How it's been a while since I read this maybe I forgot something which examples are you talking about?
Snape had previously disliked the Gryffindor students because they were loud-mouthed, boastful, and defenders of Muggles. He had a hostile first encounter with James and Sirius. Which made him categorize them as the two popular golden-born boys who are typical bullies and muggle defenders.
Harry Potter: I'm James Potter.
Book&Literature · Nathe07
Explain?
In the first year, when he started hanging out with supremacists, his relationship with Lily, his best friend and the girl he has a crush on, began to worsen because of his "friendships." However, now, thanks to him hanging out with James and the others, he has started to improve his relationship with Lily again.
Harry Potter: I'm James Potter.
Book&Literature · Nathe07
I understand but that was not the point of my original comment which you didn't address properly and instead assumed things. My point was disagreeing with the person I replied to. They were stating that the MC would have a hard time finding work outside of being a Ninja which I disagree with. I didn't disagree with the MC being a Ninja nor about him asking for help in training. In any case, even if I'm wrong it doesn't change the fact that your first reply to me had nothing to do with what was being discussed.
"But, I will give you my life... I can give you my mind, body, and obedience. If you can teach me to be a shinobi, I will do everything and anything you say. Your words will be commands, and I will be yours to order. You say jump; I will ask how high." Takuma matched his eyes with Maruboshi and said, "You asked why you should believe me... I'm desperate and in a corner; there's nothing I won't do to get out of it. I can see my life about to be destroyed" — it already had — "and I will do anything to get it back on track."
Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
Anime & Comics · FictionOnlyReader
We were discussing the MC alternative option other than being a Ninja and whether he would be successful or not. I agree that going the Ninja route is preferable, but he could have gone a different path and been OK. If you are here because you think I disagreed with the MC begging to be taught to be a Ninja then you would be wrong. I don't believe I made such a statement just that the MC had options.
"But, I will give you my life... I can give you my mind, body, and obedience. If you can teach me to be a shinobi, I will do everything and anything you say. Your words will be commands, and I will be yours to order. You say jump; I will ask how high." Takuma matched his eyes with Maruboshi and said, "You asked why you should believe me... I'm desperate and in a corner; there's nothing I won't do to get out of it. I can see my life about to be destroyed" — it already had — "and I will do anything to get it back on track."
Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
Anime & Comics · FictionOnlyReader
And properly communicating is important to explaining one's logic and reasoning. Again it seems you are confused about what was being discussed.
"But, I will give you my life... I can give you my mind, body, and obedience. If you can teach me to be a shinobi, I will do everything and anything you say. Your words will be commands, and I will be yours to order. You say jump; I will ask how high." Takuma matched his eyes with Maruboshi and said, "You asked why you should believe me... I'm desperate and in a corner; there's nothing I won't do to get out of it. I can see my life about to be destroyed" — it already had — "and I will do anything to get it back on track."
Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
Anime & Comics · FictionOnlyReader
How about you learn to spell properly before you question others' IQ. While you are at it how about you learn to read on what it is we were discussing.
"But, I will give you my life... I can give you my mind, body, and obedience. If you can teach me to be a shinobi, I will do everything and anything you say. Your words will be commands, and I will be yours to order. You say jump; I will ask how high." Takuma matched his eyes with Maruboshi and said, "You asked why you should believe me... I'm desperate and in a corner; there's nothing I won't do to get out of it. I can see my life about to be destroyed" — it already had — "and I will do anything to get it back on track."
Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
Anime & Comics · FictionOnlyReader
Honestly, the romance was also a big issue, but that was not because of your lack of skill more so because Gwen being an OC in a fanfiction makes it hard for the reader base to like, However, you did very well there most OC pairing in fanfiction are written far worse.
This is the end of James and his friends' journey. Thank you all for your support, comments, and power stones. Thanks to those who followed the story to the end. This was the first serious story that I wrote and finished. I'm happy about that, even though there are mistakes from which I learned with this fanfic. The main error was James's first year at Hogwarts, which was too long and had no real plot, just jokes, and relationships, but at least I enjoyed writing it XD.
Harry Potter: I'm James Potter.
Book&Literature · Nathe07
thanks for the story, even if it was rushed at least you finished.Great work
Nah, it makes sense, though who the hell throws a punch like that? I think you might have overdone it a bit, getting his butt beat was more than enough for the character development you want here. The rest seems excessive and makes it look like you are trying too hard.
He does not know how to fight, Is anyone surprised by this? I hope not, because throughout the course of the story, I've left many clues about it.
Daily Drama (In American TV Shows)
TV · Maximus_Quill
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Pokemon: Ultimate Generations
Anime & Comics · Monster_Paradise