is not at
**One but powerful. Estimated age is at 3**
Fantasy · Saviour_Ibok_4011
I love the "place to love the unloved" part.
They were mirrors to a world that only celestial beings transcended through; a place to love the unloved. Past the beating of hearts and into the Garden of Eden.
Fantasy · PrugnaKerai
I love the hook, super intriguingg
ch 0 1 Starts With A Tragedy
Action · Faysal_Ahmed_5058
Use smth else instead of perk, it doesn't go well with the scenario you're creating
Her ears perked up at the slow approaching footsteps. Turning around, a gasp escaped her lips when she saw a shadow before her. Those pair of black eyes staring into her soul making her fret. Panicking, She grabbed onto the handle as she turned around and entered the room, closing the door behind her shut. Her breathing stopped when her eyes fell on the room.
Fantasy · _Rain
It would sound better if you say her footsteps echoed in the darkness
In the darkness, her footsteps echoed as she desperately searched a way out of this hell. Skyla cried silently as she ran aimlessly in the darkness. Her feet stopped when she faced a black door, making her gulp in fear.
Fantasy · _Rain
Break down the sentence, it is a runoff.
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Fantasy · Venusean
Removing has would be better
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Fantasy · Venusean
Ahaha love that
Alex, by that logic, was therefore cheap and empty junk.
Fantasy · Venusean
I am confused. Is he already into corporate lifestyle or not?
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Fantasy · Venusean
✨The story of my life ✨
To be good at everything, yet great at nothing, that was the fate Alex had 'endured' all his life
Fantasy · Venusean
The Vivian and Allery part is confusing. I would suggest clearing this scene out more.
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LGBT+ · SEP1A
Thank you for your feedback!
lied down on her bed and buried
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History · modestbaddie
take the comma off
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History · modestbaddie
Hey, I read the first chapter and I must say, you have done an incredible job setting up the plot. The idea is quite intriguing and I'm going to continue reading it. Well done. Keep writing!
Haklaran Hunter
Fantasy · Saviour_Ibok_4011