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寫檢討The writing quality is good and I couldn't find any mistakes in the grammar. However the story feels a little too blend and boring because there are no descriptions of people's reactions to things, just conversations. I tried to continue reading but it honestly didn't appeal to me and I lost interest fast so I stopped at chapter 5. I know it might have gotten better in the future chapters, but I couldn't get there unfortunately. So maybe if the author could rewrite the first few chapters to make it more interesting for future readers it would be great...
Your killing me with the waiting for new chapters your making me cry see😭 so please more chapters
I love this story and characters and I'm deading for more please give more need to find out what happens next
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I loved the story and characters I wish that you were still writing. but everytime I stumble upon a great novel it ends up that it has not been updated for a long time.
Will the author continue?........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Muito bom😆😆😆😆____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Really well done OP MC. The romance isn't great but it's not so bad that it detracts from the story. The way the different power systems are handled is great. This story deserves more attention.
Why does almost every single fanfic I come across have Alice as the love interest? I get that she has a good personality, but her appearance isn’t very good.
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good novel, I like it.......................................................................................................................
Loving it so far! pls don't ever drop! ...............................................................................................................
Please continue with this. Is amazing sorry for your father's death but cheer up you can man. I love this story so i hope see it finish. Thanks for this 2 years
I'm no fan of twilight. But i have to say that this is the BEST TWILIGHT Fanfic ever. I stopped reading it at danmachi universe not because of any thing that can be criticised, but I just hate danmachi,and haven't watched much of it, so I dropped it. Yet it deserves [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
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truly splendid...............................................................................................................................
Is there a version of this book on the Kindle reading app? Please tell me there is. And if there is, please tell me what's the title is called. I swear i've read it on the kindle app but I can't find it
The writing quality is good and I couldn't find any mistakes in the grammar. However the story feels a little too blend and boring because there are no descriptions of people's reactions to things, just conversations. I tried to continue reading but it honestly didn't appeal to me and I lost interest fast so I stopped at chapter 5. I know it might have gotten better in the future chapters, but I couldn't get there unfortunately. So maybe if the author could rewrite the first few chapters to make it more interesting for future readers it would be great...
Your killing me with the waiting for new chapters your making me cry see😭 so please more chapters
I love this story and characters and I'm deading for more please give more need to find out what happens next
My favorite ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……… ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ………. ……….
I loved the story and characters I wish that you were still writing. but everytime I stumble upon a great novel it ends up that it has not been updated for a long time.
Will the author continue?........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Muito bom😆😆😆😆____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Really well done OP MC. The romance isn't great but it's not so bad that it detracts from the story. The way the different power systems are handled is great. This story deserves more attention.
Why does almost every single fanfic I come across have Alice as the love interest? I get that she has a good personality, but her appearance isn’t very good.
gostei muito da história continua pôr favor [img=exp][img=update][img=recommend][img=fp][img=faceslap][img=exp][img=coins]hsjsjajjsjsjsjshhshshshjejsjjsssjjsjsjsjshshsjjshssjsjjsjsjsjsjjehsheshshsjssjjsjsjsjsjs
揭示劇透it's a really good one to get a new read .........hdhdhddhdhdhhdhddhdhhdhdhjsjsksksnsbdbxgdjsjsdhbdhdjdjdhddhdhhdhdhdhdhshdhdhdhdbdjdjskmsbxvxxkn
Vary Goad! Gchoijgxkdgdifsutusrjsvxtidigigxkgdisititjtzcgjjvxvvbcvjggudyditdraqfqwitdopprpawitzgxvcc bcldgdkydkgdydydgdgeogegdzotdgdxtvgcghh
good novel, I like it.......................................................................................................................
Loving it so far! pls don't ever drop! ...............................................................................................................
Please continue with this. Is amazing sorry for your father's death but cheer up you can man. I love this story so i hope see it finish. Thanks for this 2 years
I'm no fan of twilight. But i have to say that this is the BEST TWILIGHT Fanfic ever. I stopped reading it at danmachi universe not because of any thing that can be criticised, but I just hate danmachi,and haven't watched much of it, so I dropped it. Yet it deserves [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
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truly splendid...............................................................................................................................
Is there a version of this book on the Kindle reading app? Please tell me there is. And if there is, please tell me what's the title is called. I swear i've read it on the kindle app but I can't find it