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I don't know how to review it properly. just read more novels and use them as a template in case for dialogues or wishes or the section with rob, or canon characters' personality Do a research about ur favourite novels and compare them to ur ideas or writing

Please use ChatGPT and personally edit it; For example here without any personal edit {Two years later} In a softly lit room, a boy lay on his bed, ready to drift into sleep. As he reminisced about the past two years, he reflected on the unique combat classes he had been taking at his private residence. Surprisingly, the lessons were led by a grade one sorcerer from the Ze'nin family, Maki. Mai and Emma also assisted in his training, bringing them closer. The initial month involved studying various weapons and fighting styles from books. Subsequently, he underwent intensive physical exercises, accompanied by special meals aimed at muscle growth and flexibility. Amidst all this, he continued practicing cursed energy, experiencing rapid improvements in manipulation, detection, and reinforcement, even gaining the skill [Meditation]. When the sixth week arrived, Maki, Mai, and Emma joined his training under the patriarch's orders, marking the beginning of real combat classes. The instructor asked him which weapons or fighting styles he wanted to learn from the books. To everyone's surprise, he expressed interest in mastering bow arts, swordsmanship, dual swordsmanship, nunchuck arts, dagger arts, scythe arts, spearmanship, and basic hand-to-hand combat. This ambitious choice prompted the need for additional instructors, and soon, three grade 2 sorcerers were brought in. {Current day} Two days ago, the training concluded, with Maki and Mai's instructors leaving, leaving only Emma behind. Although Emma reverted to her composed self, the time spent together was enjoyable, and the skills acquired were worth it. [Mediation LV 47/100: When meditating, the speed of cursed energy regeneration increases by 10% per level (current increase of cursed energy regeneration 470%).] [Asura Arts LV 7/100: The fusion of 6 or more combat arts. When holding an object considered a weapon in all hands, attack power increases by 10X. Grants the sub-skill proficiency shear. (All learned combat arts will be assimilated into Asura Arts). Conditions to learn: 1. Must master 6 or more weapons to the level of basic. 2. Must have a love for combat.] [Cursed Energy Manipulation Level 63/100] [Cursed Energy Detection Basic Level 46/100] [Cursed Energy Reinforcement Basic Level 35/100] Observing the skills gained and physical improvements, the boy, now standing at 5'2" with an athletic build at the age of 10, closed his eyes with a smile. Excitement filled his heart as he looked forward to his birthday the next day. 1 (POV Change - Nabiota) In a traditional Japanese-styled house, Nabiota conversed with the instructor who trained Mark. After a sip of tea, Nabiota inquired, "So, what do you think about him?" With a sigh, the instructor responded, "He is incredibly talented in combat and cursed energy manipulation. During our training, even when told to rest, I saw him practicing cursed energy manipulation. It seemed to be on a level even above mine, and frankly, sir, it may even surpass yours. I can't see the limits of his cursed energy, despite being able to identify a cursed energy trait. The main topic, though, is his demon dogs. They are special grade, which is not typical for any 10 Shadows user." Hearing this, Nabiota laughed and pulled out an ID card with Mark's picture, handing it to the instructor. "So, what do you think? Does he meet the requirements? I pulled some strings to get this, and I'd like to know if it's too early." The instructor, looking at the card, grinned before responding, "I don't disagree with this action, but if you do this, I will not back Naoya for patriarch. Mark seems the more logical choice for the betterment of the Zennin family. I'm sure many others will agree after realizing Mark's talent. So, the true question is if you are okay with your son losing his lead spot as patriarch candidate." After a few moments of contemplation, Nabiota sighed. "If Naoya can't keep up with a child, then he does not deserve the right to be the patriarch." Satisfied with the decision, the instructor nodded as Nabiota disappeared and reappeared with two bottles of scotch. They proceeded to have a discussion over a drink. (POV Change - Mark) Next day Waking up, Mark received system notifications indicating rewards for surviving until the age of ten. Checking his new skills, perks, and rank-up card, he pondered the potential and considered the impact on his position in the Zennin family. System notifications about exceeding luck 100 and receiving a new perk followed. Mark then checked his stats and skills before being interrupted by a knock on the door. Expecting Emma with a birthday cake from the patriarch, he opened the door to find a small thin case. After Emma left, Mark opened the case to find an ID card with his picture and {SPECIAL GRADE} written under it. He couldn't shake the feeling that everything was a bit too easy. Closing his eyes, he embraced the anticipation for his birthday. [END OF CHAPTER]

For god`s sake, please don`t just copy paste it; even school kids know how to use ChatGPT(ok.. exaggerated); I think u read too many MTL fics, that even this fic seems to be better, for u ; Please have a conscious and do something; we don`t have ur god level supreme poison tolerance heaven earth profound technique; but I can give u some basic technique for GPT- just copy paste there and use 'rephrase or paraphrase and change time travel to transmigration'; that`s all really simple technique unlike ur god level supreme poison tolerance heaven earth profound technique

Overall story is very confusing, Said he is a reincarnated, but slowly lost all memories & acting like a blank child but suddenly had his values & principles saying " I will not learn from someone who doesn`t want to teach", also I noticed word choice is not that good, "I prefer to learn from someone who is genuinely interested in teaching me, rather than feeling like I'm just an add-on. I don't want to disrupt their learning dynamic with Xuanyu, so I'll not learn from her.".... this kinda seems nice and make sense; also this story only focusing on Xuanyu (mc of SL4) and mostly comparing our mc`s action with his...chapter length is good, need some heavy editing for errors like Heavenly Doe, & Celestial Dou. or other dialogues, good thing is that there is no CN MTL flavor. Again feel like MC is just an addon the original story

Have nothing much to complain about but eager to read ..... tolerable OPness and expect some slow slice of life ...romcom...action ... and hopefully not excessive edgelord style after demon lord accession