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2020-11-20 Joined Global
Thank you very much for your feedback. I'll see to it and change it immediately :)
He feels the suffocation due to the huge amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. Suddenly thrown into confusion, his mind was in a constant state of panic. His eyes were blurry as his eyes were teary due to the pain he was feeling. He saw his left hand bloodied as he touched the side of his head when he was thrown outside through the windscreen of the car due to the force of the collision. Pieces of glass shards was everywhere as he looked around in fear and agony.
Fantasy · GrotesqueIce
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My, this is so lovely.
ch 0 2 The Promise
Urban · Hope_Smith_1896
Yes. It has come to my attention that I need to put spaces for it not to appear text heavy for mobile users. Rest assured that I have formatted future episodes. Previous episodes will be reformatted soon. I apologize fpr the inconvenience. Thank you very much for taking an intererest to my story. I will be sure to incorporate that element in the future.
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Fantasy · GrotesqueIce
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Thanks for this! Will edit.
She has let down her life in order to save his own son and that was what he cannot seem to comprehend. It was the purest form of love; to sacrifice oneself for the sake of the others. But for him he thought it was... stupid.
Fantasy · GrotesqueIce
Maybe you can change the last sentence to: "No one ever wanted a broken little child in their lives... unless they would like to break it more." So it sounds better? Just a suggestion :)
If they had known about my past they would never have brought me to their house, to their family. No one wanted a broken little child in their lives until....they want to broke them more.
Teen · Nightsummer20
I did not expect this quote to pop up but I have to admit that made me feel good and wholesome.
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Teen · Nightsummer20
Oh my... This cheered me up. Thank you for your nice comment. I'll definitely update soon! There's just something going on right now.. Hopefully it'll be solved soon. Thank you! :)
Apotheosis.
Fantasy · GrotesqueIce