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The grammatical errors give me an aneurysm. I barley managed to get past 20 chapters and I only read it because it is in my free for 24hrs slot.
Great app to play for a few minutes to get the free version for a while to get a few more features and more than the app I love the way you do to keep your brain in your mind to get a good score and the ability of the app you have a
the grammar was terrible it was hard to read but besides that it kind of just didn’t make sense to me really lost a billion dollars because someone you’ve consistently beat in the past says you’re too scared isn’t that a little ridiculous?
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Damn the book keeps getting better and better, Its just the perfect balance between different genres and the grammar and battle scenes also keep improving, The author is one my favourites. Hope for more chaps.
It is an incredibly stupid story. There is just no other words to describe it. Just plane stupid. Imbecile. From worldbuilding to main character. Senile.
This is going to be an honest review from someone who has read a fair amount of books and novels. To begin with you have a very cliche MC. Typical video game plot and leveling system which isn't necessarily a bad thing. The MC uses about 0% of his brain constantly which leads to lots of plot holes and making the readers angry with his stupid and illogical decisions. The book starts off with ok grammar if you can overlook the misuse of present and past tense as well as constant spelling errors but as it continues the grammar only gets worse. It gets so bad that almost every other sentence looks like a five year old wrote it and it honestly gives me a headache. The plot isn't that bad, its the grammar that needs to be fixed. Please hire someone to fix it.
Hey there! Here are some web novel recommendations for whom share the same taste with me. If you like this story, my recommendations are worth a try! https://docs.google.com/document/d/19R5KkqHOOHSMDkF4fHscVmxWcYGh0OntYsv8NglzsQo/edit?usp=sharing
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
Hi, This is Tynan, I am an editor from another platform that focuses on adventurous Genre Fictions. After reading your “Tales of Magic Swordsman”, I decided to contact you and if possible, to extend you an invitation on distributing your works. However, there are so little I can talk about it here. If you were interested, please contact me via geekyteddyyo@gmail.com, then I should take opportunity to discuss it with you in detail. It was a great pleasure to meet your story. Sincerely Tynan
This story has such bad grammar, that it actually gave me a headache trying to read it. It also jumps all over the place and the story setup just makes no sense.
Hi there! Do you know there is a LitRPG writing contest? You might be a competitive participant and take the chance to win up to $3,000! Please Google LUTAW_writing_contest or Supreme Me Fiction Writing Contest to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
You ever watch DBZ, where one fight spans 10 episodes? This novel is similar, it tells a decent story once you get past the irritating start, but there is just too much filler. Author needs to stop rephrasing everything and just get to the point. Cut down on the unnecessary backstory, you don’t need that much world building. Really difficult to read and get into it.
Just how pathetic your mc is he is 10 years straight strongest player and doesn't even show a mentality of being like easily angered and one more thing 10 years of experience of playing the game he doesnt even know how other class works even a normal person to have this long experience playing something will know one thing or about other things You should just abolish this book this fucking book that oozes idiocy and maybe because the author is just like one Note fucking dont read this book
I dont even know how it is possible to associate Number1 player with a no brain mc? Even as a first story, im curious to know how author brain works? And even if we say okay its possible to be that strong and stupid, he played so long and deleted it like « oh there is no more fries »... no sadness, no sleepless night, no tears, nothing... he just fell asleep like he had the best day of his life.
Very good novel ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job
He needs to take some writing lessons from a primary schooler Its so hard to read I even read machine translations some times And they make more sense then this He does get the point across and u can understand what he means but every 5th word you need to change yourself to make sense of the story Apart from that great story lots of potential
Great story and characters starts a little slow but builds up fast recommend to at least read the first couple chapters and the you'll be hooked and binge read the whole thing
The mc is a total retard. In the beginning of chapter it's said that auron can drop the item also there is no contract time that said after the duel the guild and his character must instantly be deleted. He can first calm his mine assembly the elite team that got the potion and ask them first then investigate the cold bank acc and etc and make a proof to trap vice guild and detroy her then assembly the upper echelon of the guild, it's unreasonable if in the whole guild he is the only pillar there's must be someone that he can trust and give the equipment to him and give the leadership to another one so that they can't be bribe and keep each other check then delete the character and start new. I don't hate this kind of novel but this mc is total retard ...
