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Hastin was running out of ideas for his horror novel. By chance, he comes across an app which gives him ideas for his story. In the beginning, everything was smooth flowing. But later he finds out that whoever reads his story disappears and becomes the story character themselves...

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PUJIT_FADTE_9415

FINALLY A GOOD ONE OTHER THAN THE NOVEL MY HOUSE OF HORRORS,I HOPE THE AUTHOR WILL CONTINUE YO WRITE THIS NOVEL AND NOT DROP IT IN THE MIDDLE JUST LIKE MOST OTHERS DO NEW CHAPTERS PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEE 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

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RainlessShine

WOW! Goosebumps! It's my first time reading this kind of genre but it really caught my interest. Everything was perfectly described. You’re great Author.

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O_Wolfs

I haven't read or watched any horror in a while, yet I felt those tingles again just by reading the first chapter of this novel. The introduction of the protagonist's personality and ambitions was done very well. The descriptions of the gloomy mansion and the frightening events are really vivid. The plot flow and characters aside, the writing itself needs some more improvement. First, "Hastin" the name of the protagonist is used too frequently that just makes it sound a script of a movie or game rather than a novel. I suggest "He" would be used at some instances since there are few characters around him and it wouldn't be hard to know who it refers to. One more thing is about the scene where innocent people get scammed by the app and are suddenly teleported to that spooky mansion. I suggest the author showed what happened and not told. For example, he could shift to the point of view of one of those people. This way, he could show how they thought toward this invitation and how sudden and frightening it was for them to find themselves immediately in that strange place. Overall, I say the author did a very great job. The story is unique and the characters are also distinguishable. Keep up the effort until this novel reaches the top!!!

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LordSamurai

I was attracted to the story and I want to continue reading. However, I found the term to mention it used as "he" in almost every paragraph very repetitive. I advise you to decrease when using your own name. Hastin thought ... Hastin was curious ... You can refer to it using "him", but not very often, because it gets tiring. The novel has a good premise, I will accompany and support you!

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Sigmao
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Although I am not personally a fan of horror novels, this novel is really good. It takes a unique approach to its system and makes it fun and unpredictable.

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Zinni
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fresh and new idea i really like the plot of the story so far , good description, dialogue are nice as well. i love the characters and the app is creepy it gives you the right feeling for horror . great job so far keep it up . **: you over use the name hastin a lot .

4yr
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BaeVida
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Well catchy Umm title (gulp). Nice writing style, hmm good description, dialogue are nice as well. Well the story almost gave me chills cos I am one person who thinks a lot, I had already started thinking of his unfortunate life with the app and me in his shoes and the 5 random humans every month... Damn he is gonna be turned into a murderer. Hmm, for a first time writing a horror novel, you sure are doing a great work. Recommended for all horror and thriller fans. Come support this book, vote, review and leave a comment for our author here. She is doing a good job. Keep it up Darlene.

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NotUse

Your book is great! It actually gave me spooky Siri vibes. The descriptions are creative and well thought. The dialogues are good too, and it really makes me interested on what's going to happen next. Nice work!!!

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ryfulrifle

I am reviewing this story with only 3 chapters so far, this will be more like a general first impression. I would say I am quite hooked and am looking forward to newer chapters! Enjoy the plot so far, though the story develops too fast for my liking. Narration can be smoother, but that's just me being nitpicky. Punctuation can be better, but it's more than readable. Otherwise, I don't know about the characters and world background as there are only 3 chapters, so I'm leaving it at 4 stars for now. TL;DR: Some quality of life changes, but the story has got me hooked with its 3 chapters. Happy reading!

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TheVersalStudios

I don't know if it's just me but I don't understand anything about this novel. I feel that both the title and the synopsis completely misled me. Since after reading 25 chapters, the stories that are supposed to trap people to death have so little prominence And almost everything comes down to how the MC suffers. To be honest, I found this story a big scam and hardly coherent. I do not recommend it.f it were not for the good writing I would not have even read it.

