An author who enjoyed reading books and novels so much, he got addicted and decided to start writing novels. Check out my new WSA Novel: Rise of the Peerless Magus
2020-07-26 Joined United States
First things off, the Readability in the first chapter is a bit shaky, but it appears to get better chapter by chapter, which is good. There are a few grammatical mistakes or sentences that make sense but are missing or word or two, but honestly, nothing too big compared to some other novels I've seen. It seems the stability of updates hasn't been completely solid but still good enough. The story is very compelling however and can induce emotions out of the reader. All in all a good read!
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I think the "I never liked around" part is missing the "I never liked to be around".
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Haha, I also enjoy comments like these as it lets me think more in-depth about my story. Thanks for reading!
ch 13 Dean Delfond Apollyon
Fantasy · Kakashi_PCB
That's a valid point to make, but what I was trying to convey is her motivation as a mother to want to protect her son. Humans are not rational all the time and even more so for a mother regarding the safety of her son. That's why parents don't always make the best decisions or rational ones when the children they love so much are being affected. Even though Raz technically didn't get injured. He was in danger for a moment that required William to use his trump card. It's like how people would do more damage than good if it meant protecting their family. Even the most saintly people would do things not befitting to their personality for their children that's just human nature and how people were biologically wired. It's why people naturally find crimes and violence against children more horrifying than violence against adults. I was just trying to convey that point in a more playful and comedic sense. Although, your opinion is very much valid.
ch 13 Dean Delfond Apollyon
Fantasy · Kakashi_PCB
I mean she might not know everything as at the moment she only knows whatever Ed has told her, which is presumably something about Raz being in danger. Plus as a mortal, it's mentioned she can't really do serious damage to her husband and is merely doing this to make sure he doesn't put Raz in danger again.
ch 13 Dean Delfond Apollyon
Fantasy · Kakashi_PCB
I'll try my best. I had a lot of exams and coursework recently so I could not update more, but I'll try.
ch 12 The Flower of Beginning
Fantasy · Kakashi_PCB
Good catch.
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Fantasy · Kakashi_PCB
I'm unsure of what you mean by describing my MC. Personality? Appearance? Ideals? Regarding romance, at the moment, there is no big female lead that has been planned to be introduced. The novel will never have romance as a truly big, time-consuming thing, and I doubt that will change as I continue to write this.
Rise of the Peerless Magus
Fantasy · Kakashi_PCB