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Xiachonen
LV 4"Nanomachines, son. They harden in response to physical trauma." - Senator Armstrong
2021-10-18 Joined United StatesBadges 4
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I'm pretty confused on why you'd want to delete this story, but it's none of my business.
Of course, if someone know how to delete an existing story on Webnovel, that would be great. Save me the trouble from having to delete each chapter one by one.
The Irregular Maker Rewrite
Anime & Comics · ImBoredSoMehl
Probably his mom from when he was a vampire.
In the back of my head, I knew one name that would have been an equally delightful name to hear, if not indeed better.
Eternal Saṃsāra: The Wanderer of Worlds
Anime & Comics · Master4thWall
Which would go against your argument of being indifferent to everything when you have enough power. But at this point, we're just grasping at straws, so I'll take the initiative to end it here.
But it doesn't really matter since I can just revive everyone again... I have to accept it. I don't know why I'm turning it away. My perspective was going to change one way or another. I'm already starting to see people as nothing more than things I can play with play with if I deem fit. And that's something I will have to accept the stronger I grow.'
The Eminence of a True Monarch of the Shadows
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
Power doesn't make you more indifferent or more kind. It just brings out who you are; when you're above the consequences, of your actions, in this case due to having power, then what's stopping you from showing who you really are? Whether that be through kindness, or indifference.
But it doesn't really matter since I can just revive everyone again... I have to accept it. I don't know why I'm turning it away. My perspective was going to change one way or another. I'm already starting to see people as nothing more than things I can play with play with if I deem fit. And that's something I will have to accept the stronger I grow.'
The Eminence of a True Monarch of the Shadows
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
Chances are she let herself get captured. It'd be a lot harder to find someone you're looking for, when you've just wiped out an entire pantheon worth of Gods.
The Great Goddess of Pangeal, Goddess of Void and Creation, Galaxara Voidborne was here to fetch her long-lost Hero.
Eternal Saṃsāra: The Wanderer of Worlds
Anime & Comics · Master4thWall
Yeah. AI is a crutch that only hurts you in the long run. It's best to make mistakes early on to improve, rather than have to make those same mistakes later on, when expectations are higher.
Gamma's knowing smile, coupled with her poised stance, suggested a shared understanding between her and Cid, a mutual recognition of the significance of the throne and the ceremonial proceedings. Her demeanor conveyed both respect for tradition and a subtle acknowledgment of the role she played in this orchestrated display, evoking an air of mystery and anticipation for what was to come.
The Eminence of a True Monarch of the Shadows
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
I'm gonna be completely honest, it feels like AI was used to write this chapter. There's such a major difference in the vocabulary, grammar, dialogue, etc. from the previous chapters.
Releasing a fraction of his Conquerors Haki, Cid then turned towards the spectators. "Leave," he commanded, his voice carrying an authoritative weight that instilled fear, prompting them to swiftly depart. Cid's presence wielded an authority akin to a divine mandate, compelling obedience from all who heard him.
The Eminence of a True Monarch of the Shadows
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
Alpha looked at the bulge in amusement, she then started to press down on it pushing all the cum out of her.
The Eminence of a True Monarch of the Shadows
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
Okay.
The two exchanged silent glances for a long time before, almost simultaneously, breaking into a profound and understanding smile.
Looking Forward to Another World
Anime & Comics · VALRRR
He did. Like three paragraphs ago.
The two exchanged silent glances for a long time before, almost simultaneously, breaking into a profound and understanding smile.
Looking Forward to Another World
Anime & Comics · VALRRR
I'm gonna be completely honest. This story fell off badly. It had such a good pace in the beginning and actually kept me intrigued, but then the plot just started going off the rails. It started speeding up to such a degree that there weren't even full-on arcs, rather just summaries of what happened. Especially this ending, at first I legit just thought this was the future Micah's timeline, not the fucking end of the story. You really have to start working on making actual endings for your story. An ending is not just a summary of what happened after the main events. It should be impactful and wrap up loose ends. Overall, I'd give story a 5.5/10. Do better.
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DC: System Shock (COMPLETED)
Anime & Comics · Wicked132
Just want to add onto my point, but divine dividing requires the user to physically touch the thing they want to divide in half. Boosted gear has no such weakness, quite literally allowing the user to just speed blitz the divine dividing user. It's a high risk high reward sort of thing for divine dividing users, which is why it doesn't need a nerf.
