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1 months ago
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thanks for the chapters

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3 months ago
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thanks for the chapter

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3 months ago
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Thanks for the chapter. BTW I think it would be beneficial for the protagonist if he learned 'cold reading'(basically analysing of the body langugage,posture,speech and aura of a person and through that he could get a rough idea of the person's life. Also the protag should keep on learning languages.

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4 months ago
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Thanks for the chapter. Also I like where this story is going,you should just stay consistent with the character description .Make poseidon act and speak more like a wise men. For future powers you could use the ki application from dragonball or go full ultra instinct mastered. Maybe even let him use his pools of inspiration to learn how to control the life force from grand zeno to control the multiverse. Naturally that should only be adapted in the later chapters,otherwise it would be too broken. Also you make him look into characters like 'rick sanchez' or 'reed richards' so that he can travel trhough the multiverse. Also in the later parts of the greek mythology (time of heroes,argonauts etc) the gods dont really interact much so you could make a huge time skips,so that we get to the dc og time line.

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Dimi_0068
5 months ago
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In the next chapter you could make it so that poseidon gifts pandora the characteristic "paranoia". This would counteract her curiosity that makes her open the box in the first place and in turn destroys zeus' plan

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Dimi_0068
6 months ago
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I like the story so far, also I wanted to mention that her name is not "gilen", it is "ghislaine". Don't know whether you knew about it before or you are just too lazy to write her whole name

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Dimi_0068
6 months ago
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Thanks for the chapter! By the way I wanted to ask whether you plan to give wolverine a dose of compound V too. Because I don't think he could win against homelander. The superpower that he would gain could just be an extra bit of super strength.

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Dimi_0068
6 months ago
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To be honest there are a lot of great detectives you could choose from,for example: columbo monk hannibal benoit blanc richard castle or hercule poirot

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Dimi_0068
7 months ago
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T'was a nice read and I will wait for more to come. The only little tidbit I would have had is the grammar,but I can still enjoy it so it's not that bad

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