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it was a great story and had many interesting stories. Would love to know what would happen at the one piece world
quality control is needed. wasnt that good of a story and too much 5 star spam ...........................................................................
Some people call it trash while other call it garbage.but i call it a master piece👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
it's just a piece of fantasy writing without any substance in it that's my impression. writing quality is decent the "comedy" falls flat most of the time and annoying most of the time story development is just nonsense character design is not likeable updating stability is decent I guess. this story is not for me. I wish the author good luck in their future endeavors.
This story had a lot of potential but it was wasted after a short time, the system is one of the worst I have seen, all it does is attack the protagonist, I'm serious, the system attacks the protagonist and like a masochist. he accepts everything.
A decent read to turn off your brain. It was still bearable even during the Akame ga Kill arc (which was very boring). Then, Paimon, as annoying as always, makes the girl from Chuunibyou his master
since when god so weak. travel through universe yet let people step on his pride. pitiful god
If only the mc wasn't a simp, a beta male that is submissive to women, he kills without hesitation every male that wants to kill him, but when it's a woman, he immediatly starts to act like a brainless japanese harem mc that simps on every woman he sees. Also, it was mentioned that he had a perfect compatibility with sunshine but somehow he can't use it during the night like mael, the one who was the perfect vessel for it. that means he got nerfed. There are just too much clichés that I'm skipping paragraphs at this point. The only thing that kept me reading till now is the thanos and jojo references , but even that is getting old so I suppose I'm dropping this in a few chapters.
Such temptations are you perhaps the devili havent started reading it yet so ima just leave you with a above average plus
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The story started out great, it was entertaining until the world hopping quests started. If it was properly executed then the story might have been great all through out. Relationships for me felt rushed as the girls would immediately accept being in a harem after a few words or chapter. Next is that since the story kept jumping from world to world, it felt confusing at some parts. Lastly the system, I think this should be named as parody system instead of harem, cause it felt like some parody fiction, due to the systems action as well as the MCs. though I guess being a parody matches the MCs main world which is konosuba
hello! I've read your story and I've let it update so I have more to read. I would like to ask if you could translate it into Spanish on Wattpad
Its not good but it's not bad... Mc is annoying and then the writer introduces a MAP AI thats even more annoying...
well, here is my review, as far as I read the story became very repetitive and boring. because? the answer is that every book or fanfic has to have a framework and a goal example a betrayed protagonist seeking revenge. a protagonist who seeks power. a protagonist in a romance. etc and once the goal is met, the story ends because beyond that it's already boring In this fanfic the story was normal. neither good nor bad but there was no specific goal, just something very vague Now the protagonist is powerful and already has children (from the future) which doesn't make sense because they are from different times, just going to the past is dangerous. another is that the protagonist is very young (14 years old). imagine that a child of that age already has to be responsible for children. illogical I know it's a fanfic but all books have to have a reasonable logic, and if it doesn't then it's not worth reading.
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this truly a bad novel as for why many other reviews have already covered what i could say p s the spam 5 star reviews are just too much in this trash and this novel is for cucks
Beginning isn't that bad. The Gaia situation kind of grossed me out, but I just ignored it and moved on. Kind of started losing interest as soon as August (I think, whoever his first son is) was introduced and seeing how you were hinting at him and Coco together in the future lowered my interest even further. Now we are reading chapters about him meeting and training his daughters future husbands and I really just do not care about any of that lol. Good luck with this, but I think I'm gonna go ahead and stop here.
good braindead fun. turn off brain and enjoy. grammar is iffy, but, as long as you can get past that, it should be smooth sailing. smoothen out your brain, sit back and enjoy.
dropped. this is really really bad. seems like it was made for losers with no life to speak of...............................................................
Honestly I quite enjoyed it during the beginning. However, when random children started popping up and also random lovers with no background started showing up, the story got very confusing. Especially during the Akame ga kill arc, which honestly could’ve been ended so much faster and simpler. I don’t know why the author decided to add so much unnecessary stuff like dream children, time travel, and all the side stories. In my opinion, you don’t even have to add anything, just erase some of the unnecessary content and the story would’ve progressed so much clearer. On the flip side, quality of writing was good and was clear to understand. Story is also very interesting and unique. Definitely a good sense of humor, although repetitive. I also think that the author had a good grasp on the originality of each character.
I dont get why people dont like this novel l8r on that much. if you survive through 20 ch i feel like the rest of the ride will be very fun as well. Pacing is fine, writing quality deff needs improvement but is good for fanfics standards, A LOT of fluffy and funny momments with A LOT of harem members and A LOT of daughters (really implemented really well, if u dont like this kind of bit, try reading more as its really cute and funny) overall, really good mashup of fanfics with A TON of refferences from anime/manga/even other ffs :))) TY for the amazing work author ILY
O harém ficou muito bagunçado, o autor começou a adicionar muitas garotas sem desenvolvelas adequadamente, também não foi agradável a história de fundo da Gaia
Lo mejor de este autor, lo empecé a leer desde el 2023 y recién me di cuenta que lo termino, lastimosamente no pude ver el momento exacto cuando terminó esta obra pero ahora después de meses porfin pude terminar de leerlo
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it was a great story and had many interesting stories. Would love to know what would happen at the one piece world
quality control is needed. wasnt that good of a story and too much 5 star spam ...........................................................................