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I really like this story and the direction it is going but that being said it had a really rough start and you have to push through the first few chapters where the author forces the MC into a really bad situation where he has to dig himself out of it with the help of his best friend. I think this was workable and the story developed nicely but the biggest issue is the constant grammar errors and word choice that makes this book difficult to continue and the reason I dropped it once it went premium. If the author was able to get a proofreader or an editor i think i would pick the story up again! This is just one lousy opinion and I hope the author can keep working the best they can and continue to improve!
I tried, I really did. I don't think the story per se is that bad. It's mostly mediocre and cliche heavy. What made my rating fall under 3 stars is mostly the writing quality. The text is riddled with spelling errors and the grammar is all over the place. An editor or at least a proofreader could easily improve the quality by 1 star. The other point that I didn't like about this story would be the story development. MC makes a lot of really groundless and stupid decisions. Especially in the beginning, I get that the author tried to create a desperate/bad situation for his character but since most of the problems MC has come from his own stupidity I can't and won't feel sorry for him at all. All in all I would say, the writing quality (spelling, grammar) needs a lot of work and the story development is at most so so (readable if you have nothing better to read). The rest is average. Would only recommend if you have a lot of time to kill, aren't bothered by bad spelling/grammar and don't expect anything special. Hope I could help :)
I've only read around 20 chapters so far and the grammar is messed up, I find it hard to continue reading due to this very reason...........
I like how the story is progressing so far. Updates could be faster so I can enjoy even more "..............................................
Good story lots of interesting skill combinations and upgrades ,also I suggest u combine the similar chapters to take the time to change between chapters but overall the story is awesome
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I loved this book... M.C doesn't act like a god and the villains don't just wait for M.C to beat the shit out of them ... the book is pretty realistic not like the ones where M.C just time travels and hogs all resources ... completely deserving 5 stars..
The grammatical errors give me an aneurysm. I barley managed to get past 20 chapters and I only read it because it is in my free for 24hrs slot.
Great app to play for a few minutes to get the free version for a while to get a few more features and more than the app I love the way you do to keep your brain in your mind to get a good score and the ability of the app you have a
the grammar was terrible it was hard to read but besides that it kind of just didn’t make sense to me really lost a billion dollars because someone you’ve consistently beat in the past says you’re too scared isn’t that a little ridiculous?
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Damn the book keeps getting better and better, Its just the perfect balance between different genres and the grammar and battle scenes also keep improving, The author is one my favourites. Hope for more chaps.
It is an incredibly stupid story. There is just no other words to describe it. Just plane stupid. Imbecile. From worldbuilding to main character. Senile.
This is going to be an honest review from someone who has read a fair amount of books and novels. To begin with you have a very cliche MC. Typical video game plot and leveling system which isn't necessarily a bad thing. The MC uses about 0% of his brain constantly which leads to lots of plot holes and making the readers angry with his stupid and illogical decisions. The book starts off with ok grammar if you can overlook the misuse of present and past tense as well as constant spelling errors but as it continues the grammar only gets worse. It gets so bad that almost every other sentence looks like a five year old wrote it and it honestly gives me a headache. The plot isn't that bad, its the grammar that needs to be fixed. Please hire someone to fix it.
Hey there! Here are some web novel recommendations for whom share the same taste with me. If you like this story, my recommendations are worth a try! https://docs.google.com/document/d/19R5KkqHOOHSMDkF4fHscVmxWcYGh0OntYsv8NglzsQo/edit?usp=sharing
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
Hi, This is Tynan, I am an editor from another platform that focuses on adventurous Genre Fictions. After reading your “Tales of Magic Swordsman”, I decided to contact you and if possible, to extend you an invitation on distributing your works. However, there are so little I can talk about it here. If you were interested, please contact me via geekyteddyyo@gmail.com, then I should take opportunity to discuss it with you in detail. It was a great pleasure to meet your story. Sincerely Tynan
This story has such bad grammar, that it actually gave me a headache trying to read it. It also jumps all over the place and the story setup just makes no sense.