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Shadow_Magus

A well written novel. Creepy in general, but still I liked it. I normally don't find writing scary. Most horror movies are also boring most of the time. But this was not boring as things like The Nun, and others, and it was interesting to read. You could try and make it scarier by giving more description just before the climax of the scene, similar to how the background noises increase in tempo just before the ghost is revealed.

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SMomoTempest

Wow, I only read 1 chapter, but this book is excellent 🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓😐🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓🤓

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deanbunter88

Thanks for the novel 😊😆😄😆😐😉😯😐😯😑😇😅😇😂😀😂😀😁😀😊😁😄😆😆😄😉😐😐😯😑😯😇😀😂😁😁😊😆😄😆😄😆😉😯😇😇😅😇😅😇😂😀😀😁😊😁😆😄😆😄

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northpoem

Sigh.... there are so little good horror novels on this d*mn app, this one is one of the rare few good ones. Please don't drop this author, imo there are 3 good horror novels here, my house of horrors, plague doctor, and this one. Keep up the good work!!

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Yard_Min

Been reading everything you write, every one of the books has been unique and eye catching. Can imagine the story in my head while I read and things fall in place very well in an orderly fashion. Scary parts are really well written and pop up like real surprises, story’s pace and build up is amazing for fast readers like me. keep writing. cheers!

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rain_berry_

I'm usually a person who is easily scared of ghosts but this novel is really addictive because of its interesting chapters .. author narrated in such a way.. loved your novel soo much

