techniques and doesnt get cliche powers (like sharingan)
Gracias por el capítulo hace tiempo esperaba un a novela donde mostraran a los lobos de esta manera en el mundo de Naruto 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