enjoying your story so far, but it seems to be a bit too fast paced. some of the connections and progression in the story seem way too fast, especially since he has only been in the world for not even a month, yet he is drawing attention from a magical academy. how does he know about the alabaster academy and that it's knows for it's scholars? there isn't any connection between what's happened so far and where the story is. i get you're trying to add different layers into the story but it feels a bit forced.
dratini not dragonite
John observed that not only was the scyther strong, but even his new trainer was pretty good at directing in battles. Both of them soon defeated all of their opponents. Then the real game began as now it was time for the battle between Scyther and Lily's Dragonite.
Game Creator in a New World
Video Games · AncestorX
but how come he knows her? apart from the encounter in the poke centre they haven't had any interaction.
I narrowed my eyes, gauging her sincerity. But the lighthearted tone didn't fool me. There was something else she wasn't saying. I had known her for only a short time, but I could tell when she was dodging the truth.
Pokemon Rebirth: Rise of Punit[Not Continued]
Anime & Comics · Vivid_Horizons
what happened to the auction?
yeah but just remember that his previous works weren't hugely popular and spread out. people liked it but he didn't have a lot of exposure. i get what you're saying and if with the next update for stats we don't see an exponential increase in views/visits then i totally agree that his scale isn't quite right, for the first 12 hrs though that would be quite realistic for something going viral compared to a population in the quadrillions
"Mom, look at the site. My brother's page has reached 1 quadrillion views in less than 12 hours."
Creating games in the future
Others · just_a_potato_soul
Glory to the cult
didn't you just say before it was 1500 gold?
[Please confirm your purchase of the Portable Generator - Model XP500 for 500 gold coins.]
Reincarnated with a Military System in Another World
Fantasy · Faux1231
always been with him??? hasn't he had Drakor for only a few hours? or at most a day?
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Harry Potter: Drakor
Book&Literature · Vikrant_Utekar_5653
it kind of feels like Dumbledore rolled over a bit too easy tbh, the train of argument was good and all, but it just resolved itself too quickly. i think you might need to flesh out the argument between moody and Albus a bit more. it seems like you've gone the manipulating Dumbledore path, and it seemed a bit lack luster. didn't get me wrong, I'm looking the way the story it going, nice take on a HP fanfic
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original Pokemon Master of Marvel (MCU)
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A man's life is tragically cut short, but in death, he is given an incredible power. Reincarnated into the Marvel Cinematic Universe, he discovers that he has the ability to summon Pokemon. But this power is not without its consequences, and as he harnesses his newfound abilities, he must also grapple with the weight of his own mortality. With the added ability to use Aura and his emerging psychic prowess, he embarks on a dangerous journey through the perilous world of superheroes and villains, facing unimaginable challenges and making life-altering decisions along the way. Will he be able to navigate this new world and harness his powers for good, or will the darkness hiding beneath the surface consume him? Only time will tell. Join Sam in his Journey to become the Pokemon Master of Marvel.43 Chs 2.8k sưu tầm
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The New World Order (repost)
David lived an unassuming life, the normal day to day without any change. One day his whole world changed, read on to see how he learns to survive in a changing world while figuring out what's happening to him and his friends, But it is far from a simple and nothing will prepare him for what's coming. 'This is my first work so it is a work in progress, would love some feedback. I adjusted a bit after the 3rd chapter feeling a bit dialogue heavy so you will notice a change15 Chs 6 sưu tầm
how could she have heard good things about it if she is the first customer?
"I'll have a cup of that," she said with a smile. "I've heard good things about your place, even if it's just opening."
A Slow Life Coffee Tale in Another World
Fantasy · Oheb