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  1. 1
    Offer - Six months free trial + a million views in a day!!! 4 years ago
  2. 2
    Trial starts 4 years ago
  3. 3
    Slayer, the giant vulture 4 years ago
  4. 4
    Hastin tries to use his story to save everyone 4 years ago
  5. 5
    Hastin meets Simon!! 4 years ago
  6. 6
    Akemi wakes up, but... 4 years ago
  7. 7
    Akemi goes out to get lunch! 4 years ago
  8. 8
    Hastin slits his hands 4 years ago
  9. 9
    Akemi’s anger 4 years ago
  10. 10
    Akemi recovers her memory 4 years ago
  11. 11
    The App’s Return 4 years ago
  12. 12
    Jackson’s return 4 years ago
  13. 13
    Akemi’s scheme 4 years ago
  14. 14
    Jackson’s memory of Haruto 4 years ago
  15. 15
    Haruto’s past 4 years ago
  16. 16
    Officers visits Hastin’s mansion in search of Simon 4 years ago
  17. 17
    The next five 4 years ago
  18. 18
    Jackson gets shifted to another location 4 years ago
  19. 19
    Carson loses his life 4 years ago
  20. 20
    The dungeon 4 years ago
  21. 21
    Ending of his best friend Luis 4 years ago
  22. 22
    Zinna gets pulled up the wall. 4 years ago
  23. 23
    Hastin ran away 4 years ago
  24. 24
    Ura fell down on a room filled with rotten corpses 4 years ago
  25. 25
    Akemi creates a chaos 4 years ago
  26. 26
    Hastin’s return 4 years ago
  27. 27
    Zinna faints in fear 4 years ago
  28. 28
    Slayer took off with Spencer 4 years ago
  29. 29
    Slaughter continues the podcast 4 years ago
  30. 30
    New leader!! 4 years ago
  31. 31
    Hastin meets the five but they could not see him 4 years ago
  32. 32
    Spencer kills Diana 4 years ago
  33. 33
    Hastin walks away without opening the gate 4 years ago
  34. 34
    Hastin regrets his decision 4 years ago
  35. 35
    Zinna is alive 4 years ago
  36. 36
    Ura finds a tunnel to escape 4 years ago
  37. 37
    Lucas head rolls near Akemi 4 years ago
  38. 38
    Victor and Jackson plans a getaway 4 years ago
  39. 39
    Spencer sends Eli to power the server up 4 years ago
  40. 40
    Spencer flies to save Gary 4 years ago
  41. 41
    Jackson escapes with Victor 4 years ago
  42. 42
    The next five came out of the tunnel 4 years ago
  43. 43
    Jackson and Victor crosses the border 4 years ago
  44. 44
    Spencer revive Gary 4 years ago
  45. 45
    Eli come across the decaying corpses 4 years ago
  46. 46
    Dungeon gets destroyed 4 years ago
  47. 47
    Akemi being taken away 4 years ago
  48. 48
    Akemi decides to contact Hastin 4 years ago
  49. 49
    Campfire 4 years ago
  50. 50
    Zinna agrees to tell Aaron the truth 4 years ago
  51. 51
    Ura puts herbal patches on Zinna’s wounds 4 years ago
  52. 52
    Eli enters Hastin’s mansion 4 years ago
  53. 53
    Spencer goes to Hastin’s mansion 4 years ago
  54. 54
    Tucker comes back as a new person 4 years ago
  55. 55
    Jackson contacts Craig 4 years ago
  56. 56
    Tucker speaks to Jackson 4 years ago
  57. 57
    Baron gets assigned to the team to save Jackson 4 years ago
  58. 58
    Akihiro sends the details of missing people 4 years ago
  59. 59
    Baron sees the real face of Tucker 4 years ago
  60. 60
    Ura and Aaron woke up to realize others are missing 4 years ago
  61. 61
    Zinna goes in search of the animals 4 years ago
  62. 62
    Baron escapes from the sea 4 years ago
  63. 63
    Hastin and Akemi rejoins 4 years ago
  64. 64
    Jackson contacts Hastin 4 years ago
  65. 65
    Victor and Jackson runs away 4 years ago
  66. 66
    Aaron and Upton goes out in search of Zinna 4 years ago
  67. 67
    Aaron and Upton hides about Zinna’s demise 4 years ago
  68. 68
    Michael’s body floats on the lake 4 years ago
  69. 69
    Hastin realizes something is wrong with the app 4 years ago
  70. 70
    Hastin meets Spencer formally 4 years ago
  71. 71
    Victor and Jackson almost got caught 4 years ago
  72. 72
    Hastin realign the server without being asked 4 years ago
  73. 73
    Baron wakes up 4 years ago
  74. 74
    Baron read the red book 4 years ago
  75. 75
    Thomas finds Jackson 4 years ago
  76. 76
    Gary takes back the control 4 years ago
  77. 77
    Thomas brings Jackson and Victor to his home 4 years ago
  78. 78
    Tucker is back 4 years ago
  79. 79
    Baron and Raphael travel by bus 4 years ago
  80. 80
    Baron and Raphael meets Jackson 4 years ago
  81. 81
    Baron hits Jackson in his head 4 years ago
  82. 82
    Baron takes Jackson to Japan against his will 4 years ago
  83. 83
    Akemi’s dream 4 years ago
  84. 84
    The app is back online! 4 years ago
  85. 85
    Hastin starts to write once again 4 years ago
  86. 86
    Baron probes Jackson to say the truth 4 years ago
  87. 87
    Ura’s Nightmare after waking up 4 years ago
  88. 88
    Two days into the ocean 4 years ago
  89. 89
    Jackson meets Akihiro 4 years ago
  90. 90
    Ura enters the server 4 years ago
  91. 91
    Mission Fauna 4 years ago
  92. 92
    Dead bodies 4 years ago
  93. 93
    Tucker comes to Hastin’s mansion 4 years ago
  94. 94
    Old server comes back to life 4 years ago
  95. 95
    The app brings in five more people 4 years ago
  96. 96
    Haruto’s parents 4 years ago
  97. 97
    Takeshi tried to kill Haruto 4 years ago
  98. 98
    First MIFAU meeting 4 years ago
  99. 99
    Hastin wants to finish the story 4 years ago
  100. 100
    Spencer goes to Japan 4 years ago
  101. 101
    Spencer noticed them 4 years ago
  102. 102
    Ahmya survives 4 years ago
  103. 103
    Chat with Haruto 4 years ago
  104. 104
    Akemi threatens Tucker 4 years ago
  105. 105
    Spencer attacks the base with his army 4 years ago
  106. 106
    Jackson meets Haruto 4 years ago
  107. 107
    Spencer finds the secret base 4 years ago
  108. 108
    Everything returns to normal 4 years ago
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