An ton's Journey ( StarCraft + other worlds)

LV 11

shiro_43

this mc has got no sense of tactics or resource management. He is dumb like no other way around it and it hurts. the numbers floating around are just pointless think DBZ power levels. Going in person to talk with survivors from a crashed ship. Good way of getting shot by someone who's alittle twitchy. if you want to commit suicide there are easier and faster ways then this. its hard to root for this mc when he makes dumb decisions one after another.

LV 12

koolsalad

It’s... mediocre. The numbers in the story really have no meaning “100,000 for this upgrade 1 million for the next one” “I chop 100,000 trees on an island lol” Depends how big the island is but some don’t even have that? Oh no little centipedes are coming from the ground... i should run now... Even though you had a cannon with a range of like 100km i think u said that was killing any predator that got close?? Even the battle scene where the dude got kidnapped was a bit ****ty and without any detail... And a Protoss ship going into the system? No contact from the system at all? Just dock at a station like normal? :L Again, a bit ****.

LV 14

PurpleSpring

overall good story... Only annoying thing about the story is mc constantly making stupid mistakes, says he made a stupid mistake and won't do it again.... 3 - 6 chapters late he makes a stupid mistake rinse and repeat ... This is so far the only way that trouble happens for the mc in the story so far... Him being dumb... Got a little too annoying for me, so im droping for now, might return later tho :d

LV 14

Gearhawk

Good things come in small-ish packages. Keep up the good work friend Muravey! Story so far looks amazing! En Taro Tassadar! And may Adun hide you!!!

LV 5

RionSteiner

At first It was exciting to read this fic coz it was Starcraft in Starwars verse but as the fic goes on, for me its hard to understand and became convoluted at some point. I first thought like Starcraft game, build base, produce units, gather materials, buy heroes and again and again until he has enough manpower, that how I think he became powerhouse in Star Wars and build his own Empire or planet something typical kingdom building. But its not, author make it more realistic with little game mechanic on it. That's turn me off a little bit. I know its good to be careful but author make protoss careful at some point they look weak on some reader standpoint in order to hide they so called technologies and manpower to the point they were harass by other forces in galaxy and they do nothing and ignore just them. No showing a little power there so that they establish themselves as race that you can't mess around with. Sucks tho good thing author tells that MC has no skills in playing the war. It feels like the MC only there to summon the units and heroes in Starcraft to Starwars and let them be. Feels like he has no real power there and he only respect or follow by heroes because he summoned them and that's what their mind says like protocol other than that feels like MC before reincarnated didn't play Starcraft and only watching in sideline while someone playing Starcraft on some Internet cafe. And then comes down the latest chapter when he became Zerg, the Star Wars and Protoss arc didn't finish yet then MC became Zero in the process out of nowhere. Story development sucks to me especially I played Starcraft since launch. Well its my opinion anyway and heads up on future readers what to expect and what's inside this fanfic, goodluck anyway. This constructive criticism if authors weak minded will be deleted so does the rating I put on this fic cause that what it feels like it when I read this fic until latest chapter. What a letdown.

LV 2

Explorer_Avalon

writting quality? while there are mistakes they are negligeable. Stability of updates? author loves editing every chapter which resets reading progress in library and makes it hard to acccess the fic because of said editing. clearly author has no concept of a google documents. Story development? for the first 40 chaps it was average after it just straight descend. the story with potential turned bland and uniteresting. you could skip 200 words or couple of chaps and still would have clear idea what's happening. Character design? At first realistic later pessimistic cretin. World background? a lot of stealing from other works so propably author didn't find the need for better story background.

LV 14

Aeternabilis

I will admit I do not know much about starcraft however I have found the concept of the story interesting. The thing is I hate the mc's personality... he is way to stupid, he is lazy af and whines way too much. I get that the author is doing this to build up the mc's personality? The main problem for me when reading this and is what is making me drop is how the mc doesn't upgrade himself. He has over 1mil in materials and doesnt upgrade himself? Like wtf... he upgraded himself to the max he could go at level 0.... he even did this at the start when he had a small number of materials. Now he has tons he has forgotten all about himself? Then he sees ships falling out of the sky and goes towards them? Is he asking to fcking die? He also just survived an atk from them insects... you would think he would learn no? I find this rly hard to read as I cannot comprehend the stupidity. Maybe I am missing something on why he cannot upgrade himself?