Hi there! Do you know there is a LitRPG writing contest? You might be a competitive participant and take the chance to win up to $3,000! Please Google LUTAW_writing_contest or Supreme Me Fiction Writing Contest to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
You ever watch DBZ, where one fight spans 10 episodes? This novel is similar, it tells a decent story once you get past the irritating start, but there is just too much filler. Author needs to stop rephrasing everything and just get to the point. Cut down on the unnecessary backstory, you don’t need that much world building. Really difficult to read and get into it.
Just how pathetic your mc is he is 10 years straight strongest player and doesn't even show a mentality of being like easily angered and one more thing 10 years of experience of playing the game he doesnt even know how other class works even a normal person to have this long experience playing something will know one thing or about other things You should just abolish this book this fucking book that oozes idiocy and maybe because the author is just like one Note fucking dont read this book
I dont even know how it is possible to associate Number1 player with a no brain mc? Even as a first story, im curious to know how author brain works? And even if we say okay its possible to be that strong and stupid, he played so long and deleted it like « oh there is no more fries »... no sadness, no sleepless night, no tears, nothing... he just fell asleep like he had the best day of his life.
Very good novel ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job i hope u can edit the first few chaps... good job
He needs to take some writing lessons from a primary schooler Its so hard to read I even read machine translations some times And they make more sense then this He does get the point across and u can understand what he means but every 5th word you need to change yourself to make sense of the story Apart from that great story lots of potential
Great story and characters starts a little slow but builds up fast recommend to at least read the first couple chapters and the you'll be hooked and binge read the whole thing
The mc is a total retard. In the beginning of chapter it's said that auron can drop the item also there is no contract time that said after the duel the guild and his character must instantly be deleted. He can first calm his mine assembly the elite team that got the potion and ask them first then investigate the cold bank acc and etc and make a proof to trap vice guild and detroy her then assembly the upper echelon of the guild, it's unreasonable if in the whole guild he is the only pillar there's must be someone that he can trust and give the equipment to him and give the leadership to another one so that they can't be bribe and keep each other check then delete the character and start new. I don't hate this kind of novel but this mc is total retard ...
It is okay.[[[[[[[]]]]]]]]👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌 👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌 👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌 👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌 👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
I really like this story and the direction it is going but that being said it had a really rough start and you have to push through the first few chapters where the author forces the MC into a really bad situation where he has to dig himself out of it with the help of his best friend. I think this was workable and the story developed nicely but the biggest issue is the constant grammar errors and word choice that makes this book difficult to continue and the reason I dropped it once it went premium. If the author was able to get a proofreader or an editor i think i would pick the story up again! This is just one lousy opinion and I hope the author can keep working the best they can and continue to improve!
I tried, I really did. I don't think the story per se is that bad. It's mostly mediocre and cliche heavy. What made my rating fall under 3 stars is mostly the writing quality. The text is riddled with spelling errors and the grammar is all over the place. An editor or at least a proofreader could easily improve the quality by 1 star. The other point that I didn't like about this story would be the story development. MC makes a lot of really groundless and stupid decisions. Especially in the beginning, I get that the author tried to create a desperate/bad situation for his character but since most of the problems MC has come from his own stupidity I can't and won't feel sorry for him at all. All in all I would say, the writing quality (spelling, grammar) needs a lot of work and the story development is at most so so (readable if you have nothing better to read). The rest is average. Would only recommend if you have a lot of time to kill, aren't bothered by bad spelling/grammar and don't expect anything special. Hope I could help :)
I've only read around 20 chapters so far and the grammar is messed up, I find it hard to continue reading due to this very reason...........
I like how the story is progressing so far. Updates could be faster so I can enjoy even more "..............................................
Good story lots of interesting skill combinations and upgrades ,also I suggest u combine the similar chapters to take the time to change between chapters but overall the story is awesome
more moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore moremore more
I loved this book... M.C doesn't act like a god and the villains don't just wait for M.C to beat the shit out of them ... the book is pretty realistic not like the ones where M.C just time travels and hogs all resources ... completely deserving 5 stars..