Reborn as a Chaos God of Carnage

LV 4

Linus279

The fanfiction has a promising and interesting idea that has the potential to become a great story. Unfortunately, the reading experience is hindered by the poor writing style and bad grammar. There are many spelling and grammar errors that can cause difficulties for readers, and the plot is confusing due to unnecessarily complex sentences and unclear phrasing. We would recommend the author to take more time to express their ideas more clearly and precisely, and to conduct a thorough revision to improve the readability and enjoyment of the story. Despite the weaknesses of the writing style, the story is promising and has the potential to become a masterpiece if carefully revised.

LV 2

Arion_Sturmklinge

Really good novel, keep it up

LV 4

THE_BLACK_ONE

I hadn't really known about 40k until now so I got to read a good book and search more about 40k

LV 1

BadAuthor

Honestly a really good read so far and as there are not many chapters as of yet cant really give a full review, but if you like 40K chances are you will like this!

LV 4

lntrusiveThoughts

The author, unfortunately, has never typed a single ” . “ in their life. They focus a lot on the visual aspect of their story and none of those pesky things like characters or dialogue. The character that speaks the most is probably the system… I am not caught up with the story so I don’t know if these things improve but it is kinda a slog here towards the beginning

LV 12

Malthaael

good idea for the story , but its hard to read with the poor quality of writing

LV 1

_DEKIM_

too bad. the protagonist is a slave to the system💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩

LV 4

CONNER_Jackson

really good more please not a lot of warhammer 40k on this app :(

LV 14

UnKnownEntity001

This fic really needs some good editing.

LV 1

Warhammer100k

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LV 1

LoveHarem1

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LV 1

Warhammer100k

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LV 4

Ayden12g

The story while well written is more about lemons than it is about 40k. Every chapter along with confusing perspective shifts feels like it's working up for 18+ content and not progressing with being a warp god. Also it is very similar to another story written by 'dez_burns', suspiciously similar.

LV 4

Overlord_Bloodfall

I've been improving the best I can, with only me writing n English being in reality my "second" language, I hope u all enjoy n keep supporting the fiction as I update it. [img=recommend][img=recommend]

LV 4

Darknorthhhh

I love this novel I started it a little skeptical cause it's a chaos 40k fanfiction so I thought it was gonna be like a novel some W40k fanfic authors write but it is surprisingly good the writing is really good the character is great and the interactions with the other gods are awesome I love the way your doing the world traveling it's there but it's not a main thing yet cause slanesh is not born yet I can't wait for that I know you said that they are gonna bring hashutt to their side but I wonder is slanesh gonna be larhal's enemy cause of her divinitys or is one of the other chaos gods from fantasy gonna be his enemy i personally would love to see larhal treat slanesh as the little sister he spoils cause they just about share divinitys that would be cool please do that

LV 1

Abyssal_Vormunne

The Story is Amazing and the Alternate Timeline of the Story is Progressing, The update on the Chapters needs to be improved a bit, can't wait for the part where Tzeentch, will join his brother to the Old World, and more reactions of every force's faction in the Old World, when they find out about the 4th Brother, which will be the champion of Tzeentch

LV 2

Matthew_Mayberry

Great story. Love it. Please keep updating

LV 3

EchoingDusk

Burn the Heretic! Kill the Mutant! Purge the Unclean!

Did you drop this ? When the next chapter💙

LV 4

Microraptor

I like it, though it could work with some revision, however this dude need to use some serious punctuation, we get a paragraph with no full stops, and a few commas.