Not sure...
I see your point… but at the same time you have to remember shes a transcendent lifeform so…
Silas nodded, and with a slow, careful movement, he guided himself to her entrance. Their gazes remained locked as he slowly pushed forward, her body welcoming him with warmth and tenderness. Thea let out a quiet gasp, her hands gripping his arms as he slid deeper inside, filling her completely.
Fantasy · TheDanza
He didn't change a ton. It was more like he just aged a couple of years
"Greetings, young master!" "Welcome back, young master!" People who crossed his path constantly bowed down to him. Silas had always been the young master of the North Prefecture since he was in the running to be the Lord Prefect, but now, even after giving up his chance to be Lord Prefect, he was even more famous. At 16 years old, he went to the Battle of the Region and became the reigning king.
Fantasy · TheDanza
They dont look just alike more like brothers... I'll go back and edit it... and thanks for all the comments :)
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I know, and I think it does get better in the near future, but it's hard to judge my own writing so Idk...
[A/n: Idk if it was easy to pick up or not, but I'll quickly explain; "Bang!" essentially means their attacks met like sword vs sword, and "Shing!" means an attack landed and someone took damage :)]
Fantasy · TheDanza
The Grim Reaper King has no standard form... and he was scrawny in his past life, but not this one.
Soon though, he walked past a small stream that cut through the village, and a young girl with silvery white hair and a young boy with brown hair, both around his age, quickly caught his attention. The girl, with her silvery white hair, looked very similar to his Lilian, while the boy, with his brown hair and scrawny build, resembled him from his past life.
Fantasy · TheDanza
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It gets better... in the beginning, to me, there isn't much else to describe them, just swinging their swords with no extra powers...
thanks
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Fantasy · TheDanza
I have two accounts, so I rarely use the author one
Reincarnated With A Divine Bloodline System
Fantasy · TheDanza