A/N: I have changed how the Boosted Gear works because really, it never worked the way it said it did. If it did go like 2x 4x 8x 16x... Issei would have split the entire Underworld in half with a single punch. And if it went 2x 3x 4x... Issei would not have been strong enough. I will just chalk this up to the sacred gear system being buggy(Ishibumi forgot). How Boosted Gear or anything works really is not properly explained so I am going off of my own interpretation, if you have problems with it call it an AU or whatever. Also, Ddraig can only speak when the Boosted Gear is active.
Highschool DxD: Dragon's Ascent
Anime & Comics · Bronz_Deck
Sure, you make a valid point. But look at it this way: With boosted gear pre nerf, you could quite literally become God with a capital G. It was quite literally just a matter of boosting enough times. Let's say you have a stat point of 10 in all stats. That's the average stat point. Now let's say that gods, dragons, etc. Are all in the millions range. It only takes you 17 boosts to reach the level of those beings while being a completely average human. If you want to read a power fantasy story where the main character gets an omnipotent cheat without flaws, you came to the wrong place. Hae a good one.
A/N: I have changed how the Boosted Gear works because really, it never worked the way it said it did. If it did go like 2x 4x 8x 16x... Issei would have split the entire Underworld in half with a single punch. And if it went 2x 3x 4x... Issei would not have been strong enough. I will just chalk this up to the sacred gear system being buggy(Ishibumi forgot). How Boosted Gear or anything works really is not properly explained so I am going off of my own interpretation, if you have problems with it call it an AU or whatever. Also, Ddraig can only speak when the Boosted Gear is active.
Highschool DxD: Dragon's Ascent
Anime & Comics · Bronz_Deck
There's a massive difference between dividing something in half and the 2x boost being multiplicative. Dividing something in half is not nearly as impressive as the 2x boost being multiplicative and, as such, wouldn't need a massive nerf.
A/N: I have changed how the Boosted Gear works because really, it never worked the way it said it did. If it did go like 2x 4x 8x 16x... Issei would have split the entire Underworld in half with a single punch. And if it went 2x 3x 4x... Issei would not have been strong enough. I will just chalk this up to the sacred gear system being buggy(Ishibumi forgot). How Boosted Gear or anything works really is not properly explained so I am going off of my own interpretation, if you have problems with it call it an AU or whatever. Also, Ddraig can only speak when the Boosted Gear is active.
Highschool DxD: Dragon's Ascent
Anime & Comics · Bronz_Deck
Alright, science lesson over, I know no one cares about how you create lightning in the palm of your hands, they care about the fact that you created lightning in your hands.
Highschool DxD: Dragon's Ascent
Anime & Comics · Bronz_Deck
But as much as I wanted to throw in the towel and chalk it up as a loss, I knew I couldn't. After all, I'd already blown through 2000 points on this gamble.
DC: System Shock (COMPLETED)
Anime & Comics · Wicked132
By conflicts, I meant the reader being able to predict/figure out what's gonna happen next in general using what happened in the current and previous chapters. I just chose conflict since thats likely whats gonna happen next chapter.
What he didn't remember was that the Uzumaki were great sensor ninja, so even though he was only gone for a short time, they still noticed this and were shocked!
MARVEL: GAME MAKER SYSTEM
Movies · NunuXD
Honestly, if you want to create any actual conflicts, minor or major, then you have to stop putting these little bits of text saying how others reacted. The story is largely following Alex, not the rest of the world. So when you just out of nowhere say, "So and so was shocked by what he did", then you get rid of nearly any room for the reader to think to themself what may happen next, because you're just spoon feeding it to them.
What he didn't remember was that the Uzumaki were great sensor ninja, so even though he was only gone for a short time, they still noticed this and were shocked!
MARVEL: GAME MAKER SYSTEM
Movies · NunuXD
What's up with these massive separations between the paragraphs? I can safely say that most people aren't reading for the length of the chapters, they're reading to find out what happens next in Tom's journey.
"I know and like I said before, if I die then that's where my journey ends." I said with a short pause as I continued. "And I got a visit from the vigilante calling himself the Red Hood the night after my proclamation." I added, spicing up out little conversation as we continued.
VECTOR IN DC
Anime & Comics · Maverick_DaSupreme