Mystery3

you got your foundations nice good. Do agree that is repetitive fighting. But realistic in this type of world. But it needs more depth. I know this dark world, but this is brutal and depressing. That's why i'm probably most left. Don't change it is good it's different, but it needs a fool or some kind of tension breaker for the setting. Of course, they need to be powerful, so don't just die off.

Well then, this is something else. Don't see this often as a main character type. A villain type interested to see how this goes. It's different from most novels on this site. It's very grounded, and I don't see any red flags yet. But hopefully, the time reversal is explained.

I will do

When you get to this point of the novel. You how much the author bias bleeds into the writing. Like some the main character actions so out of place. When you add her own believes into a writing. It's gets less interesting and turn way some readers.

This been great novel I read this from start to here. My only gripe is that dragons are angry I find it funny and odd. This little gripe the power system little complicated.

Well I put in three sets and call them rank I going put two things one for best other for human 1. common or rookie 2. Uncommon or worker 3. Rare or knight 4. Very rare or Noble 5. Legend or king or queen ------------------------------------------- 6. Artifact or Conqueror 7. Old or Lord 8. Disaster or Unhuman 9. Toxic or Best 10. Unreal or Heavenly -------------------------------------- 11. EarthBound or Angel 12. immortal or Ark Angel 13. Unbound or Seraph 14. Pure Blood or Holy Angel 15. Eclipsed or Divine I'm not great at naming as well but human side doesn't seem bad the monster side I'm not too sure.

I don't know what's best to help but a idea you join the year writing contest. Your writing few unique ones I know of. As a author my self tho I mostly like reading I write for fun. Thx for a chapter and don't let reality hold you down.

Not my best work very hard read lol