LV 1

Ice_giant_Ymir

the beginning was fine, not the greatest not the worst. but as the story wen't on it progressively got worse in quality. after he got betrayed by the protos the story lose pretty much everything good about it. in the Harry potters world it felt like a wish fulfilment novel. and sufferd from what all world jump travel novels suffer from and got convoluted and hard to keep track of.

LV 14

GammaDude1721

Really well done also is the universe you are in Star Wars?

LV 13

Prince_Kong

Finally there's a StarCraft fan-fic. And it's pretty good.. i hope the updates Will be fast and more often. Keep the spirit..😊😊😊😊😊😊👍👍👍👍👍👍

LV 13

Nimav

Time for a more recent review: It's very good in some aspects, ignoring spelling and some grammar, it's quite good as a narrative and plausible given that you are a neutral reader regarding some aspects which I will cover next. The MC is difficult, his decisionmaking skills are iffy and his memory is very short even outside of situations where these aspects are logically impaired to some extent. It can only be explained as him simply having a lower than average IQ. Not a criticism per se, but rather a warning for any new readers trying to get into this, as this type of MC is not for everyone. Non-tag warning: it becomes a partial gender-bender later on but the author threw some explanations and excuses in the comments about it being more of a joke. It's ongoing over a lot of chapters until it actually turns into a full-on biological conversion as detected by in-world forces at one point, so excuses that it's a joke, he's forced by external factors and it's not real conversion as long as the MC 'prefers' male no longer hold water for not properly tagging it. It seems more like the author is simply too deep in the closet to take pride and admit his cross-gender affinities, at least with a proper tag or mention in the work's description. I'm not a fan of gender-benders, but I still watched Ranma 1/2 way back because there was proper comedy about it. I even read a Ranma x SW fanfic which was very entertaining. In the case of this fic it feels more like shaming the genre by trying to be clandestine or defensive about it.

LV 5

LemonZawodowiec

What if WinterSC had seen this fanfic: MC is a mighty Probius? He cannon rushes enemies throughout multiverse? Where do i sign? --- And.a joke: A marine walks into a bar. Marine: "Where is the counter?" Barkeeper: "Outside in a storm"

LV 4

Immortal_ninja_543

Story started of okay Then we were greeted with Garbage mc Bla blablabbla blah blah blah blah blah blah Cliche Yadadadadadadadada Pretty meh So yeah

LV 14

Deadpoolthefirstki

the main character is no longer the starcraft that I originally came for its no longer starcraft and basiclly starcraft is no longer a thing in the story and the rts that I was there for and I really liked it to but now it'd not really a thing and another system would be nlce...

LV 14

Vynris_Foxtail

For turn into fir and nice is turn into noice...other then that is fine so far...at least to where im at... ................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

LV 5

FilipposKoum

well you have a starcraft character in star wars universe. I like you novel up to this point so go with it, relax your mind and put what you love your novel to have in it. Those two universes have infinity possibility's. Take you time friend and plz dont drop it like you say many novel that were droped. Thank you.

LV 12

stads

Thx for the story like reading love the idea of being early in the star wars univetse

LV 5

FilipposKoum

Well the sky is your limit. So write all you like anything and everything. Like the start of your novel whit the MC experimenting with all hes options continue like so. Relax your mind friend. I like your novel and thank you for giving it to us.

LV 14

TheGermanelder

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LV 1

DeadHawk

I tried going past chapter 44 and made it to 47 but I just couldn't keep reading it. It got to be so boring and really weird. I would say it's worth checking out since it's not that bad though. The story development kinda falls off after a bit though. The MC is about the dumbest person possible who acts like he can do anything with no consequences so it's literally unbearable to read anymore.