Some people call it trash while other call it garbage.but i call it a master piece👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
it's just a piece of fantasy writing without any substance in it that's my impression. writing quality is decent the "comedy" falls flat most of the time and annoying most of the time story development is just nonsense character design is not likeable updating stability is decent I guess. this story is not for me. I wish the author good luck in their future endeavors.
This story had a lot of potential but it was wasted after a short time, the system is one of the worst I have seen, all it does is attack the protagonist, I'm serious, the system attacks the protagonist and like a masochist. he accepts everything.
A decent read to turn off your brain. It was still bearable even during the Akame ga Kill arc (which was very boring). Then, Paimon, as annoying as always, makes the girl from Chuunibyou his master
since when god so weak. travel through universe yet let people step on his pride. pitiful god
If only the mc wasn't a simp, a beta male that is submissive to women, he kills without hesitation every male that wants to kill him, but when it's a woman, he immediatly starts to act like a brainless japanese harem mc that simps on every woman he sees. Also, it was mentioned that he had a perfect compatibility with sunshine but somehow he can't use it during the night like mael, the one who was the perfect vessel for it. that means he got nerfed. There are just too much clichés that I'm skipping paragraphs at this point. The only thing that kept me reading till now is the thanos and jojo references , but even that is getting old so I suppose I'm dropping this in a few chapters.
Such temptations are you perhaps the devili havent started reading it yet so ima just leave you with a above average plus
that's beyond shameless.[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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The story started out great, it was entertaining until the world hopping quests started. If it was properly executed then the story might have been great all through out. Relationships for me felt rushed as the girls would immediately accept being in a harem after a few words or chapter. Next is that since the story kept jumping from world to world, it felt confusing at some parts. Lastly the system, I think this should be named as parody system instead of harem, cause it felt like some parody fiction, due to the systems action as well as the MCs. though I guess being a parody matches the MCs main world which is konosuba
hello! I've read your story and I've let it update so I have more to read. I would like to ask if you could translate it into Spanish on Wattpad
Its not good but it's not bad... Mc is annoying and then the writer introduces a MAP AI thats even more annoying...
well, here is my review, as far as I read the story became very repetitive and boring. because? the answer is that every book or fanfic has to have a framework and a goal example a betrayed protagonist seeking revenge. a protagonist who seeks power. a protagonist in a romance. etc and once the goal is met, the story ends because beyond that it's already boring In this fanfic the story was normal. neither good nor bad but there was no specific goal, just something very vague Now the protagonist is powerful and already has children (from the future) which doesn't make sense because they are from different times, just going to the past is dangerous. another is that the protagonist is very young (14 years old). imagine that a child of that age already has to be responsible for children. illogical I know it's a fanfic but all books have to have a reasonable logic, and if it doesn't then it's not worth reading.
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this truly a bad novel as for why many other reviews have already covered what i could say p s the spam 5 star reviews are just too much in this trash and this novel is for cucks
Beginning isn't that bad. The Gaia situation kind of grossed me out, but I just ignored it and moved on. Kind of started losing interest as soon as August (I think, whoever his first son is) was introduced and seeing how you were hinting at him and Coco together in the future lowered my interest even further. Now we are reading chapters about him meeting and training his daughters future husbands and I really just do not care about any of that lol. Good luck with this, but I think I'm gonna go ahead and stop here.
good braindead fun. turn off brain and enjoy. grammar is iffy, but, as long as you can get past that, it should be smooth sailing. smoothen out your brain, sit back and enjoy.
dropped. this is really really bad. seems like it was made for losers with no life to speak of...............................................................
Honestly I quite enjoyed it during the beginning. However, when random children started popping up and also random lovers with no background started showing up, the story got very confusing. Especially during the Akame ga kill arc, which honestly could’ve been ended so much faster and simpler. I don’t know why the author decided to add so much unnecessary stuff like dream children, time travel, and all the side stories. In my opinion, you don’t even have to add anything, just erase some of the unnecessary content and the story would’ve progressed so much clearer. On the flip side, quality of writing was good and was clear to understand. Story is also very interesting and unique. Definitely a good sense of humor, although repetitive. I also think that the author had a good grasp on the originality of each character.
I dont get why people dont like this novel l8r on that much. if you survive through 20 ch i feel like the rest of the ride will be very fun as well. Pacing is fine, writing quality deff needs improvement but is good for fanfics standards, A LOT of fluffy and funny momments with A LOT of harem members and A LOT of daughters (really implemented really well, if u dont like this kind of bit, try reading more as its really cute and funny) overall, really good mashup of fanfics with A TON of refferences from anime/manga/even other ffs :))) TY for the amazing work author ILY
O harém ficou muito bagunçado, o autor começou a adicionar muitas garotas sem desenvolvelas adequadamente, também não foi agradável a história de fundo da Gaia
Lo mejor de este autor, lo empecé a leer desde el 2023 y recién me di cuenta que lo termino, lastimosamente no pude ver el momento exacto cuando terminó esta obra pero ahora después de meses porfin pude terminar de leerlo
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