hypertonic lion tamer
Hell no I don't, they go so much in the HTC on Super that I would prefer to sleep a whole year!
A Saiyan Owl
Anime & Comics · ReyKale
"R-right!" Yamato agreed hesitantly. It wasn't the honorable thing to do, but Oden had also been a pirate, hadn't he?
One Piece: Dream of Immortality
Anime & Comics · ScarletArboretum
Jesus, Anthony.
How the heck did you do it, Derrick? Could you smell the margarine sandwich?! It's not possible! Even if you did smell it, you would have thought it was a butter sandwich!
Chrysalis
Fantasy · RinoZ
just Econimant
If there is a type of warfare that suits the Colony's talents better than a defensive siege, I don't know what it is. Our capacity to build, fortify and repair is exceptional, and we can pack far more numbers into far smaller areas than most species.
Chrysalis
Fantasy · RinoZ
by gawd, incomplete sentences are just everywhere my guy...
After making sure everyone else in the building was good and surely dead.
I Am Doom (Marvel)
Anime & Comics · ArifuretaForever
made*
Her words making my jaw hit the floor.
I Am Doom (Marvel)
Anime & Comics · ArifuretaForever
you split a lot of sentences into stuff that doesn't flow on its own as sentences
Who took me under her wing as her personal apprentice the moment she named me a master.
I Am Doom (Marvel)
Anime & Comics · ArifuretaForever
the first part of this sentence doesn't really flow. something like "A small look of shock flashed on his face, which..." would sound much smoother
Drumm getting a small look of shock of on his face, which he quickly covered.
I Am Doom (Marvel)
Anime & Comics · ArifuretaForever
this doesn't stand as a sentence on its own. if you used a comma on the previous line and had this, it would make sense, or you could simply swap "bringing" to "bring"
Her words bringing a smile to my face.
I Am Doom (Marvel)
Anime & Comics · ArifuretaForever
ooh, that's kinda weird formatiing... I woulda said Beginner-High... but at this point I doubt you care too much to revamp it all.
●" Ki control "( Low-High)[Mastery 29%](Passive): Control the energies of the surroundings, and now control your own powers.
A Saiyan Owl
Anime & Comics · ReyKale