daniel really wants to be a zoomer at this point LOVEEE THE SPEED OF THE NOVEL ATM
Daniel's brow furrowed in concentration, his mind racing to recall the location of his vehicle amidst the chaos.
Fantasy · Sinadin_2ndth
this book offers a raw and heartfelt glimpse into Jasper's challenging life. The story delves into his unrequited feelings for Bethany, his struggles to make ends meet through menial jobs, and his determination to provide a better life for his mother. Jasper's fear of rejection is palpable as he places a love letter for Bethany, and his inner turmoil reveals the complexities of his emotions. The narrative skillfully blends moments of vulnerability with the harsh realities he faces, painting a compelling picture of his life's uphill battle. Despite his setbacks, Jasper's drive and determination to rise above his circumstances shine through, making him a relatable and sympathetic character. The story's emotional depth and the protagonist's resilience make it a promising tale of personal growth and overcoming adversity.
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both bethany and jasper have a v similar talking style ummmm its one flaw the author could work upon
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SPLENDID QUALITY!! however i dont think any alterations would help your story you have a different narrative form and its unique, use it best for ur story and i bet people will settle with it, it suits.
ch 0 3 An Unfortunate First Impression
Fantasy · The_Open_Sky
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Fantasy · The_Open_Sky
Alex hang up the phone and made his way to his study and skimmed over some documents. Tick Tick... Time is passing very fast.
Urban · MaeHestia
the usage of imagery is great
After Rihanna came to her senses only she found the eerie surrounding feeling, in that cold cemetery and the dark surrounding and those troubling cries of birds and unknown animals.
Urban · MaeHestia
this is so tragic. my heart :( but definitely a gripping beginning
ch 0 1 A Tragic Descent
War · TsukasaFrier
love the sensory joyride here!!!
The man was holding her too close to his body, and that same fragrance sipped into her senses. Tonight, the fragrance was deeper and more prominent on his body. As if he'd just walked right out of the closet.
Urban · Husniya_S
The author delves into the world of opulence, power, and an unexpected romantic connection between two contrasting individuals. Alex Grande, the cold-hearted billionaire, exudes an aura of authority and control, while Jenny Core, a seemingly ordinary girl, becomes entwined with his life in a way that defies logic. The premise sets the stage for an intriguing encounter between two vastly different worlds. Alex's dominance and ability to command attention offer a glimpse into a life of extravagance and influence, while Jenny's normalcy highlights relatable human qualities. However, while the plot introduces an interesting dynamic, the execution falls somewhat flat. The characters lack depth beyond their surface traits, and their motivations and emotions remain largely unexplored. The initial spark between Alex and Jenny feels rushed and lacks the development needed to make their connection believable. The alternating perspectives give insight into both characters' thoughts, but the writing style struggles to capture the depth of their experiences. The repetitive use of phrases like "cold heartless billionaire" and "ordinary girl" detracts from the storytelling, making it difficult for readers to become fully immersed in the narrative. "Love Unveiled: Billionaire's Heart" shows promise in its exploration of the collision between privilege and simplicity, but it needs further development to truly engage readers. By delving deeper into the characters' backgrounds, motivations, and emotions, the story could transform into a more compelling tale of unexpected romance and personal growth.I like your novel but it could use some serious proof reading and work, know that this like all other works is a WIP and I know there's scope to improve. thank you. i hope you will read this with an open heart.
Love's Unexpected Fortune: Billionaire Meets Ordinary Girl."
Urban · Ogu_blessing_Ojima