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obiparadise_purity

The character description it's good, I love the start of this book and the introduction of Mr. Bee. The writing quality is great and hopes the writer keeps it up.

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Moonwriting

hi dear author....love Mr Bee and Officer Grey....just reading the first chapter and know it's going to be a good read.....the world background and the way you describe every minor detail is quite phenomenal... keep it up dear..

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DymenS

I'll be honest the book is quite good. I am not really into detective things but this was a good read. The introduction of Mr. bee was creative. Most importantly, I like your writing style. At least from where I am, I like the novel.

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aleksandra_pano10

Well honestly I can't say much about the story since there are only two chapters but for know I can saw this could turn into a interesting thrriller if you correct some things. First I would suggest you to do a synopsis since it helps a lot to understand better the story. Then I would say conversation between characters must be shorter since long conversation usually can be boring. Writing style is unique because usually I see that authors prefer more (") and I like this thing. For updating I would suggest one chapter once per week Good luck with your novel

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Excelsior_x

Mr Bee is something else. I have to say, I haven't bought up with the story yet but the chapters I read hooked me. It is hilarious and I would recommend this book to anyone who loves detective stories. The only minor issue I had was the first few chapters where the paragraphs were too long but it was fixed later on. Love the story and will keep reading it and make a later review.

This is an excellent book and beautifully written, definitely the best book I've read (although admittedly that isn't a large selection.) But also just plain one of the best books I've read.

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Washee_Washee

It's an interesting read with a more philosophical and introspective theme to it. Reading the interactions of Mr.Bee and the Officer Gray and experiencing 1st hand their ideals and perspectives on society was something I did enjoy. Criticism wise, I would have to say that some of the dialogue is too clunky and dense, making it hard to follow at times. Other than main issue, there really isn't much else to say. Conclusion: it's a good read if you are tired of xianxia, cultivation,system, and other genres or want to experience something new.

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sm_yesa

The character and the story, I like it and seems to be improving, I only read a few chapters but I would want to read more , over all it was impressive though I'm not fond of third POV

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Natay93

This is a well written novel and I like how you have it formatted. You went into great detail and the background was outlined perfectly. I loved how the characters who lived a hard life all came together as one family and started helping others. This is a great book. Keep up the good work.

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Account_nolonger

The story is about reality, the characters are amazing and the plot is intriguing since it showcases society, good work, keep it up 👍👍👍👍👍💕💕💕

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KayLillyt_1

A nice plot. The author is doing a good job with this. The first two chapters are much longer than expected but a good story out weighs a long chapter.

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IppikiOokami07

Very interesting story. I particularly like your characters and their development. It is also very creative of you to describe your characters' emotions in the way that you have. Looking forward to further updates!

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CallieLy

The writing style of this novel is quite refreshing. It reminds me of a screenplay format. I'm quite intrigued by the events in the story, and I'm left with questions that make me look forward to how the plot will unfold. One of the things that distracted me a little from the story was the overuse of commas in dialogues. There were times when I had to re-read certain parts to appreciate the scenes properly. I like stories that reflect aspects of reality that people tend to ignore or forget. They always leave a lasting impression on a reader. I think this story has the potential to achieve that. Keep writing!

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Lu_Shui

This story is realistically written. For those who don't like random fantasy scenario but down-to-earth novels, this one is for you. I like how it represents how the current circumstance is and how the characters deal with what the society has to offer. Very good work, Author!

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soja_soja

you know this is like really deep. It makes you wonder and appreciate what you have that others don't. I like the way you author went deep down into it. I do have something I'd like to say😅 like how the paragraphs are too long and the way you use your punctuation marks. you should like cut the paragraphs just right so you wouldn't like bore the readers and they be like it's too long, when is it gonna end. You know. But this is just for the chp 1-2, 3-4 was amazing too

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Twitchy_

I like the style. I honestly feel like it's underrated, and quite the story can be told by the way you write. I do have some suggestions, but I won't mark down my review at all because it's good otherwise. When you're typing, put spaces between commas and use parentheses more often, maybe even put lines between some dialogue to better split up the paragraphs you write. Your story itself is just fine, but the grammar could use some slight adjustments. Other than that, nice work! It's very good.

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Rin_Nurnia

The first thing I want to point out is that I suggest you to reduce the use of punctuation because it felt like I had to stop for a second everytime there's a coma. Secondly, try to break down the long paragraphs. I guess, that one paragraph was focusing on the character's dialogue but it's too long so I suggest again, you can try separate it like adding some action before or after the dialogues

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Sweet_SourKiwi

So far I just found too much punctuation, but the story has potential, just keep it updates regularly and you'll get the result, keep it up thor^^

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Megan_Immanuella

The book is cool generally.but I would suggest you added a synopsis to really grasp the story better.The plot is on point and the name of the book is great.Good work[img=update]